～豆豆～改作文的小屋子(Last Updated: Oct. 17th)

豆豆～UID：2378384

这些是我修改过的一些作文，可能收录不全，我会尽量再为大家改的！希望大家能支持！谢谢！

开始上学了。。。可能不能及时跟大家交流作文，希望大家见谅！我有时间一定帮助大家！

这只是个链接用的帖子，请不要跟帖作文，大家如果有需要修改的作文可以自己帖到论坛上，请大家一起改一改，交流交流，gter上除了我还有很多人都在帮助大家。我修改了以后我会在这个帖子上做链接的，并随时更新:-)

对大家提一个小小的要求：希望以后作文的前面能尽量的把作文题目写全，这样大家交流的时候会比较方便！如果能注明是OG上的题目还是几月份JJ上的题目那更好^_^

并祝所有gter能在TOEFL中考的理想成绩！！！

作文修改链接：
01. Topic: Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

02. Topic: 是否同意在高峰期对上路的司机收费

03. Topic: Agree or disagree? People can learn more from watching television than reading books.

04. Topic: In your opinion, which one is better, to spend money on sth last for a long time, such as valuable jewelry, or spend your money on short term pleasure such as vacation?

05. Topic: Agree or disagree? Movies and televisions have more positive or more negative effects on young people's behaviors.

06. Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement ? Games are as important for adults as they are for children.

07. Topic: 选择在一个地方住还是经常搬家？

08. Topic: should pets be treated like family members?

09. Topic: Agree or disagree? The ability to cooperate well with others is more important today than in the past.

10. Topic: It has been said,"Not everything that is learned is contained in books."Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important ?why?

11. Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

12. Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

13. Topic: Are zoos necessary?

14. Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Being happy with your job is more important than high salary.

15. Topic: Does human activity improve or damage the earth?

16. Topic: A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory nearyour community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this newinfluence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory?Explain your position.

17. Topic: 社区要不要建大学？

18. Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement? Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is moreenjoyable than watching movies. Use specific reasons and examples toexplain your position.

19. Topic: It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your
answer.

20. Topic: The expression "Never, never give up" means to keep trying and neverstop working for your goals. Do you agree or disagree with thisstatement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

21. Topic: 好邻居的品质

22. Topic: Agree or disagree? It is the responsibility of the government to provide health care to everyone living in that country.

23. Topic: Some people think it isvery important to earn large amounts of money. Others just want to earna comfortable life. Analyze each viewpoint and give your own stance.

24. Topic: It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained inbooks." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience withknowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is moreimportant? Why?

25. Topic:  A teacher’s ability to relate with the students is more important than have sufficient knowledge being taught.

26. Topic: 学生该学很多课程还是只集中在某一具体学科上

[ 本帖最后由 豆豆～ 于 2007-10-17 20:39 编辑 ]

violinchemUID：2409284

顶~！
赞豆豆~！

squall3000UID：2315646

1103一战作文只拿了18，而目标学校要求作文25，天煞的，严重影响申请。现在离二战只剩10天，决定每天大小作文各一篇。
昨天把1103的真题重新拿出来写了一下，不限时完成的，还望豆豆有空的话帮忙修改啊：）

https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-770082-1-1.html

qingzi113UID：2251657

又有一篇，不知豆豆有没时间改改～～先谢谢了
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-770041-1-1.html

qingzi113UID：2251657

太感动了，豆豆今天帮我改了两篇文章里，而且都给了很好的建议，指出了我的作文中致命的问题，
thanks a lot!!!!

豆豆～UID：2378384

Already done. Plz check!;d:

qingzi113UID：2251657

刚练了一篇，我不知道自己是什么水平，感觉很烂，字数也不是很够，希望豆豆能给个评价
万分感谢 ～～～～


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https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-769145-1-1.html

qingzi113UID：2251657

那个四天制度的我写了一下，也不知道要写成什么样，希望豆豆帮忙改一下，给点意见，谢谢了
我用了半个小时写起的


Sumerize the points made in the lecture, explain how they cast doubt on the contents of reading.

According to the lecture, offering the policy of working a four-day week will not benefit company profits, the whole economic condition nor the individual life quality, which totally contradict what suggested in the reading.

To begin with, the speaker points out that hiring more employees will force the company to spend more and add additional cost, such as more costs on staff training,office places and computers. However, in the reading, the author claims that the company would increase the profit if there are some ones choose the four-day workweek policy. The lecture contradicts what the reading claims by providing evidences that adding new workers will not help to increase profits.

Moreover, according to the lecture, realizing hiring new workers would be costly, the company may not add more workers. Instead, the company will rsise the expectation on the  workers by have them to finish the same amount of work as normal work. As a result, workers who choose to work for four days a week will not feel easier. In this sense, the lecture disagrees with the opinion of the reading that this new policy can reduce the unemployment problems and can reduce the burden of the workers who adopt the new policy.

Lastly, the speaker argues that the life will not be better if the workers choose to work for four days a week. Workers will be at the risking of losing their jobs because having fewer days at work will reduce their work stability. What is more, the boss may prefer to promote those who work five days a week because they can keep a constant supervision on the work. Thus, who choose to work for four days a week will take the risk of reducing the chances for promoting. In this sense, the workers who choose the new policy will not improve their life quality as described in the reading

So, the contents in the reading passage are totally jeopardized by the speaker and the speaker has completely different ideas on the topic made in the reading.

delosUID：2274401

your revisement is such a flow and I regularly read it everyday to improve my own writing..

I really admire your writing skils and I am wondering how you writ that impressive.

YOU ROCK!

I'm also preparing the SATs and I'm thriled to see how you excell on this...I wil catch up with you in the future...

marlnoborUID：2406642

崇拜崇拜

豆豆～UID：2378384

upup

zxczvUID：2128261

豆豆，有时间可以帮忙看看这篇作文吗？谢谢了，因为积分还差点，没按格式，不好意思。多谢了
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

lqzcljlUID：2312402

原帖由 lqzcljl 于 2007-10-24 00:13 发表
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewth ... &extra=page%3D1
有时间请帮我改一下好吗？
非常感谢！！！
27号就考了，不过感觉写的不好啊

请问有时间帮我看看么~~~

谢谢啊

文一的宝宝UID：2413695

怎么把作文传给LZ目前只会用站短…………

lqzcljlUID：2312402

http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewth ... &extra=page%3D1
有时间请帮我改一下好吗？
非常感谢！！！
27号就考了，不过感觉写的不好啊