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fhxyweiUID：157384

generate是表明主要城市是一个国家文化传统的发源地

fhxyweiUID：157384

立场是：坚决反对！
提纲：
b1:城市不一定代表一个国家的文化传统
b2：即使一个国家的文化传统主要位于城市,政府在这方面的财政支持也未必能保证这个城市thrive!!


Issue10: 401 words  50 minutes
Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

I strongly disagree with this statement for the reasons that governments’ financial supports may be helpful to the flourish of a city but may help little in the preservation and development of a nation’s cultural traditions.

Firstly, I doubt that whether every nation’s cultural traditions primarily locate in its major cities. For some developed industrial nations such as America ,Japan and so on, it may be true, since the majority of population and traditional cultures of these nation congregate in their major cities. However, for some nations such as China where the number of city residents only accounts for a small proportion of its total population and their cultural traditions scatter everywhere both in broad countries and historical cities, it is not the case. To the former, funding the cities may be beneficial to the development and preservation of cultural tradition if the money allocated by the government is ensured to spend in this aspect. To the later, the financial aid to the major cities may accelerate their modernization, which could undermine the traditional cultures. For example: The ancient city, Xi’An , where more than 10 dynasties had ever set their capitals there, nowadays it has gradually become a more and more modern city as the new buildings are mushrooming every day among which the traditional buildings are submerged. Furthermore, some cultural traditions such as a minor race’s rituals and ceremonies are often ignored by the public just because they don’t live in big cities but in remote areas. Thus, nowhere in the nation has the need of financial support from the government to keep their traditions than in such remote areas.

Secondly, I concede that it is primarily in cities that a nation’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated. What’s more, the financial aids from the government are spent in protecting and developing its cultural traditions. However, no solid evidence suggests that the major cities must receive financial support to preserve and develop their cultural traditions in order to thrive. On the one hand, cultural traditions in big cities such as the famous and grand historical buildings can attract so many tourists, who can contribute the revenue to maintain their preservation. On the other hand, the prosperity of one city’s cultural traditions doesn’t represent its flourish of the city. After all, the well development and preservation of cultural traditions are just one index that indicates its flourish. Rather, many other imperative social problems such as unemployment, violence, traffic blocks and so on in a city should be more financially supported


All in all, for the two reasons above, the financial aid from the government to help major cities in a nation to develop and preserve their cultural traditions may be a waste of citizens’ tax. It is ridiculous to claim that a city, in order to thrive, must receive financial support from its government at the excuse of preserving its cultural traditions.

[ Last edited by fhxywei on 2005-6-25 at 22:32 ]

abigredUID：154473

这个主意很好啊！！

if_lotusUID：175616

Originally posted by leo_chen at 2005-6-25 19:52
各位多关照
issue36
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

已改。
建议看一下前辈的同主题写作，拓宽思路：
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... p;highlight=issue36

另外，这道题和issue241是一样的。

if_lotusUID：175616

Originally posted by fhxywei at 2005-6-25 17:06
Issue10, Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preser ...

关于in order to thrive的讨论(引用了同主题讨论贴中的一段)：

arhoo：

首先，这个in order to thrive到底是major cities的目的壮语还是government的目的壮语？可能是我的语感不地道，但我的意见是后者。如果是这样，后面的表示的原因好像能够更合理的衔接：因为大城市是文化传统的...，所以，为了繁荣，要重点扶持大城市。潜台词是：文化传统的generation和preservation是一个nation thrive的必要条件。其实就是把in order to thrive提到句首加个逗号。大家看对不对

pooh回复：

你说的有道理，我又仔细看了看，感觉这个in order to thrive是指nation, 因为这个句子开头说得是government, 所以我以前认为government没有thrive不thrive的问题。但是，我现在认为，这个government有点类似于nation, 就是指一个国家，一个民族，一个政权的意思。你说把in order to thrive放到句首，我看是可以的。
我在这一点的理解上是有点问题。

另外，为了thrive, 其实还有很多要做的呢，不仅是维护传统。

if_lotusUID：175616

fhxywei：
由于我看到了pooh和arhoo在关于“in order to thrive”问题上的讨论，你认为这个问题是不是应该按照他们俩的理解呢？

如果赞同他们的意见，即，in order to thrive指的是国家而不是city，那么恐怕你的B2要大改了。


大家讨论讨论]“Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.”中的in order to thrive到底应该指啥啊？

OB叔UID：188695

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fhxyweiUID：157384

我彻底晕了，我觉得就这个 in order  to thrive所放位置而言，可以理解为修饰government,又可以理解为修饰 the major cities.

yogurt4UID：198389

就我当时和arhoo讨论的结果,是government.

if_lotusUID：175616

呵呵，我也倾向government

if_lotusUID：175616

leo_chen：昨天正好在写issue203的提纲，今天就来改了一下你的文章，感觉你的提纲B1、B3有点跑题，如果有什么问题的话，可以拿出来和大家讨论讨论。

链接如下:https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/viewthre ... p;page=1#pid1562868

fhxyweiUID：157384

好吧，我还是用government
我也来看看issue203,你们写哪篇，我也跟着写哪篇，尽量做到同主题！

if_lotusUID：175616

恩，好，待会就去看你的文章！

我现在是有心写提纲，无力写文章啊。白天事情太多了~~一直忙到现在，555

yogurt4UID：198389

说啥呢,每天一一休,雷打不动!

along2004UID：200448

十分同意fhxywei的有关于这个isssue的论点和依据之间关系的看法：文化传统未必保存在城市中，即便在城市中，城市是否繁荣跟保存文化传统也没有必然的联系！还有一点是国家的finaical support 是否应该更多的花费在major cities，要知道这样会造成更大的地区差异和人民生活的差别，那么so that is will benefit to stability of a society?