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第一篇文章。
I partly agree withthis assertion. It is true that some empirical evidence can prove thisstatement. For example, a survey conducted in the United States shows that theratio of American college students who can read and understand complicatedarticles is 40% in 1994, and this number reduces to 31% in 2003. In themeanwhile, some kinds of literate ability, such as the capacity of composingand appreciating poems which is treated as the essence of education in classicworld, have failed to draw attention from the public any more.
However, the factthat writing and reading is less important is only true when it relates totraditional culture and literature. Besides these narrow areas, especially whenit comes to the field of applied writing and reading, people actually placemore importance on these abilities.
First of all, theability of writing and reading is fundamental skills in academic fields. Thelevel of critical thinking and information searching is vital during the courseof research. Whether a scholar can find and absorb useful information amonglarge quantities of materials quickly and effectively determines whether he canconduct his project smoothly and successfully. Moreover, according to asociology study, well-expressed dissertations are more likely to be acceptedand become popular and it is equally true in science disciplines, which issupposed to be more rational than others.
Another reason toexplain the significance of writing and reading ability is that these abilitiesare key to one’s career success. First, people who can read and write proficientlyhave larger possibility to pass admission examinations which is prerequisite tohigher education.
Second, peoplewith high levels of writing and reading abilities are easier to obtainpromotion during large organizations, like companies and government. Onecharacter of modern society is that people need to deal with large amounts of complicatedfiles and documents within a short time. This is impossible to complete forpeople who lack the ability of writing and reading. If one is acquainted withthis situation, he might not be surprised with the fact that 80% of Americancompanies engaged in service industry require language tests for theirapplicants and the money they paid for their employers’ writing classes reaches3.1 billion per year.
In sum, it isdeniable that writing and reading abilities related to traditional cultures areless important than before, however, it is unfair to enlarge this conclusion tothe whole field.

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2月4号作文修改，新年快乐

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People who go outside are more successful and happier than people who live in villages.

Considering the situation of my country, which is in the process of rapid urbanization and industrialization, I agree that people will be more successful and happier if they choose to go outside instead of staying in villages.

First, people who go outside to move to cities are easier to find jobs with higher salary and better welfare than their peers in villages. People can get better education in big cities, which is a prerequisite for a good job in most fields. They have more chances to specialize and thus they can be more competitive in force market. Moreover, most large companies establish their offices in city and factories in country, and they are inclined to hire managers in city and workers in village. As a result, a person(感觉用a person不具有代表性，建议改成those) living in city is easier to get a higher position; even his competitor shows an equal ability.

Additionally, citizens（citizens是居民，而不是专指住在城市里的人） have more ways to get relax, while villagers have much less options. It is obvious that cities have more places to make people easy and relief their stresses and tiredness. Cafeteria and restaurants provide（去掉） are perfect to meet and chat with friends. Cinemas and playgrounds are scattered throughout the city and because of the convenient transportation, people can go there in a short time. Except for various entertainment facilities, people who like reading during their leisure time can also find that books are easy to obtain either in libraries or from bookstores. In the contrast, rural life seems to be tedious and boring. Besides chatting with neighbors, television is almost the only entertainment way in many areas.

Some people may argue that people will be happier and healthier in villages because the environment is beautiful and clear. However, the reality is that because of the rapid development, the environment of rural is severely deteriorated. Deforestation leads to floods. Wildlife’s habitats are devastated because entrepreneurs need lands to expand their factories. Water is polluted, while more people get unknown ills. What’s more, farms are grabbed by local governments to construct factories or highways, and the owners can barely get anything to compensate because of unjust regulations and corrupted officials. （这部分的论述好具有中国特色。。。）People are classified into two categories according to their birthplace, and the prejudice toward peasants can be felt everywhere even in the law.


In sum, to be more successful and happier in my country, city is definitely the better choice. And people should disenchant from the illusion that they can be happier in villages. The elephant is in the room, you just don’t see it.（很好的saying）


写的很好哇~~学习了~~后悔自己这篇选择的角度是disagree，那个确实不好写。。。
一些好的单词我都用加重黑色标出来了，逻辑和语言都很清晰，很不错~

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Doyou agree or disagree with the following statement? People who go outside aremore successful and happier than people who live in villages.


Considering the situation of my country, which is in the process of rapid urbanization and industrialization, I agree that people will be more successful and happier if they choose to go outside instead of staying in villages.

First, people who go outside to move to cities are easier to find jobs with higher salary and better welfare than their peers in villages. People can get better education in big cities, which is a prerequisite for a good job in most fields. They have more chances to specialize and thus they can be more competitive in force market（than their peers in villages,个人觉得需要一个比较）. Moreover, most large companies establish their offices in city and factories in country, and they are inclined to hire managers in city and workers in village. As a result, a person living in city is easier to get a higher position; even his competitor shows an equal ability.（just successful not more happier, 我觉得不够全面）

Additionally, citizens have more ways to get relax, while villagers have much less options. It is obvious that cities have more places to make people easy and relief their stresses and tiredness. Cafeteria and restaurants provide are perfect to meet and chat with friends. Cinemas and playgrounds are scattered throughout the city and because of the convenient transportation, people can go there in a short time. Except for various entertainment facilities, people who like reading during their leisure time can also find that books are easy to obtain either in libraries or from bookstores. In the contrast, rural life seems to be tedious and boring. Besides chatting with neighbors, television is almost the only entertainment way in many areas.

Some people may argue that people will be happier and healthier in villages because the environment is beautiful and clear. However, the reality is that because of the rapid development, the environment of rural is severely deteriorated. Deforestation leads to floods. Wildlife’s habitats are devastated because entrepreneurs need lands to expand their factories. （有点多余）Water is polluted, while more people get unknown ills. What’s more, farms are grabbed by local governments to construct factories or highways, and the owners can barely get anything to compensate because of unjust regulations and corrupted officials. People are classified into two categories according to their birthplace, and the prejudice toward peasants can be felt everywhere even in the law.   （最好有一个总结）

In sum, to be more successful and happier in my country, city is definitely the better choice. And people should disenchant from the illusion that they can be happier in villages. The elephant is in the room, you just don’t see it.

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第一个分论点写的不好中间的逻辑链断了，应该加一句parents expect to raise children's grades when they give money to prais high scores.
第二个论点好像没什么问题吧。

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Do youagree with the following statement? Parents should give school-age childrenmoney for getting a high mark they get in the school.
It is undeniable that it might be effectivesometimes to give children money for high marks. However, I disagree parentsuse this method regularly because it is useless to stimulate academic performance in a long term, and it mightdamage children’s development （有点笼统，说清楚吧哪方面比较好）as well.

First, it is not always useful to raise students’ scores, since high grades need intense interests, persistentendeavors and some inherited talents.（建议别放第一句，这和给钱不给钱么关系吧OTZ） Money canmotivate children to study arduously for a while, and they may promote theirmarks during this period. However, it is helpless to cultivate children’sinterests on learning and it also fails to provide an everlasting motive forchildren to keep this status.（单薄了）

Second, it might introduce children a wrongrecognition about study. Using money as an incentive might lead a child tofocus all his attentions on study and neglect other aspects of life whichare vital to his development, such as sports, communication ability and physicalhealth.（OTZ，这里理由我怎么觉得牵强……汗，动机不对是对的，但是忽略到别的……） In order to acquire more awards students mightspend all their time in classroom and pay all attentions to academic fields. Itis, nevertheless, not a good decision. Children need to exercise to develop physical fitness. They need to spend time with theirpeers to learn how to get along and cooperate with others.
They also need to attend socialactivities,
like volunteers, to obtain identities from communities. They are much moresignificant than study.


Third, giving money for high grades might cause children to cheat in exams or fraud to their parentsto attain extra rewards. When some children used to do these things, they mightnot treat fraud as a cheating or fraud as a bad conduct and when they attendcolleges or enter society, this kind mistake may cost them heavily. An exampleof my high-school student can illustrate this point clearly. Her parents gave her pin money according to her performance in tests. Though she hated study, she wanted the money to buy clothes and make-ups. As a result, she cheatedalmost in every important exam. Finally, when she attended the admission examfor colleges, she repeated this action and caught by a strict teacher. She lostthe qualification to complete this exam and impossible to apply for any collegethat year.

没结尾呀，这段结一下也不错。

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Do you agree withthe following statement? Parents should give school-age children money forgetting a high mark they get in the school.

It is undeniable that it might be effectivesometimes to give children money for
(the,需要冠词)high marks. However, I disagree (with) parents (to) use this method regularly because it is useless to stimulate academic performance in a long term, and it mightdamage children’s development as well.



First, it is not always useful to raise students’ scores, since high grades need intense interests,persistent endeavors and some inherited talents. Money can motivate children to study arduously for a while, andthey may promote their marks during this period. However, it is helpless tocultivate children’s interests on learning and it also fails to provide aneverlasting motive for children to keep this status.


Second, it might introduce children a wrongrecognition about study. Using money as an incentive might lead a child tofocus all his attentions on study and neglect other aspects of life whichare vital to his development, such as sports, communication ability and physicalhealth. In order to acquire more awards students mightspend all their time in classroom and pay all attentions to academic fields. Itis, nevertheless, not a good decision. Children need to exercise to develop physical fitness. They need to spend time with theirpeers to learn how to get along and cooperate with others.
They also need to attend socialactivities,
like volunteers, to obtain identities from communities. They are much moresignificant than study.
(这段写的几不错呀)




Third, giving money for high grades might cause children to cheat in exams or fraud to their parentsto attain extra rewards. When some children used to do these things, they mightnot treat fraud as a cheating or fraud as a bad conduct and （我觉得这里断掉，重新成句比较好）when they attend colleges or enter society, this kind mistake maycost them heavily. An example of my high-school student can illustrate this pointclearly. Her parents gave her pin money accordingto her performance in tests. Though she hated study, she wanted the money to buy clothes and make-ups. As a result, she cheatedalmost in every important exam. Finally, when she attended the admission examfor colleges, she repeated this action and caught by a strict teacher. She lostthe qualification to complete this exam and impossible to apply for any collegethat year.（这个观点，没想到，不错收获了）


（目有结尾啊）

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17# theflyfish
改好了~

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