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WORDS: 253          TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2007-11-23 10:45:15

The arguer tends to believe that the revenue of Medicine Inc will go on increasing due to the analysis of the business analysts. At the same time, the arguer proposes that Medicine,Inc should plan to open an additional drugstore next year. A careful examination of it would reveal how groundless it is.

First, the argument is based on a hasty generalization. According to the cited analysis, drugstore's profits are unlikely to decline significantly even when a nation's economy is weak. This fact does not automatically lead to the conclusion that drugstore’s profit will increase all the time, in spite of the economic mood is in a depression or not.  What if the economic mood is strong enough next years? Does the profit still increase, or it will fall down? The arguer tells nothing about it.  It is entirely possible that when the economy is in a better situation, people spent much more time in exercise, therefore their physical condition is much better than the depression period, and subsequently decreased the profit of drugstore. So in such a situation, the revenue is decreased rather than increased.

Again, even if we assume that the general drugstore profit will increased nation wide, arguer can not safely draw the conclusion that the profit in the local area will also increased.  As we all know different places have a different condition, chances are that, while the general profit is increased all through the nation, the revenue in the local direct is still on a balance, or even probably decreased.

Finally, the arguer fails to consider some other relevant factors that may influence the revenue of the new drug store. For instance the local drugstore competitor is out of consideration. Perhaps there is already an over-mounted drug store established this year due to the optimistic drug market in the local area. And the new store will only make the situation even worse.  Moreover, opening a new store in order to promote the profit , the capitalized cost should also take into consideration.

To bolster the conclusion, the recommender should at a minimum provide the more specific drugstore profit analysis of the local area as well as exclude other interrupting factors for opening a new drugstore.   

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WORDS: 253          TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2007-11-23 10:45:15

The arguer tends to believe that the revenue of Medicine Inc will go on increasing due to the analysis of the business analysts. At the same time, the arguer proposes that Medicine,Inc should plan to open an additional drugstore next year. A careful examination of it would reveal how groundless it is.

First, the argument is based on a hasty generalization. According to the cited analysis, drugstore's profits are unlikely to decline significantly even when a nation's economy is weak. This fact does not automatically lead to the conclusion that drugstore’s profit will increase all the time, in spite of the economic mood is in a depression or not.  What if the economic mood is strong enough next years? Does the profit still increase, or it will fall down? The arguer tells nothing about it.  It is entirely possible that when the economy is in a better situation, people spent much more time in exercise, therefore their physical condition is much better than the depression period, and subsequently decreased(和前面时态要一致,用decrease) the profit of drugstore. So in such a situation, the revenue is decreased rather than increased.

Again, even if we assume that the general drugstore profit will increased nation wide, arguer can not safely draw the conclusion that the profit in the local area will also increased.  As we all know different places have a different condition, chances are that, while the general profit is increased all through the nation, the revenue in the local direct(是不是district) is still on a balance, or even probably decreased.

Finally, the arguer fails to consider some other relevant factors that may influence the revenue of the new drug store. For instance the local drugstore competitor is out of consideration. Perhaps there is already an over-mounted drug store established this year due to the optimistic drug market in the local area. And the new store will only make the situation even worse.  Moreover, opening a new store in order to promote the profit , the capitalized cost should also take into consideration.

To bolster the conclusion, the recommender should at a minimum provide the more specific drugstore profit analysis of the local area as well as exclude other interrupting factors for opening a new drugstore.   
写得好简略,觉得最后一段有些过于简单了!感觉第2段分析得很好!