Argument18 第n篇 帮忙批评一下，必回

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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：35分1秒     364 words
从2005年2月5日15时47分到2005年2月5日16时35分
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The following appeared in an editorial in a Prunty County newspaper.
'In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County recently lowered its speed limit from 55 miles per hour to 45 on all major county roads. But the 55 mph limit should be restored, because this safety effort has failed. Most drivers are exceeding the new speed limit and the accident rate throughout Prunty County has decreased only slightly. If we want to improve the safety of our roads, we should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths and resurfacing rough roads. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.'
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In the argument, the arguer recommends that the PC(Prunty County) should undertake the same kind of road improvement project that BC(Butler County) completed. To substantiate the conclusion, the arguer cites some relevant evidences, however, the conclusion is unconvincing for several critical fallacies. My reasons are as follows:

In the first place, it is groundless to judge the failure of the safety effort by most drivers of exceeding the speed limits and slightly decreasing. Exceeding the new speed limit possibly means that the drivers have not noticed the importance of the safety, and we should take some measures to improve drivers to give certain notice to the new speed limit while blame the limit. Otherwise, the new policy is just applied and it begins to put little effect, so the arguer makes a hasty conclusion. Maybe the accident rate will decrease before long.

In the second place, the arguer makes false analogy between these two countries. For one thing, the arguer fails to provide the comparison between these two countries' accident rates. If BC's accident rate is higher than PC's after its improvement, thus this improvement is not worthy of undertaking; for another thing, no evidence show the quality of PC’s road is bad. We can not rule out the possibility that the quality PC' road is better than BC's after its improvement, for example, PC's lane widths is larger than BC's, therefore, the improvement project is not necessary to PC. Improvement only means wasting money.

Finally, though fewer accidents are reported these years, it is likely that during these five years the drivers pay more attention to safety, so it is individual minds not the improvement project and speed limit that make the accidents rate decrease. Thus, if PC would like to decrease the accident rate, they should strive to guide the drivers to obey the rule and improve the safety minds.

To sum up, the argument is well presented but not well reasoned and the evidences could not strongly support the conclusion. The arguer should supply some detailed evidences about the comparisons between these two countries, additionally, the arguer should do some research to find out the true reason of the accident rate.

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No.1 Argument18 第n篇 帮忙批评一下，必回
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户 共用时间：35分1秒 364 words
从2005年2月5日15时47分到2005年2月5日16时35分
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The following appeared in an editorial in a Prunty County newspaper.
'In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County recently lowered its speed limit from 55 miles per hour to 45 on all major county roads. But the 55 mph limit should be restored, because this safety effort has failed. Most drivers are exceeding the new speed limit and the accident rate throughout Prunty County has decreased only slightly. If we want to improve the safety of our roads, we should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths and resurfacing rough roads. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago.'
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In the argument, the arguer recommends that the PC(Prunty County) should undertake the same kind of road improvement project that BC(Butler County) completed. To substantiate the conclusion, the arguer cites some relevant evidences,; however, the conclusion is unconvincing for several critical fallacies. My reasons are as follows:

In the first place, it is groundless to judge the failure of the safety effort by most drivers of exceeding the speed limits and slightly decreasing. In fact, exceeding...Exceeding the new speed limit possibly means that the drivers have not noticed the importance of the safetyexceeding the new speed limit possibly means that the drivers has noticed the new speed limit , and we should take some measures to improve drivers to give certain pay attention tonotice to the new speed limit while rather than blame the limit. Otherwise, the new policy is just applied and but it begins to put little effect, so the arguer makes a hasty conclusion. Maybe the accident rate will decrease before long.

In the second place, the arguer makes false analogy between these two countries. For one thing, the arguer fails to provide the comparison between these two countries' accident rates. If BC's accident rate is higher than PC's after its improvement, thus"thus" should be deleted this improvement is not worthy of undertakingnot worthy of being undertaked; for another thing"thing" should be deleted, no evidence show the quality of PC’s road is bad. We can not rule out the possibility that the quality PC' road is better than BC's after its improvement, for example, PC's lane widths is larger than BC's, therefore, the improvement project is not necessary to PC. Improvement only means wasting money.

Finally, though fewer less accidents are reported these years, it is likely that during these five years the drivers pay more attention to safety, so it is individual minds not the improvement project and speed limit that make the accidents rate decrease. Thus, if PC would like to decrease the accident rate, they should strive to guide the drivers to obey the rule and improve the safety minds.

To sum up, the argument is well presented but not well reasoned and the evidences could not strongly support the conclusion.to better evaluate the argument, The arguer should supply some detailed evidences about the comparisons between these two countries, additionally, the arguer should do some research to find out the true reason of the accident rate

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