生如夏花小组--第6次作业

bluecathyUID：2231215

生如夏花小组--第6次作业
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The lecture and the reading discuss the issue of tourism in the past and in modern times. In the lecture, the professor puts out 3 points and basically proves the opinion of the reading.

First of all, the professor claim that humans in the past traveled to distant lands because of the political and economical reasons, either for conquest or colonization. The very point is similar to what has been demonstrated in the reading, which points out that humans travel in search of different sources to sustain themselves and establish colonies. And the professor also claims in the lecture that people nowadays travel for adventure, which has also been mentioned in the reading. And both the lecture and the reading take great writer Hemingway's big game hunt in Africa as an example to prove this point.

Secondly, the professor's claim that the ethnic tourism had more and more prevailed nowadays also have been referred in the reading. According to the lecture, people travel long distance to some traditional villages to seek unusual culture such as customs and ceremonies and enjoy local aboriginal culture such as dances and songs. And the reading also takes the example of the wealthy European youth's "grand tour" to prove that traveling could expand cultural horizon.

Moreover, the lecture also discusses that people travel and take photographs for observing environment and learning from nature. This also could be found in the reading that people travel to observe and preserve natural world such as Charles Darwin's study. Consequently, the professor's opinion approves that of the reading.

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很久没写了，今天连句子都不会造了。请多加批评。

[ 本帖最后由 bluecathy 于 2007-7-15 01:17 编辑 ]

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The lecture and the reading discuss the issue of tourism in the past and in modern times. In the lecture, the professor puts out 3 points and basically proves the opinion of the reading.(起始段这么写很好啊，简明扼要)

First of all, the professor claim that humans in the past traveled to distant lands because of（for） the political and economical reasons, either for conquest or colonization. The very point is similar to what has been demonstrated in the reading, (这里的逗号感觉后面的which指代不清楚，而且“，which”中的which一般指代逗号前的一句句子，改成the idea demonstated in the reading)which points out that humans travel in search of different sources to sustain themselves and establish colonies. And the professor also claims in the lecture that people nowadays travel for adventure, which has also been mentioned in the reading. And both the lecture and the reading take great writer Hemingway's big game hunt in Africa as an example to prove this point.

Secondly, the professor's claim that the ethnic tourism had（become） more and more prevailed nowadays also have been referred in the reading. According to the lecture, people travel long distance to some traditional villages to seek unusual culture such as customs and ceremonies and enjoy local aboriginal culture such as dances and songs. And the reading also takes the example of the wealthy European youth's "grand tour" to prove that traveling could expand cultural horizon.

Moreover, the lecture also discusses that people travel and take photographs for observing environment and learning from nature. This also could be found in the reading that people travel to observe and preserve natural world such as Charles Darwin's study.

Consequently, the professor's opinion approves that of the reading.(这句总结句不如另起一段)

总的来说，我觉得你写得很好。思路很清晰，能很好地联系READING和LISTENING，而且还能把例子也阐述进去~