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纪晓晴 发表于 2015-4-19 11:27
老师好，最近看了几个关于technology 和government funds的题目 但都感觉没什么思路。。不知道要从什么角度 ...

谢谢老师！又把第一段重新改了一下， 大概就是认为政府资金有限所以一定要投入到造福人类的research上， 但是很难辨别哪一种research可以造福人类 因为有些科学是在间接地帮助我们，因此政府应资助不同种类的科学研究，因为他们都是在benefit the public.
不知道这样写可不可以呀？
Since the government funds are limited, the use of it should maximize the benefits. In other word, it needs to serve the people to the great extent. However, it is hard to make a clear decision whether it is beneficial or not. Thus scientists should focus on various scientific researches, because some of them have conspicuous benefits and others benefit the society in a more implicit way.

KssandraUID：2766998

谢谢老师的建议，昨天的issue 7修改了一下，仍然贴在了89楼。

Issue 8有点难，感觉是挤牙膏挤出来的，超时了近10分钟才写完，写完后结构还大改过。写的时候着急，拼写错误貌似也变多了。

主要问题是：1 没想到合适的例子，2 题目提到的细节很多，把握不住。这个five years在我的文章中并没有特别强调，因为出来得莫名其妙，实在是不知道该怎么回应。

谢谢老师~

纪晓晴UID：3561823

老师好~这是issue87的提纲 感觉不是特别好写，不知道如何分类会更好，之前想的是事实在不同时间不一致，在不同地点不一致这样的分类，提纲上写的是按照领域来分类，不知道哪一个更好写呢？谢谢老师的点评！

87) Claim: Any piece of information referred to as a fact should be mistrusted, since it may well be proven false in the future.
Reason: Much of the information that people assume is factual actually turns out to be inaccurate.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

Since fact by no means can be indefensible all the time and they may be corrected at certain time in the future, someone claims that we should be skeptical to all the facts due to their contingent incorrect feature. I think this is valid in many fields such as science and political, which may take years to find out the truth. However, in some fields such as the engineer or medical, the practical scientific field, this statement may not hold true.

In the field of science, correct perception of the issue can be obstacle by the technology or the time period and so on. So it is easily for scientists to make an inaccurate postulation. Thus, we need to be always aware of the limitation in certain facts. 随着人类技术的发展 尤其是望远镜，海王星一度被认为是行星 的事实被推翻，科学家们的怀疑精神重新定义了既定的事实

In addition, facts in the political field should be doubted as well. Since politicians sometimes can manipulate the mass media and other devices, they can fabricate some false and propaganda it which finally turns into the truth. 中国古代帝王借神学来巩固自己的地位， 认为自己是代表上天的旨意，并将一些天文现象证明自己身份的方式。

However, in the field that can have an immediate result, the facts should not be denied, because in most circumstance it is backed up by the empirical evidence. In the field of railroad construction 高寒地区建设铁路一度认为是不可能的 因为生态脆弱以及冻土tundra的存在,但是青藏高原地区的铁路否定了这一看法，证明这是可能的，用事实来证明它的真实性

KssandraUID：2766998

Issue10超时了3分钟左右，30分钟刚好写完了倒数第二段。写完以后觉得“consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position”的部分做的不好，给中间三段每一段又增加了一些内容。

这个题目感觉比较困难，原因有 ，1 觉得题意模糊不好把握，有很多种细化的方法；2 话题不是很贴近日常生活，平常没有认真思考过这个问题，一开始感觉难以理论；3 仍然是因为话题不熟悉，觉得找不到合适的例子。

Wildland这个词不知道为啥总是被word和论坛网页划出红色的下划线，但是我查了一下这个说法应该是有的，所以保留了。

谢谢王老师！:)

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纪晓晴 发表于 2015-4-22 22:47
老师好~这是issue87的提纲 感觉不是特别好写，不知道如何分类会更好，之前想的是事实在不同时间不一致，在不 ...

咱们也来互改一下吧~

这个题目有点难，而且我觉得举例子的时候很棘手。我觉得你的例子1好像是很主观的分类的感觉。。。因为是人们认为海王星（也许你是想说冥王星？它现在又变回行星了，叫做矮行星）是行星，或者说大家的分类方式在变化。其实白天鹅黑天鹅的著名例子回应这个题很好的。

我觉得可能是按领域来讨论好一些。。。比如说很多数学上的fact可以被证明，将来也很难推翻说是假的。在很多其他领域都比较好找到一些同意题目的例子。

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老师好！拖延党还没来得及仔细看完您博客的所有文章，今天先计时做了个很简单的issue.倒计时一开始脑子里一片空白，什么提纲结构就都忘了，到点写出了如下的东西，自己又看了遍，改了改语法和拼写就发上来了，算是最真实水平的反应，求老师批判！如果老师时间不多，不用逐字逐句（太渣我自己都不好意思），就狠骂两句2分党，让我回去练习思过就好了。。。

32) College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

College education are essential for youngsters who are going to step into job markets, and the curriculum they choose during college are germane to their future career. However, it is not fair to determine that college student must choose their fields of studies according to the availability of jobs.

Firstly, studying in a certain field is not a guarantee of getting jobs in this area. If a student in lack of basic qualities required in some subject, for example, mastering of mathematical skills for a finance studies, chooses to enroll in a similar program just because jobs on stock markets and insurance companies are plenty and lubricative, he or she may not be able to finish the study, let alone to achieve his/her primary target, which is to get a popular job.

Secondly, availability of jobs may change even over a period as short as four years. Requirements of talents of an industry which took in a lot of fresh blood in the past few years may decline. Take internet industry for instance, in its early years of booming, a great amount of practitioners are needed, hence many colleges expanded their programs related to  computer science and internet. However, in a few years, bubbles bursted, and many graduates found it very hard to find jobs in internet industry. Therefore, judging a field of study can't be based on the availability of jobs in a certain moment.

Last but not least, another major mission for colleges, aside from cultivating employees for different industries, is to select students with passion and talents in certain fields and make them into pioneers such as researchers, scholars, and scientists. For example, archeology has never been considered as a major that will attract many employers aside from museums and research institutions, however, a student with highly potentials in this area must not abandon his/her passion simply because it is hard to get jobs. Otherwise, a great archeologist to-be might just end up becoming a mediocre businessman. Therefore, it is very important for student to choose majors according to their own interest, skills, and qualities.

To sum up, when choosing their fields of study, availability of jobs in a certain industry is an important reference, however, to fully explore one's potential,  college student must refer to many other aspects, including their interest, capability, etc.

纪晓晴UID：3561823

Kssandra 发表于 2015-4-21 12:23
谢谢老师的建议，昨天的issue 7修改了一下，仍然贴在了89楼。

Issue 8有点难，感觉是挤牙膏挤出来的，超 ...

谢谢姐姐的点评！手残打了个海王星出来TAT 我再多查一些例子出来 每次觉得纯说理都说不出什么来。。。‘
我觉得ISSUE8的论证都很好，不过可以把中间段的首句和尾句改一下和题目更贴切一点， 比如第二段可以说the term limitation can prevent the corruption effectively. 虽然每一段都是围绕在位时间过长造成的影响但是关键词 tenure 却没有点出来
第二段的诺基亚的例子只是寥寥几笔 个人觉得其实可以不用写了呀，主要立足于罗斯柴尔德家族可能会更好！
个人愚见 仅供参考~

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Kssandra 发表于 2015-4-23 10:58
Issue10超时了3分钟左右，30分钟刚好写完了倒数第二段。写完以后觉得“consider the possible consequences ...

想问一个关于分类标准的小问题， 第三类环境与人类活动冲突的这个方面会不会和前两类冲突了呢？个人觉得这个题目的前提就是二者是冲突的 要在何种情况下选一个the second best？？

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這兩天病了 明天再看大家的習作

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-4-23 21:14
這兩天病了 明天再看大家的習作

辛苦老师了！老师先好好休息才是啊~

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-4-23 21:14
這兩天病了 明天再看大家的習作

老师好好休息~！不着急，我们可以先互相帮忙~

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纪晓晴 发表于 2015-4-23 20:22
想问一个关于分类标准的小问题， 第三类环境与人类活动冲突的这个方面会不会和前两类冲突了呢？个人觉得这 ...

囧。。是啊，第三段有点挤牙膏的感觉，而且觉得主题句写的不好，写的其实不是我这一段表达的意思。本来是想说根据不同人的情况分别制定法律，我再考虑改一改。
谢谢你的建议~

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纪晓晴 发表于 2015-4-23 20:09
谢谢姐姐的点评！手残打了个海王星出来TAT 我再多查一些例子出来 每次觉得纯说理都说不出什么来。。。‘
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是啊，经常有说不出道理又想不出例子来的时候。。。

好的，谢谢你的建议！
第二段本来是想并列关系，一个例子写两句的，写完后发现第一个例子说的太长，第二个例子内容不足又太短= =

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Kssandra 发表于 2015-4-24 09:58
是啊，经常有说不出道理又想不出例子来的时候。。。

好的，谢谢你的建议！

你考的哪道题？ 记得回来报分哦

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-4-25 18:55
你考的哪道题？ 记得回来报分哦

咦？我还没考~7月份考呢