Daffi
LZ帮忙修改一下吧, 谢谢.
Is it better to let a friend make a mistake than saying or doing something that would end the friendship? (421 words)
When one of your friends get trapped in a trouble, and in your opinion, the solutions he/she decides on will do him/her harm. What will you do then? To let him/her go ahead as he/she (s/he)decides, or to say or do something to prevent him/her from the mistakes (in which way you also take the risk of ending (devastating your friendship, 题目能够改写的还是要改写) ? “To be, or not to be, it is a question.” As far as I am concerned, I would prefer to let him/her have a (another) try.
For one thing, since one could never predict the exact future, it is irresponsible to assume what the other does will be a “mistake”(这个分论点有点偏题!注意要紧紧围绕题目写!). Even you think you have exactly the same experience, and the result is a nightmare, the story of your friend may still have another ending. To assume one would definitely fail is quite presumptuous. So(= thus. Hence, accordingly= consequently, 以后最好用这些词来引出结果, so不太正式。), before one decide to say or do something to prevent his/her friend from “mistakes”, I think he/she should stop for a while, and check his/her way of thinking first: what is the probability that the friend’s deeds will be followed by a bad consequences? Has he/she taken every factor into consideration?
(由于你的第一个主体段写偏题了,题目明显说了let him/her make a mistake, mistake是关键词, 必定要写。而你的这个主体段却说irresponsible to assume it is a mistake。所以我重写了一段,希望对你有所帮助:
For one thing, nothing is perfect and no one could be free from making mistakes--- that a friend may make mistakes some day is inevitable. In this sense, the quality of tolerance is essential for a good friend. Perhaps it would suffice to mention one of my dear friends, Iris, who possesses a nature of tolerance and patience. Once I visited her house and carelessly damaged one of her favorite ship models. It scared me a great deal then and I thought such a “fatal” mistake might destroy our friendship. Surprisingly (at least at that time), Iris did not turn out annoyed after knowing that. Conversely, she asked patiently how it happened. After I told her the truth, she finally forgave me for it was just an unpredictable incident and she warned me to be careful next time. Many years have gone since that incident and I still believe it is the quality of tolerance maintaining the valuable friendship between Iris and me for years. )
For another, if making suggestions would “end the friendship”, it follows that the possibility your friend will listen and accept your suggestion is very low (Chances are remote for your friends to accept your suggestion.). A good example in this case is (a) woman in love: one of your female friends is having affair with a guy who, in your eyes, will not give her any future. Say or do something pushy? It is always useless. ( A woman in love is nothing but a love idiot (这句话可能写得有点偏激,毕竟我连GF都还没有,没感受过。). She just cannot stop loving her beloved.) Then what is the meaning to do something that you know from the start is useless?
(在英文中最好不要写没有回答的问句。最后一句建议改成: In this sense, it is of no use to make an effort to try to change her mind, which is scarcely possible.)
Last but not the least, in most cases, it is always benefical to make mistakes. The development of human being is a process of trial-and-error. Only through making mistakes could one know where his or her deficiency lies. After errors there could be more targeted trials, and more errors, and more trials. It is only through this way that people become more mature both in mental and in skill. I cannot imagine a child can learn to walk until thousands of fall downs. Then why prevent your friend from errors?
Someone may argue, what should you do then, when you think your friend is making a wrong decision? Just let him/her go? No. As a friend, I think one could make suggestions, kind and rational, reasons listed and presented. But remember: always keep the right of choice up to your friend.
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