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Technology, plays a considerable role in people's daily life today, brings about numerous significant improvements in every aspect of our lives as well as some destructive problems. However, does technology create more problems than it solves? Which takes more weight? The author contents(contends) that technology gives us more negative effect. Whilst(这个词第一次看到,可以这么用吧?) in my view, technology benefits us rather than threatens or damages us.
Since the steamer born to the world, the first revolution of technology began taking effects to(on) human beings progress. The rapid progresses made by human reflect the valuable(value) of using of technology. The development of traffic: buses, cars, trains, planes to(even) the most advanced spaceship helps human beings conquer the long distance between different countries, even different planets. After the second revolution of technology, in the communication field, distinct changes happened: the telephone which offers people a(an) entire new way to keep touch with each other; the television which can broadcast(transmit) a lively picture of matters happened in the other sphere(spheres) of the world. Today, E-mail has substituted the place of the letter, and the mobile phone solves the problem of businessmen who expect to own a mobile telephone(这句不好,). All these innovation are the result of using technology. Without technology, we may still live in a primitive world where involve with thousands of inconvenience we cannot imagine.
Moreover, the using of modern technique on medical science makes people living a healthier condition. The genetic program that contributes much to prolonging(prolong) our life has made us possible to live even after suffering from heavy diseases. Many diseases (were )considered to be uncured in the past, now just take some "magic" pills can solve the problem. Where does such magic come from? Technology. The same way can be used in scientific research and other places. All these display that technology have (has) helping(helped) people settle various problems, offering us much profit.
Admittedly, with the development of technology, some defects contaminate the absolute positive use of technology. For example, the pollution of our environment to some extent is due to the development of technology; the abuse of modern technology also constitutes the conflict between human beings. By technology, people invent weapons, even nuclear weapons which used to fight between different racialisms and human, threatening our normal lives. The World War Two showed us the terrible disastrous memories, telling that the misusing can be damage the master of technology. At the same time, the techniques of human cloning arouse the worldwide is another controversial event. However, such results can be solved and controlled well if people take care of and pay attention to these. (这段可不可以写成,虽然科技也有坏影响,但是希望人们努力去克服或者去避免再发生)
Technology is the wisdom of human beings used to help people to live better and healthier, whose the original goal is surely to improve our quality of life, society and to make our world more beautiful and colorful. Despite it brought about some by-products we didn't expect, the benefits of the technology have overweighed the drawbacks derived from it. In summary, technology helps people solve much more problems than the problem it creates, there is no need for us to be afraid of that it may threaten or damage the quality of our lives.
总体来说,写的不错,语言能力比较强,就是第二段稍微弱了点,思维也很清晰,不错,继续加油
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