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首先谢谢你的修改哈,呵呵,现在我要开动了!
TOPIC: ISSUE178 - "It is possible to pass laws that control or place limits on people's behavior, but legislation cannot reform human nature. Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts and minds."
WORDS: 653 TIME: 00:45:00 DATE: 2007-8-8 12:18:00
没来得及写完,但是最后一层勉强收完了, 差个结尾。 为了保证真实性,只改了拼写和语法的错误。 欢迎互拍~~~
Laws, the basic regulations for the smooth of a society, are playing an undeniable role in keep our society in order and harmony. But as to the question whether it can change what is in people's heart and mind, largely, I agree with the author. It, though there might be any, can not affect much in hearts and mind.(我觉得开头除了摆明立场以外,简单说一下你最主要的理由会让看的人更明确你要论证的是什么。呵呵,不过有时候我也觉得这个挺困难的,提个建议啦)
Superficially, it is because the laws are merely regulations enacted by the force of government, no explanation is made.(这句话太武断了吧?政府实施的法律就可以没有任何解释吗?) When we want to change someone's opinion, we should first tell them reasons and examples-just as what I am doing now.(这句话跟文章关系不是太大,而且降低了文章的严肃性,太口语化了) Consider, a teacher what(want) to tell a student that he should do homework first. She might talk a lot about the importance of study, and then cite examples of someone who was excellent in studies and finally turned out to be successful. However, when it comes to laws our society does not do the same thing. Mostly, they just tell us: not to kill, or you will be punished; not to steal, or you will be prisoned; not to rob, or you will be captured. See? The government need not to provide a reason or example to show us that the laws is needed or things like that. Most of the time we are only told to obey it and the result of being against of it is what we can not afford. In such cases, no reasons and examples, no communication in spirit, not to mention changing one's thought.(这个观点有一点独特哦,政府没有告诉理由就不能改变人的思想?用老师和学生的那个例子能够推出政府对普通百姓吗?我觉得这存在逻辑上的问题,根本不可相比。政府制定的法律对于普通百姓来说,多是可以理解的,就算政府不提供解释,每个人自己应该都知道为什么要遵守吧,特别是你所举的杀人,偷盗和抢劫。而学生和老师的关系就不一样了,而且你能说老师举了例子学生的思想就发生改变了吗?)
If we dig one step further, we would find that almost it is due to be so-from the essence of laws we should not expect that they can change our minds, because they are not intended to. (这句话很不错,吸引我看下去)What is the function of a law? A more significant function of it is balance the competing interests.(不知道是不是可以这么表达) For example, works(workers) and bosses might be in contradiction-for bosses want them to work more with less money while works want the opposite. Then laws choose a position in between so that each side make a compromise and agreement is reached. What is the intention of laws? Laws, originated from natural need, commenced when people found it necessary to rule themselves together for maximum benefits. See the common place in its function and intention? Yes initially they need agreement and willingness of people. (感觉太口语化了)That is to say, laws are designed according to the thoughts of current society. Laws are not intended to change our mind but to be agree with the basic common will of a society. (文章没有说laws are not intended to change human's mind,目的如何和实际发挥了什么作用不是一回事。还是逻辑问题。可能法律的目的不在此,但同时发挥了这个作用)For supporting examples we need look no further than the controversial issue of abortion. In western countries it is certainly considered immoral and is surely banned by law, while in other countries, such cruel deeds are allowed by laws. Why? Because people in different countries with different cultural and religious background share different views and laws are designed to meet the common will and agreement of the critical mass of a nation. We are not designing laws that enable abortion in western countries to change their mind. So, since it is not intended for change the mind but to agree, it can not make differences in our mind.
But, for supplement, although laws has few to do in changing one's mind, it can, to some extent, facilitate the progress of changes in mind, if such change is on the run. For example, between the civil war, when the northern people and several people in the southern states are calling for freedom of the African Americans, Lincoln abolished the laws that allow slavery. After wining the war, it was forced into the southern states. Although it might be the truth that people there were not well prepared for such a change. But when it became a fact that black had the equal rights with them, gradually, this force of laws can make them accept the fact better.(接受了事实是不是说明他们的思想发生了变化?)
我也是个不说好话的哈, 语言有时候太口语化了,文章的逻辑性有待提高,例子也不是太到位, 继续努力啊。 |
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