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本帖最后由 yogurt4 于 2010-6-27 00:32 编辑
关于Argument的开头在北美范文里面就没有看过少于3句话的.斑竹这么一说我有点晕.能否举个好点的例子来看看啊?那些错误就像做工作一样永远都数不完,一个纠正了会有另一个站起来,我感觉能否弄一篇短小精炼的文来详细分 ...
短发mm 发表于 2010-6-26 23:09
我是觉得把argu题目完全复述一遍没有必要。北美范文不是ETS范文,就权威性来说绝对及不上ETS范文。北美范文还存在文章质量鱼龙混杂的问题,拿北美范文做参考,请带挑剔的眼光。
好了,我们现在来看ETS的官方范文,先提供一下官方范文的下载地址:
https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-708966-1-1.html
来看第一篇argu范文:
题目:Six months ago the region of Forestville increased the speed limit for vehicles traveling on the region's highways by ten miles per hour. Since that change took effect, the number of automobile accidents in that region has increased by 15 percent. But the speed limit in Elmsford, a region neighboring Forestville, remained unchanged, and automobile accidents declined slightly during the same six-month period. Therefore, if the citizens of Forestville want to reduce the number of automobile accidents on the region's highways, they should campaign to reduce Forestville's speed limit to what it was before the increase.
6分范文的开头:The agrument is well-presented, but not thoroughly well-reasoned. By making a comparison of the region of Forestville, the town with the higher speed limit and therefore automobile accidents, with the region of Elmsford, an area of a lower speed limit and subsequently fewer accidents, the argument for reducing Forestville's speed limits in order to decrease accidents seems logical.
ETS对6分范文开头的点评:This outstanding essay begins by noting that the argument "seems logical."
我对点评的理解:这篇对开头没有什么特别明显的褒贬评价,对比习作来看,正文辩驳错误的段落展开的很充分,显然这样的开头没有影响到作者写主体正文的时间。
再看第二篇argu范文,同样来自6分作文:
题目:The following appeared as a letter to the editor of a local newspaper.
"Five years ago, we residents of Morganton voted to keep the publicly owned piece of land known as Scott Woods in a natural, undeveloped state. Our thinking was that, if no shopping centers or houses were built there, Scott Woods would continue to benefit our community as a natural parkland. But now that our town planning committee wants to purchase the land and build a school there, we should reconsider this issue. If the land becomes a school site, no shopping centers or houses can be built there, and substantial acreage would probably be devoted to athletic fields. There would be no better use of land in our community than this, since a large majority of our children participate in sports, and Scott Woods would continue to benefit our community as natural parkland."
6分范文的开头:This letter to the editor begins by stating the reasons the residents of Morganton voted to keep Scott Woods in an undeveloped state. The letter states that the entire community could benefit from an undeveloped parkland. The residents of the town wanted to ensure that no shopping centers or houses would be built there. This, in turn, would provide everyone in the community with a valuable resource, a natural park.
ETS对6分范文开头的点评:This outstanding response begins somewhat hesitantly; the opening paragraphs summarize but do not immediately engage the argument. However, the subsequent paragraphs target the central flaws in the argument and analyze them in almost microscopic detail.
我对点评的理解:这篇ETS对开头的喜好就表达的非常明显。somewhat hesitantly, do not immediately engage the argument, however,这三点足以说明即使是ETS都不赞成那种重复题目内容的开头。AW考试是应试作文,对于应试作文,从哪里考察考生的能力?当然是新的内容。新的内容,那肯定就不是重复题目了。 |
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