sarah666 发表于 2013-10-29 14:46
It seems necessary for me to quit the habit of procrastination. Sorry for being late.
Hah, a commonplace problem.
Thx for the meticulous revise. So embarrassing for leaving so many little flaws.
Most of your comments have been accepted and appreciated, except:
1) If having ... I originally wrote "If you have participated... you'll learn ...", but I noticed the redundancy of subject "you". So I deleted the "you" in the if clause and modified "have" to "having". I think there is nothing wrong. But your advise is welcomed.
2) make vs making. I wanted to express "help you convey and thus (help you) make your listeners...". Maybe a little bit trivial. "that could help you convey clearly your thoughts and ideas to the listeners, making your listeners more inclined to your side. "
Anyway, thx again:)