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发表于 2012-4-8 21:00:29 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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求问：
1. 如果考试无法在规定时间内写完错误点是不应该直接结尾？
2. 一篇arg出现两种观点（作者批驳第一种观点ex: arg46或陈述两种观点ex:arg74）应该怎么办？

题目：
arg46 ”Medical experts say that only one-quarter ofCorpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness,even though twenty years ago...."

文章如下，求喷...

   In the analysis, the arguer suggests a causal relationship between the recent decline in citizens’ fitness and the decline in economy.  To refute the conclusion the experts make, which suggests a relationship between computers use and declining fitness, the arguer cites the facts that citizens in those regions where computer ownership are highest are overall under fit health conditions.  To substantiate his conclusion, the arguer also provides evidence that the expenditures on fitness –related products and services are low, which suggests that it’s decline in economy that results in the decline in citizen’s fitness. This argument seems convincing at first glance, however, it’s unwarranted for several critical flaws.

   Citing the facts that citizens overall fitness in regions where levels of computer ownership are highest, the arguer question the conclusion drawn by the experts.  However, high ownership does not equate high frequency of computer use.  Besides, while we are informed that the people’s fitness in which has the highest ownership of computers, we have no idea of people who don’t have a computer are as healthy as they ought to be.  Otherwise it’s entirely possible that those people in regions of highest computer ownership are generally the healthiest people. Absent of all these information, it’s unwarranted to claim that fitness has no relation with computer use.

   To promote his suggestion, the arguer provides the facts that this year’s expenditures on fitness-related products and services are unusually low. However, the arguer fails to establish a relationship between the fitness-related products and citizen’s fitness as well as the relationship between these products and the economy condition.  Firstly, while informed that the expenditures on the fitness-related products and services are unusually low, it does not follow that it’s the cause of the decline in citizen’s fitness.  In contrast, low expenditures on these products may reveal the better health condition of the citizens because they are much healthier and thus less in need of these products.  Besides, we only know the expenditures in this year is low, while having no idea of whether it has also been low in the past several years, we have every reason to doubt the claim that it’s the cause of the “recent” decline in citizen’s fitness these years.

   Secondly, a decline in expenditures on fitness-related products and services does not equate a same decline in economy. While the latter may have an effect on the former one, there may be other reason explaining this decline in fitness-related products, for example, the only decline in the fitness-related industry and people’s less need and dependence of it.

   To sum up, the argument Is not convincing as it stands. To strengthen this argument, the arguer has to establish a causal relationship between the decline in fitness and the low expenditures in fitness-related products, as well as the relevance between the low expenditures in these products and economy decline; To better evaluate the argument, we need more information about the citizens’ fitness and computer ownership in order to be fully persuaded that the latter one will not result in decline in the former one.

argument46, 两种观点