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发表于 2004-12-31 19:54:29 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

------ISSUE42 题目------
Because learning is not a solitary activity but one that requires collaboration among people, students of all ages will benefit academically if they work frequently in groups.
由于学习不是一种孤立的行为而是需要人们之间的合作的，所以各种你年龄的学生如果经常小组学习的话就会在学术上受益匪浅。

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The speaker claims that students of all ages will benefit academically if they work frequently in groups, for the reason that learning is not a solitary activity but one that requires collaboration among people. As far as I am concerned, however, collaboration among people only plays an assistant role; overall, learning is a solitary activity.

Admittedly, the whole life of a person is a continuous process of solitary learning. When we were born, our world like a blank paper-knowing nothing. However, accompanying with our growing, through solitary and active learning, we gradually began to know the world and accumulate knowledge and experiences. Before school, we mainly learn some common sense from our parents, for instance, the sky is blue, there are 24 hours in a day, keeping hygiene is a good manner etc.; Then when we enter school, we learn from books, such as logic, rhetoric, history, moral and so on, which contribute to the well-development of our personalities; Finally we emerged in society and learn from it. For example, with the development of society the relationship among people becomes more and more complex, then we had to learn how to get along with others. Overall, from birth to death there are no circumstances that person does not need solitary learning.

However, solitary learning could be greatly improved by communicating and discussing during collaboration. Because communication could make us easily find our own shortcoming, which is just the direction for our solitary learning; it also could broaden our views and then stimulate our inspirations; at the same time we could learn other person's merits by collaboration. For instance, it is through collaboration, through continuous discussing, mutual learning and encourage, Karl Marx and Friedrich Engels finally got their achievements respectively. Similarly, in the collaboration with his own instructor, Faraday's inspiration was stimulated and ultimately the famous Faraday's Law was found. All of these tell us that collaboration is one of the most effective approaches to improve and guide our solitary learning.

For the above reason, it is true that students of all ages will benefit academically if they work frequently in groups, since during collaboration and communication, young one could learn experiences and knowledge from old one, in turn younger students' novel thoughts and active attitude could stimulate the inspiration and passion of older students. However, without solitary learning as basis, the collaboration would lose its meaning. Let us suppose that a group of ignorant students-that is, students absent enough solitary learning, when they collaborate to do one experiment, can we simply say that they could benefit academically, since each of them even could not understand the experiment, not even considering communication, discuss or putting forward any valuable suggestion. In short, unless each of students have enough knowledge and have their own views through solitary learning, they will not benefit academically when they work in groups.

To sum up, with the development of society, collaboration becomes more and more important. However, solitary learning is the basis of collaboration, without this basis, the collaboration among people would become meaningless. Therefore, I disagree with the speaker's conclusion that learning is not a solitary activity but not that requires collaboration among people.

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发表于 2004-12-31 22:26:31 |只看该作者

俺来拍一砖！

The speaker claims that students of all ages will benefit academically if they work frequently in groups, for the reason that learning is not a solitary activity but one that requires collaboration among people. As far as I am concerned, however, collaboration among people only plays an assistant role; overall, learning is a solitary activity.
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To sum up, with the development of society, collaboration becomes more and more important. However, solitary learning is the basis of collaboration, without this basis, the collaboration among people would become meaningless. Therefore, I disagree with the speaker's conclusion that learning is not a solitary activity but notone that requires collaboration among people.
感觉论述和你的主题有些不符啊，是不是你的结论太绝对了，你的body2话锋一转，谈得可是通过collaboration有益于学习的,有点喧宾夺主，个人拙见，供参考

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发表于 2005-1-1 09:24:13 |只看该作者

非常感谢coolblazeverest的意见！我自己又仔细想了想，你说的对，正文第二段是有些问题，应该把二三段的顺序换一换，改成这样：
1：人一生的成长过程就是一个不断的独立学习的过程。
2：个人的独立学习是合作的基础，没有了这个基础合作就失去了它原有的意义。
3：不可否认合作是促进独立学习的一种有效的途径。
观点：合作是辅助的，学习主要是孤立的。

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