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发表于 2005-2-27 13:12:29 |只看该作者

argument 151 恳请评判，回拍是基本道德

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151The following is a letter to the editor of the Atticus City newspaper.
"Former Mayor Durant owes an apology to the city of Atticus. Both the damage to the River Bridge, which connects Atticus to Hartley, and the traffic problems we have long experienced on the bridge were actually caused 20 years ago by Durant. After all, he is the one who approved the construction of the bridge. If he had approved a wider and better-designed bridge, on which approximately the same amount of public money would have been spent, none of the damage or problems would have occurred. Instead, the River Bridge has deteriorated far more rapidly over the past 20 years than has the much longer Derby Bridge up the river. Even though the winters have been severe in the past several years, this is no excuse for the negligence and wastefulness of Durant."
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The arguer’s claim that former Mayor Durant owes an apology to the city of Atticus for the damage to the River Bridge is based on the fact Durant approved the construction of the bridge, the assumption that there would be a better choice for project, as well as a comparison with another old bridge. However, is the claim fair for Durant? Is the assumption reasonable? Is the comparison convincing?

First of all, it is unfairly for Durant to be required to approve a wider and better-designed bridge, on which approximately the same amount of public money would have been spent, none of the damage or problems would have occurred. First, it is at least less likely to build a wider and better-designed bridge than the one now with the same amount of money as the arguer presumed. Maybe in that era the River Bridge is on the top of designing of bridge, otherwise the city may not afford much more cost. Second, although it is Durant who approved the construction of the bridge, there possibly exist a group of people all of who indeed attended into the determination. In this case, even if the determination proved wrong, all the members taking part in he determination should be imbued with a sense of responsibility for the case.

Second, the comparison in this argument is incomplete and selective. The arguer discovers that the River Bridge has deteriorated far more rapidly over the past 20 years than the much longer Derby Bridge up the river. However, the arguer fails to provide any information concerning the actual flow of traffic on the bridges. It is very likely that the two bridges are of pretty much different importance for transportation. The River Bridge, which connects Atticus to Hartley, may afford more flow of traffic, thus it is more damaged. Unless the arguer also takes this factor into consideration, the comparison is unconvincing.

Finally, it is groundless to ignore the effect of severe whether on the damage. As we know, the cold weather for sure contributes to the damage of any buildings. For instance, the cold weather usually makes materials crisper than in average temperature, in this case it will accelerate the speed of damages. Unless the arguer can provide evidence that this kind of contribution is very less, the ignorance is unacceptable.

The argument for Durant’s breach of duty merely scratches the surface of the cited fact and studies about the damage of Atticus. Much more detailed evidence and comprehensive analyses of the damage as well as the responsibility are needed for the evaluation.
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发表于 2005-3-1 12:36:20 |只看该作者

The arguer's claimis that former Mayor Durant owes an apology to the city of Atticus for the damage to the River Bridge is based on the fact Durant approved the construction of the bridge, the assumption that there would be a better choice for project, as well as a comparison with another old bridge. However, is the claim fair for Durant? Is the assumption reasonable? Is the comparison convincing?

First of all, it is unfairly for Durant to be required to approve a wider and better-designed bridge, on which approximately the same amount of public money would have been spent, none of the damage or problems would have occurred. First, it is at least less likely to build a wider and better-designed bridge than the one now with the same amount of money as the arguer presumed. Maybe in that era the River Bridge is on the top of designing of bridge, otherwise the city may not afford much more cost. Second, although it is Durant who approved the construction of the bridge去掉of the bridge, there possibly exist去掉exist加was a group of people all of who去掉who 改成them indeed attended into the determination. In this case, even if the determination proved wrong, all the members taking part in hethe determination should be imbued with a sense of responsibility for the case.

Second, the comparison in this argument is incomplete and selective. The arguer discovers that the River Bridge has deteriorated far more rapidly over the past 20 years than the much longer Derby Bridge up the river. However, the arguer fails to provide any information concerning the actual flow of traffic on the bridges. It is very likely that the two bridges are of pretty much different importance for transportation. The River Bridge, which connects Atticus to Hartley, may afford more flow of traffic, thus it iswas more damaged. Unless the arguer also takes thisthese factor into consideration, the comparison is unconvincing.

Finally, it is groundless to ignore the effect of severe whether去掉whether on the damage. As we know, the cold weather for去掉for suresurlycontributes to the damage of any buildings. For instance, the cold weather usually makes materials be crisper than in average temperature, in this case it will accelerate the speed of damages. Unless the arguer can provide evidence that this kind of contribution is very less, the ignorance is unacceptable.

The argument for Durant's breach of duty merely scratches the surface of the cited fact and studies about the damage of Atticus. Much more detailed evidence and comprehensive analyses of the damage as well as the responsibility are needed for the evaluation.
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第一篇https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=250654 issu121
第二篇https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=250916 argument120
第三篇https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=251025 issue122
第四篇https://bbs.gter.net/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=251374 issue3 ######改一改这篇吧

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