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Issue127 第11篇让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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Facts are stubborn things. They cannot be altered by our wishes, our inclinations, or the dictates of our passions.
提纲：
1。有些事确实是命中注定的，不能改变
2。命运和事情也常常掌握在人们手中
3。通过我们的努力，顽固的事实也会被感化

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Some facts in our lives are predestined. Thus a number of people believe that they can not change the stubborn facts. On the contrary, in my opinion on, we can move the stubborn facts through our sincerely wishes with tremendous inclinations and passions.

To begin with, the destiny of a people is always mysterious. We don't know what will happen next and that life seems like a box of chocolates as the words in the movie "Forrest Gump". Some people's fate is ragged. They may born with sickness which can not be cured in his or her lifetime. The fact is so brutal that the person with inborn sickness will live a distinct life from other normal persons. Although it is unfair to them, he or she has to accept the fact. Nobody can alter the stubborn fact. Similarly, the stubborn fact is omnipresent and existed all the time Take the Second World War for example. It was a great horrible history and memory for human, the whole world suffered the great pain. We can not change the thing, all we could do is that let it gone with the time. Time helps us to soothe the wound. Thus, sometimes the fact does exist as a stubborn thing.

On the other hand, facts and destiny are always held by people. People do not yield to the destiny in specific case. They will conflict with the terrible destiny. That is the nature of human beings. As we know, Beethoven, the most accomplished and preeminent composer in the world, was blind and deaf at the end of his life. However, most famous composing of Beethoven was achieved at that difficult time. The movement and symphony about destiny is the best evidence to prove that people can control and steer their lives and destinies no matter how astounding their environment is. In our daily life, there are also some little things and facts which can be altered by us. At school, the failed score might be a terrible and stubborn fact to a student. Yet such stubborn fact can be impeded at the beginning if the student pays more attention to his or her course. Therefore most facts and destiny are hold in people's hands.

Finally, our wishes, inclinations and dictates of passions have huge potentiality to move or even change the stubborn fact. As an old saying goes "All things are easy that are done willingly". Every problem has its solution. If people really intend to do, he or she can make it at last through immense endeavor and passions. The greatest basketball player Michael Jordan recalled his career and said that he was fraught with determinations everyday at that time. Even if he was not high enough to play basketball, nevertheless he always believed that he can fly. Through industrious practice and endeavor, he became the top player in NBA. And today, nobody can suspect his belief many years ago. The fact is stubborn, but people's wishes and determination with inclinations and passions are more stubborn.

In sum, facts seem stubborn and impossible to change in some time. The best approach is that we accept those facts that we can't change and we try our best to alter things that we can with our tremendous wishes, inclinations and passionate dictates.

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发表于 2005-3-21 20:48:48 |只看该作者

占座……回头看

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发表于 2005-3-22 20:31:45 |只看该作者

------题目------
Facts are stubborn things. They cannot be altered by our wishes, our inclinations, or the dictates of our passions.
提纲：
1。有些事确实是命中注定的，不能改变
2。命运和事情也常常掌握在人们手中
3。通过我们的努力，顽固的事实也会被感化(为什么b3感觉和b2差不多可以合在一块?)

------正文------
Some facts in our lives are predestined. Thus a number of people believe that they can not change the stubborn facts. On the contrary, in my opinion on, we can move(这里是感化的意思吗？恩。还是用alter,阿，change啊。好一点噢。) the stubborn facts through our sincerely wishes with tremendous inclinations and passions.

To begin with, the destiny of a people is always mysterious. We don't know what will happen next and that life seems like a box of chocolates as the words in the movie "Forrest Gump". Some people's fate is ragged. They may born with sickness which can not be cured in his or her lifetime. The fact is so brutal that the person with inborn sickness will live a distinct life from other normalpersons. Although it is unfair to them, he or she has to accept the fact. Nobody can alter the stubborn fact. Similarly, the stubborn fact is omnipresent (还是觉得用动词要灵动一点啊prevails)and existed all the time Take the Second World War for example. It was a great horrible history and memory for human, the whole world suffered the great pain. We can not change the thing(augury or misfortune of catastrophe啊之类的加强语气啊), all we could do is that let it gone with the time. Time helps us to soothe the wound. Thus, sometimes the fact does exist as a stubborn thing.

On the other hand, facts and destiny are always held by people. (想说我们掌控命运吗？不过不太好，这样的翻译生硬了。)People do not yield to the destiny in specific case. They will conflict with(恩？恩？还是用fight好点吧？这个有点怪怪的) the terrible destiny. That is the nature of human beings. As we know, Beethoven, the most accomplished and preeminent composer in the world, was blind(贝多芬哪有瞎阿！不要乱来会被打的……) and deaf at the end of his life. However, most famous composing of Beethoven was achieved at that difficult time. The movement and symphony about destiny is the best evidence to prove that people can control and steer their lives and destinies no matter how astounding their environment is. In our daily life, there are also some little things and facts which can be altered by us. At school, the failed score might be a terrible and stubborn fact to a student. Yet such stubborn fact can be impeded at the beginning if the student pays more attention to his or her course. Therefore most facts and destiny are hold in people's hands.(感觉你对事实的定义集中在命运上，可是已开始没有定义过所以有点偷换概念之嫌。下次考虑一下先定义一下体现思路的完整性。)

Finally, our wishes, inclinations and dictates of passions have huge potentiality to move or even change the stubborn fact. As an old saying goes "All things are easy that are done willingly". Every problem has its solution. If people really intend to do, he or she can make it at last through immense endeavor and passions. The greatest basketball player Michael Jordan recalled his career and said that he was fraught with determinations everyday at that time. Even if he was not high enough to play basketball, nevertheless he always believed that he can fly. Through industrious practice and endeavor, he became the top player in NBA. And today, nobody can suspect his belief many years ago. The fact is stubborn, but people's wishes and determination with inclinations and passions are more stubborn.(恕我直言，pt了pt了阿……)
In sum, facts seem stubborn and impossible to change in some time. The best approach is that we accept those facts that we can't change and we try our best to alter things that we can with our tremendous wishes, inclinations and passionate dictates.
(结尾段也还是不错地，只是，感觉论证范围狭小而且有点偏题……是不是我的个人偏见？不要介意阿。)

结束了，结束了。
我和GRE,我和你。
想哭，也想笑。
未来怎么样，没有人知道。

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