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发表于 2005-3-22 14:31:31 |只看该作者

感觉前面不用点名中国，味道很怪:rolleyes:
因为很多国家也有应试教育得问题

总体来说写得不错讨论也很热烈

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发表于 2005-3-22 16:04:35 |只看该作者

I fundamentally agree with the speaker insofar as an educational system should care about the distinctive interests and needs of students, for the reason that it help develop students’ potential and talents. However, the speaker should not extend the claim for effective education to satisfy interests and needs for every student. Firstly, the interests of students cannot be consistent and it is impossible to set up this kind of educational system. Secondly, what deserves more attention is that over-emphasis on individual interests and needs impede to accomplish the overall functions of education.
（尊重学生兴趣和需要有助于发挥学生的潜力，激励学生主动地学习）
On the one hand, it is necessary for effective education to take care of characteristics and needs of students, because it benefits to better develop students' potential and talents. In such educational system, students, feeling appreciated and valued, are motivated to study, thus enhance the effect and efficiency of learning 感觉有点而中国英语：加强了**的效果 enhance的主语不是students，我觉得这样写 thus are effectively and efficiently educated . Otherwise, students are asked to learn passively under the pressure of parents and teachers, which lead to disappointing results of study. For the supporting example, we should look no further than the examination-oriented educational system in China. In such education, grades are regarded as the only one criterion of judging students. Teachers are the centers of classes and students are asked to receive rigid and established "correct" answers in order to acquire high grades. In this case, students’ own interests of learning are neglected and it is not likely for education to cultivate students' learning abilities to adapt the needs of further society.

（总说过分尊重学生的兴趣和需要的弊端）
On the other hand, overdue emphasis on meeting the interests and needs of every student bring negative impact not only on the development of educational system, but also on the accomplishment of education overall goals : sufficient mastery of academic skills and knowledge, effective methods of communication with others and cultivation of integrated personalities.

（过分要求尊重每个学生的兴趣和需要将会导致教育制度的混乱，同时也不现实。）
It is believed that education serves as an enterprise without immediate sufficient economic interests. Faced with finite energy and resource, it is impossible for education to satisfy needs and interests of every student. Every attempt to satisfy every interest and need results in interrupt and disorder of standard educational system. Besides, with the growth of students, their interests and needs cannot be consistent; it is infeasible for education to alter correspondingly. In a word, any effective education cannot be formed to meet interests and needs for every student.
这段我觉得有点而罗嗦，你要表达两个意思：1 资源有限，不能满足； 2 孩子的needs都不一样，不能实现。每个意思正反都说一下，再一总结，就可以了。嗯，还有缺乏例子
（此外阻碍教育目标的实现：包括全面掌握学术知识和技能，有效的与他人交流，全面的人格培养）
Besides, trying to satisfying interests and needs for every student will impede the realization of educational overall goals, involving sufficient mastery of academic skills and knowledge, effective methods of communication with others and cultivation of integrated personalities这个是和前面的呼应上了，不过觉得有点重复，不论是用词还是句子结构。要我就干脆不写了 . Firstly, most interests and needs of students spring from subjective factors, and merely satisfying them will let students limit in a narrow scope, and thus hamper the cultivation of fundamental skills and knowledge, which constituted the foundation of further education for students. Secondly, if satisfied with every need, students will feel being centered, and lose the spirit of teamwork. Meanwhile, modern society calls for wide-ranged cooperation and communication with people in different fields. In this case, these students cannot adapt to needs for further society. Finally, as for integrated personality, which is referred to the courage of encountering and overcoming numerous difficulties here, students will be deprived of the opportunity to study the spirit of struggle, if every needs are already satisfied by outside.
这段写的很好
In conclusion, I fundamentally embrace the idea of taking care of student's appropriate interests and needs. However, satisfying needs and interests of every student would be both infeasible and harmful for the development of educational system and accomplishment of ultimate goals of education.
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发表于 2005-3-22 16:48:51 |只看该作者

thus enhance the effect and efficiency of learning 感觉有点而中国英语：加强了**的效果 enhance的主语不是students，我觉得这样写 thus are effectively and efficiently educated . 好建议,学习学习!

这段我觉得有点而罗嗦，你要表达两个意思：1 资源有限，不能满足； 2 孩子的needs都不一样，不能实现。每个意思正反都说一下，再一总结，就可以了。嗯，还有缺乏例子
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