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Argument 1。
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The following appeared in a memorandum written by the vice president of Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products.
'Previous experience has shown that our stores are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. We should therefore build our next new store in Plainsville, which has many such residents. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club, which nearly closed five years ago due to lack of business, has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. We can even anticipate a new generation of customers: Plainsville's schoolchildren are required to participate in a 'fitness for life' program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.'
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In this argument ,the vice president of Nature’ Way recommends building the next store in Plainsiville(P), based on the assumption that people in P are highly concerned with leading a healthy lifestyle. To just the assumption, the arguer cites the facts that the sports apparel are at all-time high, the local health club became popular as well as an mandatory "fitness for life" program for all school children.however,this argument is flawed in several critical respects.
First, the arguer fails to rule out other possible factors that might lead to the popularity of sports apparels. It is possible that the sports clothes and shoes enjoyed a lower price compared with other commodities last year, it is also likely that many tourists came to P and buy a lot of sports apparels, without considering and ruling out this and other possibilities, the assumption that people in P are highly concerned with leading healthy lifestyle is undermined.
Second, the arguer unfairly assumes that those participate in the local health club will also interested in buying nature' Way products, it is possible that they are fit enough after joining such a club that it is unnecessary for them to buy health -related products. if this were the case, the argument is unpersuasive.
Last but not lesat,the mere fact that the school children in P are required to participate in a "fitness for life" program lend little strong support that there will be an new generation of customers. Common sense informs us that children are too young to make any sale and buy decision, also even if they are interested in buying health-related products, they have no income. It is possibly that when they grown up ,they want to lead a unhealthy lifestyle. If these were the case, the claim that Nature’ Way will earn profit is totally unfounded.
Even if we accept the fact people in P are highly concerned with leading a healthy lifestyle ,we can not assume that Nature’ Way will earn profit in P. It is known to all that profit is an function of revenue and cost ,even if there will be a large market demand in P, no evidence is provided to demonstrate that revenue will surpass cost ,it is possible there have been a lot of stores similar to Nature’s Way. Besides, the land property might be very high which contribute to a high cost. Lacking more specific information about the market demand and cost, the conclusion that Nature’Way is going to earn profit is undefensible.
In sum, this argument is unconvincing as it stands.In order to strength ten the argument, the arguer should provide more detailed evidence to justify the assumption that residents in P are highly concerned with leading a healthy lifestyle and they are also want to become Nature’ Way 's customers. To better evaluate the argument, the arguer should make sure that the school children required to participate the" fitness for life" program are also like to leading a healthy lifestyle after they grown up. Meanwhile, the arguer should provide specific information concerned with the revenue and cost while opening the next in P.

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发表于 2005-3-23 08:48:06 |只看该作者

In this argument ,the vice president of Nature’ Way recommends building the next store in Plainsiville(P), based on the assumption that people in P are highly concerned with leading a healthy lifestyle. To just the assumption, the arguer cites the facts that the sports apparel are at all-time high, the local health club became popular as well as an mandatory "fitness for life" program for all school children.however,this argument is flawed in several critical respects.开头写的挺好，很对fact都是对原文的改写，学习ing
First, the arguer fails to rule out other possible factors that might lead to the popularity of sports apparels. It is possible that the sports clothes and shoes enjoyed a lower price compared with other commodities last year,好原因，我当时没有想到 it is also likely用equally possible也不错 that many tourists came to P and buy a lot of sports apparels,. without considering and ruling out this and other possibilities, the assumption that people in P are highly concerned with leading healthy lifestyle is undermined.
Second, the arguer unfairly assumes that those participate in the local health club will also interested in buying nature' Way products,. it is possible that they are fit时态 enough after joining such a club that it is unnecessary for them to buy health -related products. ifIf this were the case, the argument is unpersuasive.驳斥不错
Last but not lesat,the mere fact that the school children in P are required to participate in a "fitness for life" program lends little stronglittle 修饰strong? support that there will be an new generation of customers. Common sense informs比tells用的好 us that children are too young to make any sale and buy decision, also even if they are interested in buying health-related products, they have no income. It is possibly that when they grown up ,they want to lead a unhealthy lifestyle. If these were the case,相同句型 the claim that Nature’ Way will earn profit is totally unfounded.
Even if we accept the fact people in P are highly concerned with leading a healthy lifestyle ,we can not assume that Nature’ Way will earn profit in P. It is known to all common sense tells us的变化that profit is an function of revenue and cost经典用法！是否写反了？我这里用一句话，你看看对不对，revenue and cost work together to influence the profits/both cost and revenue have a influence on profits,even if there will be a large market demand in P, no evidence is provided to demonstrate that revenue will surpass cost ,it is possible there have been a lot of stores similar to Nature’s Way. Besides, the land propertyrent？确定这种用法 might be very high which contribute to a high cost句型好. Lacking more specific information about the market demand and cost, the conclusion that Nature’Way is going to earn profit is undefensible.
In sum, this argument is unconvincing as it stands.句型In order to strength ten不懂 the argument, the arguer should provide more detailed evidence to justify the assumption that residents in P are highly concerned with leading a healthy lifestyle and they areare want?->want also want to become Nature’ Way 's customers. To better evaluate the argument, the arguer should make sure that the school children required to participate the" fitness for life" program are also likeare like? to leading a healthy lifestyle after they grown up. Meanwhile, the arguer should provide specific information concerned with the revenue and cost while opening the next in P.结尾不错
总体来看，驳斥很到位，用句型经典，可学习之处太多了。不过有些用法我也不确定，这些用法你确信么?希望给出解释，以便共同提高。不妥之处多包涵

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