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"At nearby Green Mountain College, which has more business courses and more job counselors than does Mira Vista College, 90 percent of last year's graduating seniors had job offers from prospective employers. But at Mira Vista College last year, only 70 percent of the seniors who informed the placement office that they would be seeking employment had found full-time jobs within three months after graduation, and only half of these graduates were employed in their major field of study. To help Mira Vista's graduates find employment, we must offer more courses in business and computer technology and hire additional job counselors to help students with their resumès and interviewing skills."

In the memorandum, the president of Mira Vista College (MVC) recommends that more courses in business and computer technology are needed. The president also claims that MVC need to hire more job counselors to help students polish their CV and improve their interviewing skills. In other to support his recommendation, a comparison between MVC and Green Mountain College (GMC) is made, suggesting that business coursed and job counselors in GMC help more students get satisfying jobs. However, close scrutiny reveals many logically flaws in the memo and thus makes it unconvincing as it stands.
First of all, the mere fact that 90% of GMC graduates have found good jobs but only 70% of MVC have is insufficient evidence to conclude that GMC's graduates are doing better. If, for instance, there are 100 graduates in GMC and 1000 in MVC, then even the percentage of GMC is higher, there are still more MVC graduates that have found a nice job. In addition, the three months' time is not enough to suggest anything. It is entirely possible that many more MVC students manage to find good jobs if given a little more time. Therefore, these statistics are not scientific enough to reveal the true employment in GMC and MVC.
Secondly, even assuming the statistics are objective and reliable, the author claims that MVC should learn from GMC. Yet he overlooks the possible differences between these two colleges. Perhaps GMC students are potentially more talented than those in MVC on average and thus they can naturally find better jobs, with additional courses and job counselors or not. Or perhaps in the area where GMC is situated, available jobs involving business are more than those in MVC and therefore MVC students are more likely to find jobs.
Thirdly, another problem is that the author groundlessly suggests that computer technology courses are needed and job counselors only job is to help with resumes and interviewing skills. In the example of GMC, no additional course of computer is mentioned and thus the president has no reason to put forward a computer course. Not only it might be of little use, but also it will cost much money and become a burden for the college. Meanwhile, no evidence available can substantiate that job counselors in GMC help enhance employment among students through helping resumes and people skills. It is possible that their main job is to reassure these students and help them develop a healthy and positive attitude toward job hunter and life itself. Without any more information, it is unfair of the author to conclude that GMC students end up better because job counselors' suggestion in CV and interviewing skills.
Finally, even assuming that learning from GMC is effective in helping MVC students with a good job in the future, the author ignores other possible methods to solve the problem. For instance, more MVC students can find good jobs if they actively take internships. Or they can work harder on ex-curriculum projects and thus make themselves more qualified for future jobs. Not considering these and other possibilities, it is too hasty of the author to make such a recommendation.
In sum, absent enough information, the memo is unpersuasive as it stands. In order to bolster it, a mature research should be made to find out the real number of graduates who have found a pleasant job in GMC and MVC respectively. Still, the author cannot put forward any sound recommendation before a comprehensive analysis is made to see whether the additional courses and job counselors are really helpful in MVC. In addition, more attention should also be paid to make sure whether there is a better way to help the MVC students with their future employment.