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本帖最后由 a-moon82815 于 2009-12-11 13:41 编辑
12月10号 独立作文$ i3 J6 @/ Q8 r8 |8 m+ c+ l4 v
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When I was young, my parents always asked me to work hard for the purpose of getting a full mark. So, it is necessary for me to do housework actually. As I grow up, gradually, I come to realize that children should help parents to do some household chores for the simple reason that it can bring us a strong body, enhance a sense of responsibility and so forth. " n% `. y/ {
begin with, there is no doubt that doing some house work will assist children to own a strong body. As we know, if a kid always works hard in learning, it may be easy for him to feel tired and do harm in his health. For instance, my sister who is 7 years old, spent 10 hours in study a day. obviously, she finally get sick last week, and the reason said by a doctor was that she did not take exercise and her immunity declined. (举一个具体的例子在这会更有说服力) So, children need taking some labor activities to adjust his lifestyles. Obviously, doing housework is the wonderful choice for children who want to have a strong body, and maybe the result is that children can finish their (his) assignments more efficiently than before(换一个词可能好些,表达的时间有些模糊). Therefore, we can safely conclude that doing housework is an effective way in helping children to possess a healthy body.! n+ [. Q; @, j+ r*
TIn addition, a sense of responsibility and carefulness (这个观点没有展开) could be formed from taking house activities. Just imagine that, a child always do housework may
willing (serve) to make rooms clean including protecting his books,cleaning his room
(和前面重复) and so on. As this child grows up, a responsibility of cleaning rooms,which brings him a couple of advantages in his future
,will be firmly rooted in his mind. For instance, once the kid begins to work, he may hold a highly responsible for his job which makes him to be special one. The excellent quality of doing things with responsibility definitely provides him with a high possibility to achieve success in the long run.
Finally, doing housework also can help our parents mitigate part of burden. Our parents are cores of our families because they need take care of us and (as well) our grandparents. However, in the daytime, they have to spend most time, such as more than 8 hours a day, on their jobs and have little time to do housework instead. Thus, is not it necessary for us to take on part of their burden? Let our parents have time to relax themselves. As a child, we should share our parents’ pressure without hesitation.1 t+ p. n5 B
As clearly stated above, absolutely, it is necessary for us to do housework. To be sure, taking house activities can keep our body health, possess a sense of responsibility, and cut off our parents’ burden.
如果补充一部份阐述,第一,学习的好处,第二,玩(这一方面一点都没有提及,会否影响评分?)可能会更好些
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