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TOPIC: ARGUMENT37 - Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been unique to the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could only have crossed it by boat, but there is no evidence that the Paleans had boats. And boats capable of carrying groups of people and cargo were not developed until thousands of years after the Palean people disappeared. Moreover, Paleans would have had no need to cross the river-the woods around Palea are full of nuts, berries, and small game. It follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not unique to Palea.
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In this article , the author conclude that a kind of woven basket called Palean baskets which characterized by a particular distinctive pattern were not unique to palea , even though it has been found only in the immediate vicinity of Palea.The author got this conclusion based on a recent discovery that archaeologists had also found such basket in Lithos who shared the other side of the bank of Brim river with Palea. And the author indicated that this basket could not come from Palea, the reason is : first, at time of Palea , boat had not be developed yet without it the Brim River was too deep and too broad to cross .Second , there was no need for Paleans to cross the Bim river since they were abundant with material and spirit . However, I find this argument is unconvincing and the analyze procesure reveals several critical problems too. Together , the conclusion can not stand soundly by these flaws.

A threshold problem involves the define of Palean basket , was the basket found in Lithos truly be Palean basket? How much sure the archaeologist can be? The aothor only provide us that the Palean basket characterrized by a particular distinctive pattern , but we can not know that this kind of pattern is unique feature of Palean basket . Without further information , even if the basket be found in Lithos contained such particular patter , we can assume that it just coincidence , and it is highly possible for Lithosian to create the same patter by themselves due to similarity in the geology . So without more detail information , the author can not rashly believe the basket found in Lithos is exactly Palean basket.

Even if the basket found in Lithos was really the Palean basket . Another fundamental problem is that the author omit to consider without boat ,could there be any other transportation tool exist at that times . Hence ,the boats which capable of carrying groups of perple and cargo were not developed yet , there was still possible that small boat like canoe and simple float had already be developed . No matter how inconvinent of transportation and how hard of communication can be, we can not rule out the possibility that the goods and cargo can be transferd from one side to another side . So that , the basket in Lithos could be produced in Palean and transport to the Lithos.

The third problems involve tha speaker's account of that Paleans had no needs to go to Lithos , because the food is adequate and the life should not be boring with small games . This point is quite worth to doubt , it seems there is no such relevance between the good life and curiosity to the world . In nowadays , even though the life qunlity is thousands times better than accient time , people still perfor to go around and see the world . The curiosity to the unknown area is the instinct ion of human so as Palean. Maybe they crossed river just for fun and curiosity like go need to sail around the world to find the new continent. And maybe the Palean was tired with life with nuts , berries and small games , they wanted more diversity in their life.All that can be the motivation for Palean to cross the river . if Palean did cross the river , there were highly possible that they brought an Palean with them to carry the fruit and goods from Linthos.

To sum up ,the conclusion is unconvincing as it stands . To strengthen the assertion that Palean basket was not unique in Palean , the author must provide more accurate evident to show that the basket found in Lithos was exactly Palean basket ,and prove that there was no transpotation and communication with Lithos and Palea.

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发表于 2010-2-27 21:35:52 |只看该作者

In this article , the author conclude that a kind of woven basket called Palean baskets which characterized by a particular distinctive pattern were not unique to palea , even though it has been found only in the immediate vicinity of Palea.The author got this conclusion based on a recent discovery that archaeologists had also found such basket in Lithos who shared the other side of the bank of Brim river with Palea. And the author indicated that this basket could not come from Palea, the reason is : first, at time of Palea , boat had not be developed yet without it the Brim River was too deep and too broad to cross .Second , there was no need for Paleans to cross the Bim（Brim） river since they were abundant with material and spirit . However, I find this argument is unconvincing and the analyze procesure(procesure?) reveals several critical problems too. Together , the conclusion can not stand soundly by these flaws.(开头有些略长，可以把题目的前提和谬误的提纲再精简一些)

A threshold problem involves the define of Palean basket , was the basket found in Lithos truly be Palean basket? How much sure the archaeologist can be? The aothor（author） only provide us that the Palean basket characterrized(characterized) by a particular distinctive pattern , but we can not know that this kind of pattern is unique feature of Palean basket . Without further information , even if the basket be found in Lithos contained such particular patter , we can assume that it just coincidence , and it is highly possible for Lithosian to create the same patter by themselves due to similarity in the geology . So without more detail information, the author can not rashly believe the basket found in Lithos is exactly Palean basket.

Even if the basket found in Lithos was really the Palean basket . Another fundamental problem is that the author omit to consider without boat ,could there be any other transportation tool exist at that times . Hence ,the boats which capable of carrying groups of perple(people) and cargo were not developed yet , there was still possible that small boat like canoe and simple float had already be developed . No matter how inconvinent(inconvenient?) of transportation and how hard of communication can be, we can not rule out the possibility that the goods and cargo can be transferd(transferred) from one side to another side . So that , the basket in Lithos could be produced in Palean and transport to the Lithos.

The third problems involve tha(the) speaker's account of that Paleans had no needs to go to Lithos , because the food is adequate and the life should not be boring with small games . This point is quite worth to doubt, it seems there is no such relevance between the good life and curiosity to the world . In nowadays , even though the life qunlity(quality) is thousands times better than accient (ancient) time , people still perfor(perfer) to go around and see the world . The curiosity to the unknown area is the instinct ion of human so as Palean. Maybe they crossed river just for fun and curiosity like go need to sail around the world to find the new continent. And maybe the Palean was tired with life with nuts , berries and small games , they wanted more diversity in their life. All that can be the motivation for Palean to cross the river. if Palean did cross the river , there were highly possible that they brought an Palean(+basket) with them to carry the fruit and goods from Linthos.

To sum up ,the conclusion is unconvincing as it stands . To strengthen the assertion that Palean basket was not unique in Palean , the author must provide more accurate evident to show that the basket found in Lithos was exactly Palean basket ,and prove that there was no transportation and communication with(between) Lithos and Palea.

蓝笔是建议、红色是错误，绿色的好的词句
逻辑很好，小的拼写错误需要注意，开头有些略长可以删减一部分，将题目的前提和谬误提炼一下

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