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发表于 2003-6-14 20:32:58 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

204"We learn through direct experience; to accept a theory without experiencing it is to learn nothing at all." 204．我们通过实践学习；没有通过实践而接受一个理论是根本学不到什么东西的。

部分同意。我们能从实践获得生动鲜明的印象，但不意味着必须从实践中才能接受理论（没必要也不可能），我们也可以从书本、别人的经验等indirect experience而获得理论

I fundamentally agree with the speaker’s first contention, for direct experience always gives you vivid impression, from which you can learn something valuable effectively. However, I strongly disagree with the second contention that we can learn nothing at all when we accept a theory without experiencing. Although this claim is not entirely without support, it runs contrary to common sense and general principal. （观点，同意第一点，强烈反对第二点）

Admittedly, we can either learn or accept certain theory by putting it into practice. During the process of practicing, we gain our own experience, from which we can prove the truth of theory and even improve it. All of us knows this when we are trying to do well in writing, cooking, playing football or something like that. We know the instructions easily from books, reports or other’s words; but once we do it by ourselves, we find we do it much worse than what we imagined. Though the first practice is unsuccessful, we still gain some valuable experience which can help us to do better in the next time. Through the direct experience, we learn vividly and impressively. Just as the old saying, practice makes perfect. Practice brings experience, and then experience helps you learning and improving. （承认可以从direct experience中学到东西，实践出真知嘛）

On the other hand, direct experience is not the only way to accept a theory or acquire knowledge. Firstly, it is impossible for us to experience everything with the confines of human technology and the limitation of ourselves. For instance, when Einstein established the most innovational theory in the 20th century, principle of relativity, many scientists try to improve this theory by constructing equipment which has the speed higher than light so that we can go back to history with its help. Unfortunately, none of the efforts was successful. But the failure that we cannot put the relativism into direct experience didn’t obstruct us to accept it for its precise and logical deduction. Most of us take in it and learn a lot such as mathematical method, physical background, creative thinking from it. （凡事都通过实践获得是不可能的）

Secondly, there is no need for us to experience every theory before accepting and benefiting from it. Perhaps a cat knows the rule that no sooner its keeper rings the bell than it can enjoy its meal only by its own bodily experiencing. But human is definitely different from cats. Human have enough intelligence to accept a theory by words, reports, books and other abstractive forms. And they also have their judgment to decide whether to accept a theory by direct experience or indirect one. If he suspects the theory, he may take the former. Otherwise, he will take the latter, which can help him learn something more effectively. For instance, do you seriously think that you would go out without umbrella or something else when you mom told you it was raining just because you hadn’t experienced it personally? Especially, in our modern age when knowledge and technology increase rapidly, indirect experience is a basilica method to learn. There is no time for us to practice everything before we accept it. （也是没有必要的，也有不可能的成分在里头）

In a conclusion, though it is true that we learn from direct experience, the assertion that we can not learn without experience is not only dogmatical but also irrational. In fact, most of us will choose one of them after judgment so that we can learn in a reliable and effective way. （500多）

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发表于 2003-6-14 21:32:41 |只看该作者

寄信人: suzie (游泳的鱼)
标题: issue 204

部分同意。我们能从实践获得生动鲜明的印象，但不意味着必须从实践中才能接受理论
（没必要也不可能），我们也可以从书本、别人的经验等indirect experience而获得理
论
I fundamentally agree with the speaker’s first contention, for direct exper
ience always gives you vivid impression, from which you can learn something
valuable effectively. However, I strongly disagree with the second contentio
n that we can learn nothing at all when we accept a theory without experienc
ing. Although this claim is not entirely without support, it runs contrary to common sense and general principal.
开门见山提出观点，不失一种好的开头方式

Admittedly, we can either learn or accept certain theory by putting it into practice（top sentence? ）. During the process of practicing, we gain our own experience, from which we can prove the truth of theory and even improve it. All of us knows this when we are trying to do well in writing, cooking, playing football or something like that. We know the instructions easily from books, reports or other’s words; but once we do it by ourselves, we find we do it much worse than what we imagined. Though the first practice is unsuccessful, we still gain some valuable experience which can help us to do better in the next time. Through the direct experience, we learn vividly and impressively. Just as the old saying, practice makes perfect. Practice brings experience, and then experience helps you learning and improving.
如果第一局是top sentence 的话，那末这一段其余的论述是不是有点偏离top sentence？要不的话，你改一改：“我们能从实践获得生动鲜明的印象“

On the other hand, direct experience is not the only way to accept a theory or acquire knowledge. Firstly, it is impossible for us to experience everything with the confines of human technology and the limitation of ourselves. For instance, when Einstein established the most innovational theory in the 20th century, principle of relativity, many scientists try to improve this theory by constructing equipment which has the speed higher than light so that we can go back to history with its help. Unfortunately, none of the efforts was successful. But the failure that we cannot put the relativism into direct experience didn’t obstruct us to accept it for its precise and logical deduction. Most of us take in it and learn a lot such as mathematical method, physical background, creative thinking from it.
Secondly, there is no need for us to experience every theory before accepting and benefiting from it. Perhaps a cat knows the rule that no sooner its keeper rings the bell than it can enjoy its meal only by its own bodily experiencing. But human is definitely different from cats. Human have enough intelligence to accept a theory by words, reports, books and other abstractive forms. And they also have their judgment to decide whether to accept a theory by direct experience or indirect one. If he suspects the theory, he may take the former. Otherwise, he will take the latter, which can help him learn something more effectively. For instance, do you seriously think that you would go out without umbrella or something else when you mom told you it was raining just because you hadn’t experienced it personally? Especially, in our modern age when knowledge and technology increase rapidly, indirect experience is a basilica method to learn. There is no time for us to practice everything before we accept it.
这一段写的有点长，不太适合评分软件的口味

In a conclusion, though it is true that we learn from direct experience, the assertion that we can not learn without experience is not only dogmatical but also irrational. In fact, most of us will choose one of them after judgment so that we can learn in a reliable and effective way.
总体写的不错，文笔挺流畅的。
个人意见，仅供参考。

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发表于 2003-6-15 18:30:59 |只看该作者

204"We learn through direct experience; to accept a theory without experiencing it is to learn nothing at all." 204．我们通过实践学习；没有通过实践而接受一个理论是根本学不到什么东西的。

部分同意。我们能从实践获得生动鲜明的印象，但不意味着必须从实践中才能接受理论（没必要也不可能），我们也可以从书本、别人的经验等indirect experience而获得理论

I fundamentally agree with the speaker’s first contention, for direct experience always gives you vivid impression, from which you can learn something valuable effectively. However, I strongly disagree with the second contention that we can learn nothing at all when we accept a theory without experiencing. Although this claim is not entirely without support（unfounded是否更合适）, it runs contrary to common sense and general principal(principle?). （观点，同意第一点，强烈反对第二点）

Admittedly, we can either learn or accept certain theory by putting it into practice. During the process of practicing, we gain our own experience, from which we can prove the truth of theory and even improve it. All of us knows this when we are trying to do well in writing, cooking, playing football or something like that. We know the instructions easily from books, reports or other’s words; but once we do it by ourselves, we find we do it much worse than what we imagined. Though(maybe) the first practice is unsuccessful,(but) we still gain some valuable experience which can help us to do better in the next time. Through the direct experience, we learn vividly and impressively(这句话好象和第二句重复). Just as the old saying, practice makes perfect. Practice brings experience, and then experience helps you learning and improving. （承认可以从direct experience中学到东西，实践出真知嘛）这段让步很好，思路清晰。

On the other hand, direct experience is not the only way to accept a theory or acquire knowledge. Firstly, it is impossible for us to experience everything with the confines of human technology and the limitation of ourselves. For instance, when Einstein established the most innovational theory in the 20th century, principle of relativity, many scientists try to improve this theory by constructing equipment which has the speed higher than light so that we can go back to history（是否应该用the past） with its help. Unfortunately, none of the efforts was successful. But the failure that we cannot put the relativism into direct experience（the failure in putting relativity into direct experience） didn’t obstruct us to accept it for its precise and logical deduction. Most of us take in it and learn a lot such as mathematical method, physical background, creative thinking from it. （凡事都通过实践获得是不可能的）
有一点疑问是，在学习数学或相对论等纯理论时，做习题算不算实践？在英文中，像做作业这种活动是否包含在experience中？
Secondly, there is no need for us to experience every theory before accepting and benefiting from it. Perhaps a cat knows the rule that no sooner its keeper rings the bell than it can enjoy its meal only by its own bodily experiencing. （这个对比例子用得好）But human is definitely different from cats. Human have enough intelligence to accept a theory by words, reports, books and other abstractive forms. And they also have their judgment to decide whether to accept a theory by direct experience or indirect one. If he suspects the theory, he may take the former. Otherwise, he will take the latter, which can help him learn something more effectively.（人称代词怎么由they 换成了he?） For instance, do you seriously think that you would go out without umbrella or something else when you mom(GRE中应当用正式词！) told you it was raining just because you hadn’t experienced it personally? Especially, in our modern age when knowledge and technology increase rapidly, indirect experience is a basilica method to learn. There is no time for us to practice everything before we accept it. （也是没有必要的，也有不可能的成分在里头）我刚看了一本写作书，指出在一句或一段话中，要特别注意不能随意转换人称。即使没有语法错误，也会降低文章的质量。你这里用了THEY, HE ,YOU

In a conclusion, though it is true that we learn from direct experience, the assertion that we can not learn without experience is not only dogmatical but also irrational. In fact, most of us will choose one of them after judgment so that we can learn in a reliable and effective way. （500多）
我觉得这篇文章很流畅，结构和思路也很清楚。我的第四篇ISSUE就借鉴了你的这篇文章的布局。不过，我觉得文中的例子大多比较平淡,我不知道这样是否合适！其实，我也经常遇到举不出例子的情况。

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