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第一次在这里发作文，感到很新鲜，欢迎大家狠拍！！

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Sports teach people lessons about life


When come to the sports, .Admitedly ,it do teach people lessons about life. This opinion will beyond doubt proved by various kind of sports ,.for example ,the swimming teach you how to keep balance in the water ,and in your daily life you also need to keep balance between the work and family ,the boss and the employees。

Some one may argue that sports just teach us how to compete in our daily life. It is absolutely right , however, some time it also teach us how to corporate and struggle together. In some sports which need team work, people can learn a great amount of life experiences.

   Take part in some team work sports ,such as Basketball game, you have to learn some thing about how to corporate ,how to use your advantages and how to be a excellent leader. or perfect member. For example , in a soccer team ,if you running faster than others and got a talent to avoid enemy team member, you should in the front. If you are strong and tall ,you can be a back up. either you are in the front or you always play a role as back up ,you must know what is your rensposbility You need to stay in the right point and if there is necessary for you to kick a goal or defend someone ,you should try your best to do this . And if you are team leader ,you must got to know how to inform the team ready to push ahead and strike or pull back to defend in the fit time .

  Consequently, sports can illustrate some basic life principle to you ,such as stay in you position and do what you need to do, play you role well and corporate with other members. And of course there is other things you can learn from other kinds of sports .Hiking can teach you to be brave , running tell you to be fast. To sum up, different sports teach people different life principles ,and every individuals can learn something from every sports and enjoy them. So ,some thing new just stay in the corner ,if you want ,you can go ahead and enjoy it.

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9-18修改

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09.05.30NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language.

The children’s education always considered a crucial issue of China’s family, because fellow China’s old tradition , parents need to take good care of their children and make sure them growing up in a healthy way. Some of the parents pay almost all of them life and energy to do that. So weather their children should be required to study art and music in addition to math ,science ,history and language is important to the parents and  they need to made a decision.

From my stand point ,they may be can have a try on that ,because In China ,the education systems is not as perfect as we supposed. The children have been require to focus on several major subjects such as math ,science, history and language. Due to the fact that only students who study those subjects well can be allow to enter the top middle schools and best universities. The results of that requirement is as fellows:

On the one hand ,the children can not get a education in full aspects ,and that is harmful to their growth. So if the parents noticed that and give them more knowlegement about the arts and the music will benefit them for their growing.On the other hand,many children who have talents in arts , music or other kinds of subjects might have been whipped out from the better education ,and their talents have been wasted. So if the parents require them to study art and music ,there will be a chance for them to judge their children’s potencial talents .if they found their talents is not in the major subjects ,but in the arts and music , they can give their children more choice to make best use of their talents.

   Consequently , the children might should be required to study art and music in addition to some major subjects such as math, language and history, on account of  make their children got a better growth and give them more choices to choose. However, that not means to force them to study art and music ,because they already had enough affords in the school ,if they do not like art and music ,but have been required must to practice that ,they will totally lost their interesting and consider art or music as a new kind of affords ,that will lead a much worse situation for the children’s growth.

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这是我修改的9.18的作文
When coming to the sports, .Admitedly ,it does teach people lessons about life. This opinion will beyond doubt(?) proved by various kinds of sports ,.for example ,swimming gives you a sense of balance in the water ,leading to a better understanding of the balance between work and family , boss and the employees。

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* o3 E+ f/ V6 V* w/ \ Some one may argue that sports just teach us how to compete in our daily life. It is not all right , as some times it also teaches us how to corporate and progress together. In some sports which call for team work, people can learn a great amount of precious life experiences.+ I' \4 D7 ]( {6 qTaking part in some team work sports ,such as Basketball, you will learn a lot about how to communicate with others ,how to use your advantages and how to be an excellent leader. or perfect member. For example , in a soccer team ,if you run faster than others and get a talent to avoid opponents, you had better be a front player. If you are strong and tall ,you can be a full back. either you are in the front or you always play a role as back up ,you must grasp your resposibility You need to stay in the right point and if it is necessary for you to kick a goal or defend someone ,you should try your best to do this . And if you are a team leader ,you need to know how to inform the team ready to push ahead and strike or pull back to defend in the fit time .

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Consequently, sports can illustrate some basic life principle to you ,such as staying in your
position and doing what you need to do, play your role well and cooperating with other members. And of course there is other things that are conductive .Hiking teaches you to be brave , running tells you to be fast. To sum up, different sports teach people different life principles , and every individual can learn something from every sport and enjoy them. So ,something new just stays in the corner ,if you want ,you can go ahead and enjoy it

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When come to the sports, .Admitedly ,it do teach people lessons about life. This opinion will beyond doubt proved by various kind of sports ,.for example ,the swimming teach you how to keep balance in the water ,and in your daily life you also need to keep balance between the work and family ,the boss and the employees。
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这一段算是个让步段，建议放在倒数第二段）Some one may argue that sports just teach us how to compete in our daily life. It is absolutely right , however, some time it also teach us how to corporate and struggle together. In some sports which need team work, people can learn a great amount of life experiences.5 Z* h/ _- g# C7 P" ^- V8 R0 v
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S1 a+ R% N9 @5 Z) o8 Y Take part in some team work sports ,such as Basketball game, you have to learn some thing about how to corporate （cooperate）,how to use your advantages and how to be a excellent leader. or perfect member. For example（an other example for that can be) , in a soccer team ,if you running faster than others and got a talent to avoid enemy team member, you should in the front. If you are strong and tall ,you can be a back up. either you are in the front or you always play a role as back up ,you must know what is your rensposbility You need to stay in the right point and if there is necessary for you to kick a goal or defend someone ,you should try your best to do this . And if you are team leader ,you must got to know how to inform the team ready to push ahead and strike or pull back to defend in the fit time .(建议具体举出一个球队合作的典型，比如西班牙队比利亚跑得快就在前锋位置，XX防守好就在后卫，然后说这个球队配合的很好） 8 ~4 G( h6 m! m4 P7 u& ?: z, a/ L; B

+ h# Y9 |' `6 n( t: ^2 z Consequently, sports can illustrate some basic life principle to you （建议不要用YOU，因为到时看你作文的只有考官，考试YOU人家觉得你针对他，用someone，a person之类的吧）,such as stay in you position and do what you need to do, play you role well and corporate with other members. And of course there is other things you can learn from other kinds of sports .Hiking can teach you to be brave , running tell you to be fast. To sum up, different sports teach people different life principles ,and every individuals can learn something from every sports and enjoy them. So ,some thing new just stay in the corner ,if you want ,you can go ahead and enjoy it.
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结构不是很清晰，例子可以更加SPECIFIC一点，加油，你第二篇就不第一篇好多了

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谢谢你这么热心……

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恩，我会努力的……

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9月23日交

09.04.03NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase teachers' salaries

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The quality of education in a country have a significant influence on the quality of this country’s citizens. Because only a good education system can cultivate qualified workers for modern industry ,excellent schollars for research and innovation. .the quality of education is very crucial in a country. Hence, when somebody state that the best way to improve the quality of a country is to increase teachers’ salaries, I would give a doubt on that kind of opinion.

In my submission, the best way to improve the quality of education in a country not only including increase the teachers’ salaries , but also should  take other elements  into account ,such as supporting the poor students ,and build more schools as far as improving the eviroment of school and universities.  Nowadays ,due to a poor family ,many smart students do not have enough money to get into school , they even do not have a fair opportunities of education. That is a waste of their talents. Furthermore ,many poor students do not have enough money ,so they have to worry about that ,that will influence their study and research qualities. So it is diffcult to image in this stuation theis countru’s education system can improve its qualities.

In addition ,because in many countres ,especially developing countries ,there is no enough schools and universities, .The instrument in these schools  also is too old for study and research, so ,if this condition can not be improved as soon as possible ,the quality of the education can not developed too.

   What we also should declare the opinion that the best way to improve a country’s education quality is increasing their income is detactive is that not just the teachers’ salaries can be take into consideration. Admitedly if their incomes got a obviously increasing will inprision them to work hard and try their best to improve the qualities of the teaching, but they also need more trainings to improving teaching skills , and sometimes they  need more vocations for relax in previonding longtime hard work lower the quality of teaching.

To sum up , supporting students ,build more new schools and change the instruments is as important as adding teachers salaries ,and teachers not only need more incomes but also need more trainings and enough vocations. Consequently , to increase teachers' salaries is not the best way to improve the quality of a country.

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The quality of education in a country have a significant influence on the quality of this country’s citizens. Because only a good education system can cultivate qualified workers for modern industry ,excellent schollars for research and innovation. .the quality of education is very crucial in a country. (这次的引入做的很不错）Hence, when somebody state that the best way to improve the quality of a country is to increase teachers’ salaries, I would give a doubt on that kind of opinion.

  firstly the higher salaries of teachers will make some students cannot afford the education fee, that may cause the unfair education.(段首第一句最好是总起，把例子要说的道理先点一下） In my submission, the best way to improve the quality of education in a country not only including increase the teachers’ salaries , but also should  take other elements  into account ,such as supporting the poor students ,and build more schools as far as improving the eviroment of school and universities.  Nowadays ,due to a poor family ,many smart students do not have enough money to get into school , they even do not have a fair opportunities of education. That is a waste of their talents. 这基本算一个例子，之后可以说：there are thousands of black american and native american can not enter the university because their families lack of money, and the only thing they can do in their whole life is to spend their time in low level blue collar jobs.Furthermore ,many poor students do not have enough money ,so they have to worry about that ,that will influence their study and research qualities. So it is diffcult to image in this stuation theis countru’s education system can improve its qualities.

moreover, the financial aid of education in some developing countries are in short supply, so that give a large amout of money to teacher is not rational ,because in many countres ,especially developing countries ,there is no enough schools and universities, .The instrument in these schools  also is too old for study and research, so ,if this condition can not be improved as soon as possible ,the quality of the education can not developed too.
(这一段有点让步的意思，可以短一些，用更多的篇幅说加薪没用之类的） What we also should declare the opinion that the best way to improve a country’s education quality is increasing their income is detactive is that not just the teachers’ salaries can be take into consideration. Admitedly if their incomes got a obviously increasing will inprision them to work hard and try their best to improve the qualities of the teaching, but they also need more trainings to improving teaching skills , and sometimes they  need more vocations for relax in previonding longtime hard work lower the quality of teaching.
To sum up , supporting students ,build more new schools and change the instruments is as important as adding teachers salaries ,and teachers not only need more incomes but also need more trainings and enough vocations. Consequently , to increase teachers' salaries is not the best way to improve the quality of a country.总结不错
结构比上次有点进步，注意
每段段首记得中心句
文章要更加贴题，人家问的是要不要涨工资，关于怎样改善教育的IDEA可以少提一点，你的重点应该放在不涨工资有。。。好处

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恩，多谢啦……

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发表于 2010-9-25 20:55:14 |只看该作者

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.
Advertising is everywhere in our world nowadays once people open the televisions, and watch Tv shows or dramas they have to wait while there is always some advertisemernt insert in it ,such as fast foods and candies in rich of fat or high calories . And nowadays many children become more and more fat on account of unhealthy eating habits ---- eating too much fast foods and candies, but do not interesting in dinners . So people will easily presume that there is a cause-and–result relationship between those advertising and the unhealthy habits。 Many of them stated that advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.

But from my personal perspective , I think other elements might also can be considered the most etenscial cause of the unhealthy eating habits .For example , many parents love their kids too much , give them a lots of cash and do not limited their purchasing ,so those children use the giving money purchased a lot of fast foods and candies or something like that and eat them individually or in groups. So when they are asked for dinner ,they already got enough and do not want eating anymore. This phynomenon often happened in the countries which have one-child policy like China, Due to  every family have only one kid, so,although  parents refused to give the kid extra cash, these children always can get some money form their beloved grandparents.

On the other side , I have to  concede that these foods advertisement may be lead those unknown children to pursuit varieties of foods ,but many of them have gve an attention that how high those foods have high calories .The parents need to notice that ,but they just  do not do that . So ,It is hard to say the advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.

To sum up , the advertising maybe a important cause of the unhealthy eating habits, even so ,the parents do not give a limitation to their kids’ abuse of extra money and careless attention to the food advertisements may be will take more responsbilities for that.

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发表于 2010-9-28 17:51:08 |只看该作者

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Nowadays it is wildly hold that our education system should be fixed in china ,especially for the universities . increasing numbers of people think that students in the universities should take basic science courses weather they major in science or the majors related to this. As to me , I strongly convinced this statement ,due to that it can enlarge students’ knowledge areas, improve their abilities of thinking and made them can easily communicated with students who majored in science.

To begin with ,students ,easpecially those who major in humanity or social science ,should take more basic science courses ,because it will let them  get to know more knowledges of math ,physics ,chemistry or some relative courses. Many great minds of the humanity or social science all have the knowledge background of science.

Furthermore, student who do not concentrate on science study some courses of science can  improve their abilities of thinking, one of my roommates ,who major in literature, have take some classes from the statistics ,and the thinking method surprised him , and inprire him to composed some new poets.

   In the end , if you want to communicated with the students who majored in science, you had better got some basic knowledge of their major, or the communicate may face up to some obstacles because their majors were very hard to understand. It is hard to image that you can discuss some experiments which they take if you do not know what is hypohsis or data collecting and the result discussion.

To sum up, students should take some basic science courses regardless of their field of concentration, that can let them learn more knowledge , change their way of thinking and prove them communicate with students study science and engneering more easily. Of course ,that not means they should take many other courses and give up their major courses ,If that influence their major course study ,they should think twice about that.

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