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发表于 2011-8-18 21:36:49 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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People who go outside are more successfuland happier than people who stay in villages.
Going outside to explore the boundless worldgives people wisdom and knowledge, which cannot be matched with a stable buttedious life staying in villages. Additionally, going outside means to be openand active to new things every day and it also offer new opportunities to one’scareer. With the knowledge and wisdom of life, the open and positive attitudetowards life, as well as a prosperous career, there is no doubt that people whogo outside are more successful and happier than people who stay in villages.
Firstly, exploring the world in personteaches a man knowledge and wisdom about life that contribute to the successand fulfillment of him. On one hand, only going outside can one learn how tosurvive and take care of himself, as Confucius suggested: Reading one thousand books, traveling onethousand miles. The ability of survival can not be absorbed from books, a manhas to experience the real life then gain some vital rules to live in a new city, to make somenew friends or to get a new job. On the other hand, going outside is the chancefor a person to rethink and redefine the essence of life, thus he or she willknow much clearly about the true meaning of life, which will conduct his orhers later life.
Secondly, going outside world requiresan open-minded and active attitude towards life. Compared with going outside,staying in villages is conservative and static. Hanging out with the friendswhom you have known for the entire life, surrounding by the old neighbors,repeating the same work day after day is the life pattern in villages. Bycontrary, going outside is much more exciting and refreshing. The latest news,the fascinating sceneries and talented people are stimuli for a person to openhis eyes and heart in order to receive more information from the updated world.Gradually, he will develop an active and positive attitude towards everything.No matter it is hardship or risk, he has the ability to overcome becauseattitude is everything, his healthy attitude will finally prevail all thedifficulties.
Thirdly, moving to a new place is anopportunity to find a new job. Since different markets have different demands,suppose a person in a new cityfinally found the job which he was longing for so long but couldn’t get becausethere was no employer wanted to hire him in his previous village. And afterthat, this man used his talent and diligence to achieve his goals in hiscareer. He fulfilled his dream and earner himself a prosperous life in the end.This is what moving outside can bring to us: new opportunities.
To sum up, the people who going outsideare more successful and happier because they have more knowledge and wisdom,active attitude towards life and a decent career. Nevertheless, the people invillages are living dull lives.
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