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第一篇 I
The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you
take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these
considerations shape your position.

Does it depend on the type of life which people live being luxury and convenient that they cannot develop into truly strong and have independent individuals? The speaker claims so, however, in my view, I tend to agree with this theory that whether a person can develop into truly strong and independent characteristics or not has not so much business with the living condition. Many other reasons, such as ignoring her selves’ value or always being doubted by her surrounding people, can result this consequence that she cannot develop into truly strong and independent individual.

Firstly, in my opinion, whether life is luxury and convenient or not does not have so much influence in the formation of a person’s personality, that is to say, people can develop into a truly strong independent characteristic with such life if they hold vigorous attitudes toward life. Maybe you know BILL GATES'S HOUSE, which has a total assessed value of 147.5 million U.S dollars, is a house designed in the Pacific lodge style with classic features such as a large private library with a dome shaped roof and all the rooms in this house can automatically adjust temperature, music, and lighting based on the guest's preferences. Apparently, living in this luxury and convenient house doesn’t let Gates away from a person with strength and independence.

Then, finding the value of their own is one of the most significant factors in developing into truly strong private person, especially when she lives in this extravagant and convenient life. In our daily life, we face to many troubles we should work out, however, if a female who haven't discovered her value had to solve the problem, she will be vulnerable, although she is able to settle the matter, because she, a normal woman without confidence, don't firmly believe she can do this. After uncountable failures, I believe the woman couldn't develop into a truly powerful and freedom person, even she does not live in a life with internet, cars, planes and iPhone. But if a person who has already noticed his value, no matter if he lives in a convenient contemporary life, he will be successful in achieving a strong heart by confidence and success. Besides finding their value can make them grow into really powerful and freedom people, support from the people around you, especially from your friend can also let you achieve the same aim.


Finally, it is true that a person lives in a contemporary life with high technology and innumerable attractions which will lure her; furthermore the prediction that these enticements will make her far away from becoming a truly strong and independent individual is not unfounded. But unless she live alone and stay in a place with nothing but herself, she won't find a place with no attraction in our society, so whether you live in a luxury life is not a primary things, attitude toward the life full of luxuries and convenience and what we do in this kind of life are determinant, this kind of life couldn't prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

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第二篇 I
It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to
address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.


There is no doubt that most of us live in an age of intensive media coverage and it is almost impossible for any celebrity or authoritative people to hide whatever he has done either in public or private. And in my point of view, hero should be a person different from others without any stain so that I suppose that we couldn’t have a living hero around us in the present society. Besides that, what I think more deeply is maybe we just don't need a living hero now. For these reasons, I mainly agree with the author's view that there will be no living people regarded as a hero from now on; however, every rule has its exception.



This is a highly transparent era that monitors or photographic lens can be found everywhere in our daily life so that the things you have done will be exposed to the public sooner or later, no matter who you are. Because of this, people tend to give those human beings, who are distinguished from the ordinary people, extra care and put them in the spotlight for they expect one of these men or women to be a hero without any weakness. But unfortunately, we couldn’t find a man or woman who has no shortcoming. Bill Clinton, a famous American president who contributed a lot to overcome the sluggish growth of the American economy, should have been a hero among Americans, if the public hadn't been shocked by his personal scandals. Martin Luther King, the person who brought the Civil Rights revolution to Chicago, would also have been regarded as a hero, if he hadn't hesitated to express his anti-war thought during 1965 to 1967.


Thanks to the modern technology, most of us accept the idea that all the people live on the Earth will make mistakes, so there is no living saint or hero. The popular films can show the public's thought or aspiration and we can find that many welcomed movies' topic is about hero; in such stories, the leading roles tend to earn their heroic status by encountering troubles and overcoming them by their talent. But let us think about this question: are these superhuman in the stories merited to be regarded as heroes? They just do something with their super power at a special time. Except that, they don’t contribute anything to the society. Since hero is a word which means perfect and no one is perfect so that no one could be called hero. We live in a world of instant gratification and what we need is only a man who will do something at a crucial time, not a living hero. Hero could just be a belief existed in our mind.

It is true that maybe in few society which still controlled by autocracy, the public are imbued with some funny information, in which some people use power to exaggerate the fact and to conceal the scandal. Then in such society, there are some living people could be regarded as hero or even saint. Nonetheless, in these societies, nothing is impossible.



In conclusion, the speaker’s claim is mostly correct except in some especial society that it is not the age you can easily let a person accepted by the society as hero. With numerous technologies and massive information, public will know almost everything about a person, both good deeds and evil things. What’s more, we don’t really need a living hero, what we need is only ourselves.

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发表于 2011-9-5 22:05:09 |只看该作者
第三篇 I
Society should identify those children who have special talents and provide training for them at an early age to develop their talents.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position
you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be
advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

I partly agree with the speaker that society do have duty to identity those gifted children; however, I don't agree with the point of view that those children should be trained at an early age and only on their talents. In my point of view, learner-center education should be spread over the country; through this way, we can clearly find out the talents they have when students grow up and then, training them in a special way can provide them a better environment and make more gifted students reach their highest potential.

To begin with, our society can hardly identify those geniuses when they are at an early age by our conventional method. If we simply divide the students in two parts by the index of IQ: one is a group of talents and the other is consisted of ordinary children, it is highly possible that people wrongly identify the students’ talents and may even regard gifted children as changeling. For example, Albert Einstein, the most distinguished physicist of the20th century, was regarded as changeling when he was at an early age, not mention to be discovered as a talent. And another instance is De Broglie, a well-known physicist who has made tremendous contributions to the field of physics, but he was thought to have gifts in literature when he was young. So an early age is not a good time for the society to identify whether a student has talent or not.

Additionally, have we thought about this question that how many talents have been ignored or even impeded by the traditional teaching system in the past centuries? I suppose the number will be countless because like other students with unique needs, gifted students will not reach their highest potential without differentiated instruction for their education, however, our conventional education couldn't put enough emphasis on the gifted children and provide them special course for the limited resources. Students who really have capability of high performance in some certain areas will not show their talents, unless they have been identified. Mark Twain, an American author and humorist, once said that "Thousands of geniuses live and die undiscovered - either by themselves or by others", which indicates that geniuses wouldn't obtain success if they hadn't been found and fostered.

"For every gifted child who is not allowed to reach his or her potential, there is a lost opportunity. That child might eventually have composed a concerto, found a cure for a terminal disease, or developed a formula for world peace" said by Carl Rogers. From his words, we know that gifted students will make more progress when the curriculum teaching methods and materials are adapted for their needs; and these progresses have some possibility to change world. Since we have already enjoyed the Don Giovanni, a wonderful opera, get rid of the
limit of darkness and live in a life with convenience, why don't we give those gifted students a better education, make them closer to the success .

Besides the reasons I have mentioned before, from the purposes of education, we should also give the gifted students training because the responsibility of education is to develop individuals to their fullest potential. Therefore, a good education should begin by considering the need of individuals and be a student-centered learning whose environment is open, dynamic, and promoting the natural desire and curiosity to learn. In such a learner-centered education, teachers try to meet the need of gifted students is natural and reasonable.

In sum, the idea that we should identify those students who have special geniuses and provide them special training is correct, which is beneficial to both the gifted student and society. But when should we do this is a problem we have to think more carefully.

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发表于 2011-9-5 22:06:05 |只看该作者
第四篇 I
In order to become well-rounded individuals, all college students should be required to take courses in which they read poetry, novels, mythology, and other types of imaginative literature.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific
Circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position


According to the speaker, it is necessary and even desirable for the college students to take courses in which they are required to read some imaginative literature in order to let them develop into well-rounded individuals. Although I agree that students will expand their spiritual world, and have a comfortable rest of mental by reading this kind of literature, there will be still some students wouldn’t like to read such literature. Thus, the speaker’s recommendation should be reconsidered.

To begin with, we must realize the goodness that students can develop themselves into rich imagination and powerful creativity individuals by taking such kind of courses. The world described in the imaginative literature, like novels, is such a fantastic and unusual place in which nothing is impossible so that the reader can imagine anything that will happen in when they read the book. Through this way, many inspirations will be inspired, which contribute to the development of society. For example, the invention of submarine (the first submarine was invented in America in 1776) is such a well-known idea coming from the novel written by Jules Verne long time ago, and before having read the novel, there are no scientists who intend to invent a big machine which can travel totally under the sea. Until now, our scientific direction is also influenced by the novels, and mythologies written in past time, like the research of time travel. Because of these reason, I agree that students should take such course.


What's more, by reading these kinds of imaginative literatures, like poem, can provide the reader mental peace, spiritual pleasure after a full-day work. As general knowledge, every student has the experience of experiencing a period of time in which they are facing something hard for them to resolve; and some of them would like to find a book or poetry to read for releasing the pressure got from work. The study conducted by Social Department of Fudan University indicates that among so many kinds of books, imaginative literature is such a popular theme. Imaginative literature can furnish the reader with a free world of spirit to relax; in such a free world, reader are immersed in the imagination that they are the role in the book and forget the displeasures, happiness or sadness, all with the role. After that, they will have a fresh mind to face next day's work.

However, nothing is perfect so that not every student would like to take such courses, especially to those students who don’t like to read imaginative literature. I have a friend who really hates to read this kind of book with no reason, but unfortunately, our school have set such kind of course in which teachers teach us how to read imaginative literature, like a poem. Because of dislike to the literature, he never attends the course which lead to a poor degree at the final exam, and until now, he couldn’t forget the period of that time.



In sum, encouraging the students to read imaginative literature is such an unquestionable method to make them a well-rounded person, but compelling them is not. And except advisement, we must do something to prevent them from immersing themselves in reading.

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发表于 2011-9-5 22:07:27 |只看该作者
第五篇 I
Educators should base their assessment of students' learning not on students' grasp of facts but on the ability to explain the ideas, trends, and concepts that those facts illustrate.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position

As is intensely described in the thought-provoking statement, not only does the author focus on the opinion that educators should put their emphasis on testing students whether they can explain the ideas, trends, and concepts of those facts taught by teachers but also insinuates that this kind of ability is more significant than rote memorization when we assess a student's learning. However, in my point of view, it is not a perfect recommendation which is suitable for all the students of all ages. It depends on the students' age that what kind of assessment we should use to test the students' learning because becoming educated is such a process in which students will face different knowledge and the require of these knowledge is unlike.

What is most important for a student studying in a primary school or even in a kindergarten, understandingness or rote? Most of them don't have the ability to catch the ideas or trends of the things taught in the class, such as alphabet or the multiplication tables; so when students are in this period, educators should base their assessment of students' learning on the fact if students have kept knowledge in their mind. Thinking of a little child who learns the alphabet, they memorize the name, sounds, and order of the letters by rote but don't know why they do this and what does these letters trend; all of these rote learning create the necessary foundation to learn other important skills. Could we ask them to catch the ideas of these letters' order? Certainly no, just because they don't have ability and don't need to know that; so why the educators shouldn't focus on students' grasp of facts when they assess children's learning.

Then, when we talk about the students who are enrolled in the secondary school, rote memorization and conceptualizing maybe have the same position to the students; both of them play important roles in students' learning. In this time, they will face a large amount of information which they should fix to their memory and most of the information is axiom; it means students need only remember them and use them but have no need to understand them. Besides these axioms, there is also some information require students to conceptualize, such as chemical formula. Students are taught hundreds of formulas when they study chemistry, but the aim of this subject is not just want students to simply memorize how the formula contains, teachers ask students to understand why these formulas exist and how we find it, furthermore, the trends of these formulas are also needed. Educators should focus both of the ability when they do assessment to the students.

Finally, educators should pay attention to the students' ability to analyze, evaluate and create knowledge when they grow up and become college students. After students enter a college, they must come to recognize the ideas through which they see and experience the world; they must take explicit command of their thinking; they must become the master of their own ideas which requires students to think about why the knowledge appear like that. They don't need to rote this information, they don't need to focus on memorization through repetition, and they are required understanding of material which means students have to develop a deep understanding of knowledge. A person who can only repeat other's thought can't act as a truly free person and such kind of people can hardly contribute to the society in any field. So the educators have to base their assessment of student's learning on the students' ability to have a clear picture of the world or the things happen around them.

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发表于 2011-9-5 22:21:32 |只看该作者
第六篇 I
Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position
you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be
advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

Different from the author’s claim, in my point of view, government has no reason to postpone their funding for the arts, especially when significant numbers of their citizens are suffered from hunger and unemployment. Furthermore, compared with funding for art when financial condition is healthy, government should take pains to invest money in art during this hard time that many people are suffering from hunger and losing their jobs.

There is no doubt that art can provide a lot to us, like courage and inspiration. These things are very important to us in our daily life as well as to those people experiencing the sorrow of losing jobs or being hungry. Being unemployed, without any money earned, and having to stay at home, these people will possibly be upset and even decadent. But if these people have access to enjoying art in their daily life, this condition will be improved and the public’s psychology will also be healthier than before. Holding an exhibition of Inspirational film, opening museums free of charge, and showing encouraging paintings at city center, all of this can be effective to solve problems following the economic slowdown. For instance, if a person takes a glance at Van Gogh's Sunflower at somewhere in daily life, maybe just on their way to home, having seen such a bright and gorgeous picture, people will be inspired with a feeling of encouragement and inspiration. This feeling will be significant to a person so that he/she can be encouraged to fighting against the frustration in life.

Government should fund for art as well as for resolving the surviving troubles. The statement linking funding for art negatively with solving the social problem in a hard time is supposed to be wrong. No evidence can show that government can only fund for one thing among them. Funding for both of them, citizens will be inspired with the faith to overcome the problems, and the market is encouraged by the fund from government, everything will be fine after a period of time. If government only put emphasis on helping the market, since the influence wouldn’t show in a short time, the public will still sink into the feeling of pessimism. In order to get rid of surviving problems, the government should fund for art as well as realistic problems.

To sum up, government’s funding for art when a lot of people are hungry and losing jobs, which is not oppose to inventing money in some direct methods to solve problem, but helpful to them.

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发表于 2011-9-5 22:23:24 |只看该作者
第七篇 I
Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

Different with the speaker’s claim, I hold the view that government should try to make every admitted students have opportunity to receive university education but not free of charge. Government or universities can offer some methods to these students, and through this way, students can afford the expense of obtaining education by themselves.

For the reason that university education will give benefits to the society, I suppose that every admitted student should have access to go into the classroom of a university. Since the students are admitted by a university, he/she must be qualified to be educated in the university. Achieving education, getting the degree, and with the knowledge from university, the student can contribute to the society a lot. For example, a qualified doctor with bachelor degree or master degree will help to treat other people who suffer from diseases. Besides that, with the development of society, if a person wants to enjoy a high quality of life, with a pleasant salary, a bright house, and a beautiful car, a college education is increasingly a prerequisite for all of this.


However, the expense of receiving education shouldn’t be borne by the government because this is a very heavy burden to the government. Students should pay the bills by themselves. If government offer a free university education to these students, it will be unfair to those students whose families can afford the burden of education. Every admitted student is equal to others, government shouldn't divide them into two groups just by evaluating their families financial condition and let one group of students accept the education free of charge. Those students can make effort to get the scholarship by their outstanding ability, like high academic performance.

Students who cannot pay for the expense of education can also apply for loan or take time to work. Different from offer free education to the student, I suppose that government can provide some kind of no-interest loan program to students and this is good for them. By applying this kind of loan, students can easily afford their tuitions and they will have to work hard when they are studying in the university. According to a report conducted by Social Department of Fudan University, these students who apply the loan pay more attention on study, they averagely spend over 90 hours on learning, and more than 80 percent of the students who have the experience of bearing the pressure of loan have a beautiful life when they graduate from college.

In sum, considering the benefits contributed from college students, I think that government should let every admitted students accept the university education. But, government shouldn’t offer the opportunity to them without any charge.

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发表于 2011-9-5 22:24:06 |只看该作者
第八篇 I
Governments should not fund any scientific research whose consequences are unclear

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.



I totally disagree with the author's claim that government should fund only for those researches whose consequences are clear. In terms of the essence of research or the reason why should government have a clear picture of research, the argument is unreasonable and absurd. Although a few researches' results have brought some calamities to our human beings, it is just the problem in the way of using scientific technology, scientific research itself is innocent.

To begin with, taking the result of research is clear or not as a factor to determine if government should fund for is a terrible idea. No one can prove that the investment to any research whose consequence is unclear has no value. We must notice that the essence of scientific research is such a process in which scientists use a logical and systematic way to search for new and unknown information on a particular topic. The invention of Penicillin is such an example that nobody includes Alexander Fleming himself knows what he will find by his experiment on bacteriology, not to mention, no one can predict that the result of this research is such a great one, which almost change the whole world and let millions of people away from death. As scientists are search in an undiscovered field, we have no reason to ask them tell us what they will find in the end.

Second, maybe the reason why the author suggests that government should not fund for unclear research is he/she holds the view that investing in some researches which turn to a failure is a waste of money. However, no matter what an experiment's result is, success or failure, it still has value to let government invests in it. For instance, the contrivance of airplane has experienced countless failures until the Wright brothers successfully made the first propeller plane. Although there are so many unsuccessful experiments before the Wright brothers, the huge amount of money government has invested in these failed researches is still desirable, because all these failures do lead to the final success.

Finally, it is true that government will fund for some researches whose consequence may cause a calamity to the public without inspecting the research in advance. However, a kind of supervision system can be set up instead of simply holding such recommendation. Government can let someone to supervise and estimate the process of the research they funding for, and through this way, we can successfully avoid the calamity brought by scientific research. Besides, most of calamities made by science are not because the research is harmful to us, but the methods we use might make these disasters happen. If we can use the result of scientific research in some right ways, our society will benefit from it a lot and those unpleasant things will not come true.

In sum up, recommendation made by the author is somewhat irrational; if the government adopt such advice, it is possible that no new discovery will be made. So that, we shouldn’t choose which research to be invested in just by if the research’s consequence is clear or not.

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发表于 2011-9-5 22:25:25 |只看该作者
第一篇 A

The following was written by a group of developers in the city of Monroe.

A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. At present, the nearest jazz club is over 60 miles away from Monroe; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have the local market all to itself. In addition, there is ample evidence of the popularity of jazz in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly.' Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. We therefore predict that the C Note cannot help but make money."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.



In this argument, the arguer recommends that we should set up a new jazz club named C Note(C) in Monroe (M) because she predicts that the C will make money without doubt. To strengthen this recommendation, she cites several examples, such as the nearest jazz club is 60 miles away from M, some famous jazz musicians live in M; the speaker also shows a statistic from a nationwide study about the cost of a typical jazz fan spent in a year. Seemingly, this argument is somewhat persuasive; in fact, it provides little credible support for the profitability of this proposal.

First of all, hardly can we accept the auger's claim that the C club would own the local market all to itself just because there is no jazz club whose distance between M is less than 60 miles. As the argument indicates, the jazz fans living in M went to the jazz club over 60 miles away from M in the past and maybe the club is a high quality club with the most skillful DJs and excellent instruments. Except that, even the club away from M is not better than the C club, we still couldn't come to a conclusion like that. As we all know, human being is a kind of animal with habitual behavior so that there will be someone used to go to other clubs even they are far away from their homes. So, without any convincing proof, the arguer cannot draw a conclusion that the C club will have the local market all to itself.

Even I concede that the new club will get the local market all to itself, it still couldn't arrive at this that the new club will surely make money. The argument claims that jazz is popular in M by three examples; however, this might not be the case. For instance, perhaps over 90 percent of the people who attended M's jazz festival last summer don't live in M and these people live far away from M, even in other countries; perhaps those celebrated jazz musicians choose M to live only because M is a peaceful city and they don't want to play jazz any more. To support the popularity of jazz in M, the last fact is also weak. We don't have any idea about the number of programs when the "Jazz Nightly" begins; maybe there is only one program, "Jazz Nightly". Unless the arguer can convince me that all these possibilities are unlikely, I cannot accept the point of view that jazz is very popular in M.

Finally, even assuming that the new club will get the local market all to itself and jazz is popular in M, the nationwide study about the cost of a jazz fan spent on jazz entertainment may be fake. Even if the nationwide study is credible, the people live in M may not spend too much on jazz entertainment. Even they spend as much money on jazz as the people in nationwide study; this money wouldn't all be used to pay for jazz club expenses.

To sum up, there are not enough potent evidences to prove "the C club cannot help but make money", for this reason, the arguer have to account for more persuasive proves in order to convince us that the C club will profit to a fraction.

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发表于 2011-9-5 22:26:04 |只看该作者
第二篇 A
The following appeared in a letter to the school board in the town of Centerville.

All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.


While it may be sure that all the students have duty to learn how to drive a car at Centerville High School (CHS), this author’s argument does not make a cogent case for the necessity of driver’s education course at CHS. It is easy to understand why students should learn how to drive before they become real drivers, but this argument if rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to lead to additional courses.

Citing surveys of traffic accidents in and around Centerville, the author implies that most of the teenage drivers in the town of Centerville are poor in driving; however, it is not clear and even funny because a concrete connection between the level and the appearance of teenage drivers is not effectively made. Hardly can I accept that the arguer draw such a conclusion just speculation over several accidents but not a more professional research. As the argument indicates, some young drivers are involved in several accidents in the past two years, but the reason of these accidents may be bad weather, poor condition of road, mechanical breakdown, or other objective factors. Without getting a clear picture of these traffic accidents, the author cannot reach the sub conclusion that the students in Centerville need to accept the driver's education course.

Additionally, the author hold the view that those teenage drivers in the accidents could do nothing, despite they haven't systematically learn how to drive, because their parents have no time to teach them or their families cannot afford the bill of driver's education course in the two driving schools. There are several ways to resolve these two problems: the students whose parents are too busy to teach their children to drive can pay for driver's education course and the students whose families are on a tight budget can earn money by doing part-time jobs, which are better than the author's project. To strengthen his or her argument, the author would benefit from enumerating more benefits of his/her proposal than other possible solutions.

Even I concede that the students in Centerville are not safe drivers and we can do nothing but carry out the program that all the students are ordered to take driver's education course, the expense shouldn't be stood only by CHS. The bill of courses will be a huge cost which is hard to bear so it is unfair to CHS. As we all know, traffic safety, especially road safety, is a significant factor to define whether a city is a nice place for people to live so that the government of the town of Centerville should be responsible to this program. Consequently, if this program would be implemented by CHS, the government or some special instruction should pick up the tap. Regardless of whether the proposal will be carrying out, the author haven't thought comprehensively about the question of who would pay the piper.

Road safety often adds to a city's property values, leads to a high level of happiness and a better overall quality of life for residents. For these reasons, we should try to promote traffic safety so that we can live a better life. However, the author's argument is not likely successfully help the town government to achieve the target.

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An ancient, traditional remedy for insomnia—the scent of lavender flowers—has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored electronically. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. At the beginning of the second week, the volunteers discontinued their sleeping medication. During that week, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. Therefore, the study proves that lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.



In this argument, the arguer concludes that the traditional remedy for insomnia is effective. To strengthen this conclusion, the arguer provides a recent study about 30 volunteers who are tested by three kinds of methods to cure insomnia and he or she thinks that the consequence of experiment is positive. At the first glance, the study cited by the arguer might be somewhat reasonable, but close scrutiny reveals that it contains several unconvincing assumptions and is therefore unpersuasive.

First of all, the study introduced in the argument is not a successful one; we can’t conclude that the reason why volunteers slept more soundly is the scent of lavender in the third weeks. Because these people have taken their usual sleeping medication for one week before, maybe the concentration of the medication come to an excellent time or perhaps these medications cure the insomnia within a short period of time so that the testees slept better in the third week. Without eliminating the influence of the medication, I cannot accept the arguer’s point of view that lavender can cure insomnia.

Second, even assuming that the influence of the medication they have taken before has absolutely disappeared, the experiment is still supposed to be unsuccessful because the arguer haven’t told us what have the volunteers done when they were tested in those three weeks. Maybe they are required to slept at the first two weeks so that they couldn’t slept soundly or feel tired after sleeping, which can easily understand by our common knowledge. And it is possible that the volunteers are asked to do exercise for a long time during the daytime in the third week; and because of this, people feel more tired than before so that they can sleep more soundly and longer. For that matter, we cannot achieve the answer that the pillows with the smell of lavender do cure the insomnia in these three weeks.

Finally, even I concede that the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks because their insomnia is cured by the scent of lavender, the number of study’s volunteers is too small so that the result of experiment is not credible. As a common knowledge, the reason why people suffer from insomnia is multitudinous, such as tension, physical illness, or mental illness, so that just test the therapy on 30 volunteers cannot come to the conclusion that this method is efficient. Besides that, even if the number of testees is enough, the experimenters intend to examine if the scent of lavender will cure insomnia, he or she should set two groups of people, one is group experimented on and the other is control. Without a rational experiment, we cannot accept the consequence of a study which serves as a proof.

To sum up, the arguer’s conclusion about efficiency of the traditional treatment to insomnia is not well supported as it stands. The author must develop the study so that it can be used as a proof to support the idea of author.

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Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.


In this argument, the arguer concludes that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of deer couldn't follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea. To strengthen this conclusion, the arguer provides some reports from local hunter about the decline of deer’s' population. The arguer also give an explanation that global warming is the reason why these deer cannot follow the old migration patterns. At first glance, the argument might be somewhat reasonable, but close scrutiny reveals that is contains several unconvincing assumptions and is therefore unpersuasive.

First of all, the argument claims that the populations of Arctic deer are declining as there is a report from local hunter to support. However, this might not be the case. Not having done any scientific research, local hunter's report is unbelievable because there are many other reasons to explain why these hunters feel the number of deer is decline, besides it really happens. For example, perhaps local deer have changed their habits and stay at somewhere hard to be found when local hunters are hunting, or perhaps these local hunters have been bought off by some environment firms who will get profit from hunters' report. Without ruling out such possibilities, I cannot accept the arguer's point of decrease in population of deer.

Even assuming that the report from local hunters is reliable and the populations of deer are really decreasing, the causal relationship between global warming and decrease does not be proved. The arguer observes a coincidence between the fact that global warming makes the sea ice melt and the reduction of the number of deer, and then concludes that global warming is the indirect cause to the reduction. However, there is no evidence to shows that global warming has an effect upon the deer living environment. Although the global climate is becoming warmer, maybe it is still not effective to change the deer’s' habitat, which is still cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands.
Without showing reliable relationship between these two things, the arguer cannot conclude that global warming is responsible for decline of the deer populations.

Finally, even I concede that the number of deer is decreasing and its reason is global warming, the arguer fails to consider possible differences between deer can't follow the old migration pattern and deer populations' decrease that might bring about a different result to the conclusion. For instance, maybe the old migration pattern cannot to be followed; young deer can also find a new one to replace it and it wouldn't contribute to the decrease. Additionally, the reason why deer populations are declining may be some other animals enter into the habitat of deer and destroy the environment balance. Without thinking about these alternatives, we cannot accept that the speaker's conclusion that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.

To sum up, the arguer’s conclusion about why deer populations has reduced is not well supported as it stand. To bolster it, the author must provide more evidence, such as relationship between global warming and the change happened in deer’s habitat, and a believable report.

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The following appeared in a business magazine.

As a result of numerous complaints of dizziness and nausea on the part of consumers of Promofoods tuna, the company requested that eight million cans of its tuna be returned for testing. Promofoods concluded that the canned tuna did not, after all, pose a health risk. This conclusion is based on tests performed on samples of the recalled cans by chemists from Promofoods; the chemists found that of the eight food chemicals most commonly blamed for causing symptoms of dizziness and nausea, five were not found in any of the tested cans. The chemists did find small amounts of the three remaining suspected chemicals but pointed out that these occur naturally in all canned foods."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be addressed in order to decide whether the conclusion and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to the questions would help to evaluate the conclusion.

In this argument, Promofoods (P) conclude that their product, the canned tuna, did not pose a health risk. To strengthen this conclusion, P provides the conclusion about the tests performed on samples of the recalled cans by chemists from P. At first glance, the argument might be somewhat reasonable, but close scrutiny reveals that it contains several unconvincing assumptions and is therefore unpersuasive.

First of all, the argument claims that the canned tuna produced by P don't pose a health risk, which is concluded by the result of tests performed by P's chemists. However, this might not be the case. There obviously exist some other possible explanations for this phenomenon besides having the canned tuna really doesn’t have any relation with dizziness and nausea. Because these chemists are from P, to protect P from being impeached by those ill consumers, and to safeguard the P's interest, those chemists may tell a lie about the result of tests or they may conduct the experiment based on some healthy canned tuna from other companies. Without ruling out such possibilities, I cannot accept P's conclusion that their canned tuna isn't harmful to consumers.

Second, even assuming that the conclusion of tests operated by P's chemists is really based on the recalled cans and what they report is truly the result of their experiments; it is still unbelievable that the canned tuna is healthy. There could be many other explanations to the fact, such as the sample is not big enough to show whether the tuna is health or not. Since the ill people are part of the consumers, maybe some cans cause dizziness and nausea and the others don't. Even I concede that the example is large enough, but the result of tests shows that chemists find small amounts of the three chemicals which may cause symptoms of dizziness and nausea, this may be the reason why some consumers suffer from dizziness and nausea. Although P claims that these three chemicals occur naturally in all canned food, perhaps the amounts of the three chemicals is large enough to cause the diseases. Without accounting for all other explanations, P shouldn't reasonably conclude that their canned tuna have no relationship with dizziness and nausea.

Finally, even all the recalled cans is healthy and don't pose a health risk, P still cannot say that their tuna is innocent, because maybe these eight million cans are healthy but those cans sold before is not. The part of consumers suffers from dizziness and nausea is because they have eaten the early cans but not those eight million cans. So that maybe these recalled cans is health, but the reason of dizziness and nausea is still related with P.

To sum up, P assumes that the canned tuna did not, after all, pose a health risk is not well supported as it stands. To bolster it, P must provide more evidence.

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原来自己写了这么多了 可是为什么感觉没有什么进步呢？？
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3# lovetian

这篇关于gifted children should be identified and educated by society 的习作, 分论点可以再优化下. 另外, 建议把其他同学对习作的修改意见也贴上来-- 拿出来常看看.

进步在于能知不足并专注改进.
问我，考我，检验我的话，以便改善你自己！

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