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发表于 2011-11-8 22:25:03 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

RT，求拍求定位。我们学校一外教说我的水平就3.5，让我上他的辅导课，5节课1000.想知道有没有必要去上
59.Scientists and other researchers should focus their research on areas that are likely to benefit the greatest number of people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
I strongly agree with the speaker on the basis that scientists and researchers should take account of the public interests when choosing their research areas for reasons involved with the predominant role of science in society and the social responsibility of researchers. However upon further reflection it begs the question about the nature of science and, if strictly following the recommendation, it will have chilling effect both on individuals and society as a whole.
Admittedly, science was once referred to "the ivory tower", free from the political, religious and social interferences. However, since the Industrial Revolution, science and technology has gone hand in hand to "revolutionize" the whole society. One only need no further look into his or her daily life to find out that science and technology are everywhere and whenever. With the development of telecommunication technology, one can keep in touch with his long-distance friends by mobile phones conveniently; they do not have to wait for the letter for weeks or even months like their grandparents do. With the aid of airplanes, it only take a few hours, settling in the comfortable armchair and sipping champagne, for a businessman to cover thousands of miles to another country. Besides, especially since the World War II, government grants, which derives from taxes from its citizens, has made up a great proportion of the research funding, or maybe the paramount one. In other words, it is the public who lays the foundation for scientific research.
While scientific research is so associated with the public interests, the implicit rationale behind the statement is that researchers are able to predict the results of their research, which violates the nature of science. After all, science is far more being a body of knowledge about
things around us but also an ongoing process which entails permanent revisions and challenges as new evidences are flooding in when we discover the world deeper.

Meanwhile, if the recommendation is strictly adopted, it inevitably brings about catastrophes to both researchers and society in the long term. Firstly, the individual talents will be wasted as scientists are required compulsorily to focus on the limited areas connected with the public, which is no doubt a shame. In addition, they can be so unmotivated as lack of interest that researchers might not devote themselves into their career wholeheartedly. For this reason, the results of such research can be rather disappointing.
On a societal level, as applied research is more directly linked with the interests of the public, in all possibility researchers will concentrate their energy and time on such projects. Though it can result in immediate benefits in the short term, the inevitable result is the disregard of basic research, which bases the foundation of science as it is original and basic in charter and builds new frontiers for knowledge. Actually, the applied research is an extension of basic research for the simple reason that it solves certain problems employing very well and accepted theories or principles.
In short, while both science and society will benefit from research closely linked with the maximum benefits of the greatest number of people, it is better to leave the decision and right

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发表于 2011-11-10 18:12:14 |只看该作者

1# highness811

根据OG scoring guide, 这个在4分+ 。相信自己，你语言根基很好（你是外语系的吗？），核心论点也把握到了。如果能把admittedly的让步段（相当于minor point次要点）浓缩下，而把接下来的major point突出，这样就重点突出、层次分明（这属于organization的考量）。meanwhile段加入例子会更好，illustrate your point with concrete example(s) to make it easier for your reader to understand. --这属于对论点的development. 如果在这方面整理下，能砍下5分。

同时，我要质疑外教是否坑爹？？？s/he 是否专门研究过AW的写法与评分标准：根本不存在3.5分一说。（只有I及A汇总分才有0.5分档）

如果你肯用功，多写、多改，相信会有好收成的。
至于上外教课是否更有效，你可以咨询下学兄学姐，看看是否真的外教能讲到点子上；之后再决定是否报班也不迟。

如果定力够强，就把一千元用在-- 作为对自己多写、多改的奖赏上。

59.Scientists and other researchers should focus their research on areas that are likely to benefit the greatest number of people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

I strongly agree with the speaker on the basis that scientists and researchers should take account of the public interests when choosing their research areas for reasons involved with the predominant role of science in society and the social responsibility of researchers. However upon further reflection it begs the question about the nature of science and, if strictly following the recommendation, it will have chilling effect both on individuals and society as a whole. 【首句中的strongly建议删去，因为这与你第二句的however形成冲突。however才是重心，前面是让步（acknowledging differing viewpoints】
Admittedly, science was once referred to "the ivory tower", free from the political, religious and social interferences. However, since the Industrial Revolution, science and technology has gone hand in hand to "revolutionize" the whole society. One only need no further look into his or her daily life to find out that science and technology are everywhere and whenever. With the development of telecommunication technology, one can keep in touch with his long-distance friends by mobile phones conveniently; they do not have to wait for the letter for weeks or even months like their grandparents do. With the aid of airplanes, it only take a few hours, settling in the comfortable armchair and sipping champagne, for a businessman to cover thousands of miles to another country. Besides, especially since the World War II, government grants, which derives from taxes from its citizens, has made up a great proportion of the research funding, or maybe the paramount one. In other words, it is the public who lays the foundation for scientific research.
While scientific research is so associated with the public interests, the implicit rationale behind the statement is that researchers are able to predict the results of their research, which violates the nature of science. After all, science is far more being a body of knowledge about
things around us but also an ongoing process which entails permanent revisions and challenges as new evidences are flooding in when we discover the world deeper.

Meanwhile, if the recommendation is strictly adopted, it inevitably brings about catastrophes to both researchers and society in the long term. Firstly, the individual talents will be wasted as scientists are required compulsorily to focus on the limited areas connected with the public, which is no doubt a shame. In addition, they can be so unmotivated as lack of interest that researchers might not devote themselves into their career wholeheartedly. For this reason, the results of such research can be rather disappointing.
On a societal level, as applied research is more directly linked with the interests of the public, in all possibility researchers will concentrate their energy and time on such projects. Though it can result in immediate benefits in the short term, the inevitable result is the disregard of basic research, which bases the foundation of science as it is original and basic in charter and builds new frontiers for knowledge. Actually, the applied research is an extension of basic research for the simple reason that it solves certain problems employing very well and accepted theories or principles.

In short, while both science and society will benefit from research closely linked with the maximum benefits of the greatest number of people, it is better to leave the decision and right

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发表于 2011-11-10 21:00:48 |只看该作者

现在这倒是个普遍现象...老外心思也活络着呢...我考试那会儿，我们学校的外教也想忽悠我，被别人当众拆穿了...

GRE的作文并不一定是个老外就写得好的...个人觉得追求3.0以上上课的作用已经不大了，关键还是自己的能力

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2# panmingming2008
非常感谢T T~~~我去听了一节课，当撒水票撒了200大洋。。。
没有什么实质性的帮助T T~~~就是让你不断追问what Is it。。。
不是外语系的，新闻的，所以觉得AW还是分高点好T T

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3# 咖啡盐
真是被忽悠了。。。听了一节课还一直跟我说应该听完五节，讲一堆不着边际的，我也会啊，不就是苏格拉底的追问法么。。。
╮(╯▽╰)╭ 当洒水了，200大洋
关键是被他这么一说，心里就很慌了

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发表于 2011-11-11 21:00:24 |只看该作者

上课撑死了就是听个解题思路，有些时候还不一定适合你╮(╯▽╰)╭考试就是这么无奈呀...

找个靠谱的老外改作文还不错，我比较推荐，找老外上课...真说辅导的话，老外的辅导真心觉得还木有XDF靠谱。想上4的话，如果平时像我这样玩玩乐乐的话，这段时间还是不把自己当人看的好，全心扑上去，把新闻当电视剧看，把社论当小说看...

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