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发表于 2012-4-9 22:03:46 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Colleges and universities should require their students to spend at least one semester studying in a foreign country.(82)

Perhaps few things in this world are as significant to university educators as what the most effective educating method is to college students. Despite various responses people may have concerning the issue regarding whether colleges and universities should require their students to spend at least one semester studying in a foreign country, I, given the chance, prefer to endorse that either the affirmative answer or negative seems too extreme.

To begin with, requiring college students to spend at least one semester studying in a foreign country pays both students and the society. For one thing, studying abroad for at least a semester provides the students with the great opportunity to broaden their horizon. A college student, given the chance to experiencing studying in a different country will no doubt be exposed to cultural, knowledge and incidents that he or she has never been face with, that will seductively make the student equipped with the capability to gain more knowledge, make more friends and grow to be mature when confronted with setbacks, all of which will be an advantage that makes he or she more competitive in later days when the student hunts for a job. Also, requiring university students to study in a foreign country may help the society to develop more successfully. College students are the people who will be the majority in the country in the near future when they graduate, and therefore the future of the society, to some extent, is determined by the ability of college students. Additionally, chances are that university students may find certain virtue of another country that otherwise may not be perceived by government officials. Take Michael Lee, a college student in Peking University as an example, he successfully settled the problem of traffic jam in the city of Beijing after being inspired by the traffic system in the city of New York which he studied carefully during his one-semester studying there as an exchange student.

The favorable aspect of requiring college students to spend at least one semester studying in a foreign country, however, cannot eclipse the problematic part underlying this issue. To be specific, it is highly likely that not every family of every student can afford studying in a foreign country, especially those in developing countries whose living condition are deplorable. Furthermore, the individuals have to adapt themselves to the culture of another country that may be in sharp contrast to his or her hometown, which may make the student less confident and introverted. For instance, the joke that makes americans cannot stop laughing may sounds nothing interesting to a German student. In short, not every student is suitable for, or is looking forward to the life abroad.

Granted that spending at least one semester studying in a foreign country is of great significance in terms of laying firm foundation for the personal achievement of the student by acquiring more knowledge and experience abroad, education amounts to far more than knowledge and experience; it also embraces delivering beliefs, values and humanity. In my view, students can either choose to study at least one semester in a foreign country or not, as long as students can find either method of study help to elicit the potential of them aimed at helping to realize the riches within themselves.

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发表于 2012-4-10 11:05:54 |只看该作者

首先你的论点就不对：如果你认为不是每个学生都应该出国，那对issue问题的态度就应该是坚决的negative而不是第一段那种模棱两可的东西。只要有一个负面理由就足以否定should require了嘛

论证和逻辑没啥大问题，仍然可以改进的地方：
- 你说出国学习会增进跨文化的理解，太绝对了。德国人去瑞士、阿联酋人去卡塔尔、澳大利亚人去新西兰会开拓多大的视界呢？当然学生在一个陌生的国家独立生活本身就可以带来你下文说的那些好处，但这已经完全不是一个问题了
- 至于国家未来，我要问你，学习成套的外国理论和在本国深入基层实践调研哪个对国家的发展帮助更大？恐怕至少应该是兼而有之不可偏废吧。
- 还有，你那个学生的例子是真的么？

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发表于 2012-4-10 14:24:38 |只看该作者

2# ZTree
多谢大侠！

我听人家说issue如果观点一边倒分数不高诶，显得不够复杂。

那对国家未来有好处那一段如果兼而有之的话要加入些什么，怎么改呢？
那个例子是我编的………………要紧么？

多谢大侠！

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发表于 2012-4-10 14:39:32 |只看该作者

本帖最后由 okqishi 于 2012-4-10 14:43 编辑

我听人家说issue如果观点一边倒分数不高诶，显得不够复杂。

这到不见得
虽说XDF老师也不推荐一边倒...我对这种说法持保留意见
现在貌似大部分G友无论怎么样都要坚持写平衡观点，觉得保险。其实不然，有些题目fundamentally agree 或disagree更好写，也更流畅。
我只是希望各位G友不要被“平衡观点”限制住。写issue，只要你写的能说服ETS考官同意你的观点就是成功。

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发表于 2012-4-10 14:49:20 |只看该作者

4# okqishi
多谢斑竹！其实我觉得这篇就是写成基本上同意好写一些……

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发表于 2012-4-10 23:40:57 |只看该作者

2# ZTree
多谢大侠！

我听人家说issue如果观点一边倒分数不高诶，显得不够复杂。

那对国家未来有好处那一段如果兼而有之的话要加入些什么，怎么改呢？
那个例子是我编的………………要紧么？

多谢大侠！ ...
mynameisamo 发表于 2012-4-10 14:24

告诉你什么叫一边倒：
学生必须出国学习一个学期
学生不应该出国学习
现在题目的issue是：学生必须出国学习一个学期。如果你支持他你就是一边倒，如果你全面否定也是一边倒；但是如果你说不应该强制应该分场合而定，你的论点恰恰是两面兼顾

国家未来那个，想清楚讨论范畴，哪些东西可以学国外，哪些东西必须立足本国

任何时候都不要编例子，实在想说可以用假设的语气说（我们可以期待一个学生通过学习×××解决×××问题）。

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发表于 2012-4-13 08:11:27 |只看该作者

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发表于 2012-4-15 20:23:59 |只看该作者

7# panmingming2008
感谢斑竹的仔细讲评和认真制作！谢谢！

那一篇是我第一次写issue，写的很不好。

我又改了一下。求斑竹看看，谢谢！

Thisstatement is partly correct, for there are circumstances under whichuniversities should require their students to spend at least one semesterstudying in a foreign country. My partial approval, however, is subject to theproviso that I cannot support the "should or compelling" impressionit gives. Whether universities should make it as a requirement or not dependson specific circumstances.

Havingqualified my answer somewhat, I must elaborate my principle. Simply put, whenthe university and students can afford to study abroad, it provides thestudents with great opportunity to learn more about their major. Consideringdifferent background and development of the same major, two countries will nodoubt have featured curriculum that cannot be acquired by students unless theygo to that specific country. This tells especially the truth when the studentsgo to a foreign country where the major is fully developed. Take the founder ofHuawei corporation Mark Lee as an example. He got the inspiration ofestablishing such a firm when he was a sophomore major in computer science inthe United States, as an exchange student. According to his autobiography, theknowledge and experience in the U.S. as an exchange student equip himself withthe capability to see his major from a different perspective which directly ledto his inspiration of creating a company.

Toexpand on this point, requiring students to study in a foreign country will paythe society as well. When a student from a developing country spend at leastone semester in another developed country, chances are high that he or she willlearn from the advantages of that country and later on apply what he or she haslearned to the practical work after graduating in the developing country. Backwhen one hundred years ago, women in China did not get a chance to be educatedresulting from the fact that the majority of society regard women as thoseinferior to men and as those whose obligation is staying at home. This trendstarted to change, however, after a senior official in China further his studyin Britain, perceiving that the society will get benefit and women are giventhe opportunity to be educated from then on.

But in another case, the university shouldnot require it. It is likely that the university or the student cannot affordto study abroad. Not every private school are as wealthy as those privateschools to pay the students. "Why should we spend ten times money inanother country than at home a year, which causes me to have to cut down thedaily family expense and do more partime job merely to afford my child to studyabroad? Show me your proof!" claimed by a mother of one Indian student.

In the light of all these findings, thisstatement can be made for this thesis. Nevertheless, whether the college anduniversity should require the students to study at least one semester abroaddepends on specific condition.

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