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To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities

The speaker claims that in order to understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. While I concede that major cities often possess several important societal traits, whether these cities should be the center of study entirely depends on how one defines “important characteristics”.
Surely major cities plays important roles in representing a society’s historical origin and cultural deposits. Since it is major cities where historic architectures and museums are maintained, a visit to these sites will develop an immediate and intuitional image of the whole society’s history and culture. When people talk about America, France or China, the Statue of Liberty, the Eiffel Tower and the Great Wall, immediately comes to mind. These landmarks are located in New York, Paris and Beijing respectively, all of which are famous major cities.
Major cities also represents the highest achievement in economy and technology of a society. Being the breeding ground for investment banks and large enterprises, major cities are replete with jobs and opportunities, which significantly boost the economic development of the whole society. The Wall Street in New York, where hundreds of thousands of global trades and stock exchanges take place every day, is not only the business center of United States, but also the heart of the global economy. Also notable is the technology achievement is these cities. Equipped with the finest infrastructure and technology in medical care, communication and transportation, major cities provide an instant indicator of the latest advancement in technology.
However, major cities may be less helpful when it comes to traditional culture of a society. Admittedly, museums and galleries serve to preserve and display a society’s most representative traditional culture, the real traditional cultural heritages, such as folk art, crafts and customs, may nevertheless rest in small towns and cities. Actually, major cities are more likely to be described as multicultural hodgepodge rather than basis for native traditional culture. Cities in different nations are getting more convergent and indistinguishable on latest fashion and popular culture due to the globalization of culture and economy. As a result, one may be surprised to discover a lack of disparity between a coffee shop in a downtown street of Shanghai and a Starbuck in Manhattan.
Moreover, when such characteristic as general welfare is concerned, a narrow sight on major cities can sometimes cause serious bias and misconception. The 2008 Beijing Olympic Games and 2010 Shanghai Expo attracted myriads of tourists and investors from other nations, and many of those who marvel at these flourishing cities often mistake them as the real image of the entire nation. Yet what is rarely noted and mentioned is the poverty-stricken rural areas where migrant workers flow to cities for jobs and children are provided with inadequate opportunities for education. The remarkable annual growth in GDP is nothing but a misleading illusion, because obviously the prosperity of major cities does not necessarily guarantee the general well-being of a society.
Therefore, for those who want to develop an overall understanding of a society, a study confined to major cities is clearly insufficient. In fact, a society is a comprehensive and complex entity where any limited focus on certain specific locations may bring inaccurate and incomplete perception.

感觉写作文真是愁死了，要么想不出好观点，要么词穷。

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发表于 2012-10-19 11:09:41 |只看该作者

the Great Wall不在大城市。这些旅游景点告诉你什么characteristics of a society了？感觉展开不够。

文化传统这个转折是不是矛盾？我觉得你直接说It is also important to understand rural area in order to...

晕。两正两反，结论又是it depends。it depends不是个好中心句。要么你就分类讨论。

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发表于 2012-10-19 12:19:41 |只看该作者

Basilisk 发表于 2012-10-19 11:09
the Great Wall不在大城市。这些旅游景点告诉你什么characteristics of a society了？感觉展开不够。

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确实这些问题我也一直很头疼。这道题恶心就恶心在两个地方，一是characteristics，二是society。这里既没有明确界定characteristics，也不是用nation来代替society，感觉抽象度一下子高了很多，不知道从哪写。其实我在做的就是分类讨论，那个depends只是一个引子，结尾并没有再去提它。只是我不知道怎么去分类。至于建筑景点的问题我完全同意，这样写基本上等于什么都没说。非常感谢你的建议！

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Basilisk 发表于 2012-10-19 11:09
the Great Wall不在大城市。这些旅游景点告诉你什么characteristics of a society了？感觉展开不够。

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至于文化方面的转折，其实我也有注意。说historic和cultural deposits的时候我用的限定语是"play an important role"，并没有否认还有其它的可能，而且我特意强调了这样得到的image是immediate和intuitional的。至于另一个culture，我指的是传统文化和民俗一类的，而且用的限定语是"less helpful"而不是totally useless，所以我觉得可能是有点冲突，但是没有构成明显的矛盾。

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