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本帖最后由 tesolchina 于 2015-3-3 13:41 编辑
Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
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To broaden the horizons of students and encourage the exchange of ideas, it is proposed in the claim that every student should be required to take a variety of courses outside his major field of study. However, the rigid requirement will have seriously negative impacts on students and there are a lot of alternative ways for students to acquire the knowledge outside their own fields.
negative impacts on students可否具体一点点
文章篇幅所限a lot of用a number of 更合适
Firstly, courses outside a student's field of study will definitely cost much time which could be spent on his major field, and ineluctably have negative impact on his study in his major field. For example, courses in math, physics, and engineering accumulate wisdom from many great people in the history, and students majoring in these subjects, already have so heavy burden to digest the concepts and skills that most of them need to study till mid-night to catch up the pace of professors. If they are assigned to take the courses of other fields, their limited time of entertainment and sleep will be occupied and no good will be done on their health.
accumulate wisdom from many great people in the history这个说法有点灌水的感觉
最后提到的后果- no good will be done on their health- 没有和大学教育结合起来
当然 health也是相关的 但是这里讨论和大学教育有关的话题会不会更合适
You can argue that students' time will be taken away by the course requirement from the major courses
Scrutinizing the proposal more closely, besides the extra cost of bandwidth, students' performance in these required courses may introduce unnecessary pressure and limit their quality of learning. Generally, students taking courses outside their majors are relatively weak at the corresponding background knowledge, and may take longer to get on track. During that hard starting period, they probably will not get good grades. Naturally, they may get frustrated and doubt if they are really good at learning, which will impede the learning not only in his own major and the courses in other fields.
Scrutinizing the proposal more closely和句子的主语不匹配啊
You may want to mention the concepts such as "confidence", "attitudes" and "motivation" to clarify your arguments
It's good to introduce the concepts from issue 45- quality of learning/ test grades
Even if we find that the knowledge in other fields is really essential, like the psychology knowledge for physicians, math for economics, and history for literature, the knowledge is still accessible to students without being delivered in formal courses. Thanks to internet and smart devices, knowledge in almost all fields of study are easily stored and shared, and it's quite handy for students to do self learning. A student can watch documentary on history on his iPad, read the blogs of best psychologists and attend the online presentation of a famous mathematician. They don't need to worry about the grades and are free to focus on what they are really interested in and exchange ideas with people all over the world, which can have more positive impact on their study.
this paragraph is well written
it actually refers back to the issue of grades again which is good
But you need to bear in mind that formal teaching in a structured course is usually more efficient
In summary, the requirement for students to take courses outside their fields of study may impose pressure and squeeze time from students' tight schedule, and will further impede their study. As alternatives, students can access the essential knowledge from internet and digital medias, which may serve better to expand their knowledge base.
impose pressure (exert/put pressure to)
from internet and digital medias - digitally via the Internet
感觉楼主每段的中心已经很明确
也会去借鉴一些其他题目的思路和内容
接下来要做的就是内容细节上的打磨了
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