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发表于 2005-1-7 11:00:06 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

issue131  The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society.
Arts, the highest understanding of the real world and the most effective way to express human being’s feelings and spiritual world, so-called the soul of human being, has been an indispensable part of people’s life. It is hard to imagine a world without music, painting or literature.

For their subtle fine expressional forms, arts usually seem virtual as to be compared with the real world. After all, their sources and original materials lie in the everyday life. Despite of all representative forms they assume, the essence of arts originates from the real world. Music, for instance, originated from the folk songs of the ancient labor people, developed later in rituals and then passed from generation to generation. They didn’t come out suddenly without any realistic reason. Painting, which is an important part in the art gallery, is a direct form to reflect the world. You may find everything in our life in paintings such as trees, peoples or animals, etc..

As means to reveal the relationship between ideas and objectives, arts bridge the artists’ thoughts and behaviors. First of all, arts reflect artists’ perspectives of the world. The artists may show their favors or dislikes in their works. In a Chinese painting, a pine tree rooted in peculiar stones may symbolize the painter’s pursuing for noble personality that is characterized by never bowing to wrong authorities or adhering to right principles in any cases. Secondly, what relationship lies between arts and those people who are not artists and don’t create arts directly? Do arts reveal their mental world in some certain levels? I would say, ” Yes.”  Though there is some art cannot be well understood by the public, it is unreasonable to deny the public aesthetic values of arts in general. Not only artists need arts. General people need arts as well. When people find art works that evoke their inner feelings, they may devote themselves to develop and popularize such arts in their own ways. Then some fashions may be formed in such processes and some vogue of society may be shaped accordingly. As a result, people’s preferences may be presented by the extent of the population of some certain kinds of arts. Viewing such phenomena in another angle, arts present people’s aesthetic preferences, and then present the general aesthetic preferences and hidden ideas of the whole society.

Furthermore, considering the relationship between the artists and the society, we may find out more indicators of the social function of arts. As social animals, no people can be independent of the influences of his temporal society. Consciously or unconsciously, the artists cannot make his works irrelative completely with his temporal society. Some certain facets of societies are determinate to be reflected in art works. A critic literature, for instance, may express the author’s dissatisfaction with the temporal government and reveal his ideal political modes in his works. Musicians may show their compliments to something through their works. Of course such inclination will not only constitute certain cultures of certain societies but also affect the developmental trends of societies. The artists’ works reveal their inclinations, and such inclinations usually indicate the impulses of societies.

As one famous proverb says,” Arts come from our real life but it is higher than our real life”. They may not reflect the real world directly, but it reveals the connotation of the life. In another word, arts reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society.

谢谢snowman的中肯建义。我也感觉你说的是我文章的问题。我文章的主线是这样的：

最关键主线：艺术源于生活，所以必然反映了其时的社会风向和脉搏。这里有个“现实生活”与“社会里的hidden ideas等”的关系

小主线： 1  艺术的内容和素材都源于生活。
         2  艺术家的作品揭示他的内心世界和他对这个世界的观点和看法。一般人则在艺术中找自己的共鸣。社会是由人组成的。一般人对艺术的认可程度体现了艺术对他们内心的东西的揭示程度。找到共鸣的人，往往致力于推广他欣赏的艺术。人们的这种（对艺术的）偏好构成了社会hiddeen idea的一个（重要）部分。而他们内心的东西也是社会hidden ideas的组成部分。

3创造艺术的艺术家和社会的关系。艺术家不能独立于其所处的社会。他的作品必然活多或少地反映社会的某些方面

所以，艺术揭示了…………

   我也觉得我前面部分想法是可以的，但是表达总是有点游离于主题外的味道。回头继续改上来给大家拍

再次感谢snowman。我会努力用我的劳动换你更多的砖头。谢谢

呵呵，考完了，感觉还可以，一切都还顺利，没有浪费一分钟，时间全部利用上了，感觉时间还是很紧哦。虽有好的思想但是来不及全部表达。不过基本上达到ETS要求了吧，觉得要拿个够用的4分还是有希望的。自己感觉考场上写的时候比前几天的限时作文还顺手些。我平时限时作文总是思维卡壳，今天还好，由于题目对胃口，没有停顿下来思考过，所以字数感觉应该上了400 的了。可是我练习时有次只有394字啊。题目我已经帖到机经那个主题下了，大家参考一下。

有很多经验想和大家分享，待后整理出来再帖上来吧。

由于应付考试，老板的课题有半个月没做了。所以接下来的日子我还是会很忙。但是我会抽时间尽我所能看大家的作文的。

因为我的时间不是很充分，所以我可能会尽可能先看很快要考的朋友的作文，记得好像snowman比我只晚四天，刚才看到还有不怕开水烫的猪好像也很快要考了。等我这个周加完班，再看其他朋友的作文。让我们一起为我们的梦想而努力！！！

今天上QQ第一条消息是来自GTER上网友zhangsx的，很感动，竟然有人记得并祝福我。真的很感动。

在这里，我也衷心祝这里的所有GTER都在考场上充分发挥出水平，圆自己的梦想！！！大家一起努力吧

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发表于 2005-1-7 11:57:30 |只看该作者

恕不能精确做修改，只谈一下看后的大体感受吧：
开始好象没有明确表态，总感觉没扣紧题；
body1讲了art起源，感觉应该再加强一些与reveal hidden ideas and impulses 的联系；
body2 感觉刚贴近主题的时候，又扯开了；
body3比较好。
总体感得reveal hidden ideas and impulses，好象没突出，没有很有力地support 主题。
一点儿拙见，如是本人对文章的体会不深而造成误评，请谅解。

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发表于 2005-1-7 14:55:49 |只看该作者

别人的观点。分享

以下是我请一个在美国读了近5年博士的朋友改我这篇issue他所提的意见，贴出来供大家参考啊。感觉说的挺在理。

1. A typical way of writing in English literature (may be in Chinese also) is putting a master sentence in the beginning of each paragraph (sometimes, the end of paragraph). These master sentences help readers read and writers write. You can always incorporate this style in your writing.
2. Compared to Oriental people (or students), the Western people/students (at least in the U.S.) are not good at abstract thinking, Westerners are better at more concrete things and creative in finishing concrete tasks. Be sure to give example or examples to support each of your points of view. It will read better for Westerners. Believe me, some professors can’t understand our deep and wonderful thinking.

Another perspective, arts record our history and our experiences.

哦，说明一下啊。对snowman的衷心感谢在上面那个帖子里。为了少翻页，我就直接编辑原帖子了。

回头偶去看看你的，好像是183哈

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发表于 2005-1-7 17:11:42 |只看该作者

同意snowman的评论。

131. "The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."

艺术（绘画、音乐、文学等等）揭示了隐藏的其他方面的社会理念和动力。

我觉得这个论题关键在于 “otherwise hidden “ ，比较难理解和展开论述。

艺术肯定是对人类活动的直接体现或抽象化，艺术创造的本意就是 reveal  hidden ideas and impulses of a society，那"otherwise"是不是艺术带来的其他意义：被揭示了具有超过原来的更高层次？或者艺术家故意用艺术的表面意义对作品的实际意义的掩盖？

或者，这个论题就是指艺术的表象和它所带来的深层意义？正如：战争艺术的表现是否是对和平的向往？  大自然的景色（无论好坏）的记录是否是对环保的渴求？摇滚歌曲的是否是对社会不满的宣泄和叛逆？

我对这个论题还不能很好理解..............  :mad:

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发表于 2005-1-7 17:41:24 |只看该作者

谢谢snowman的中肯建义。我也感觉你说的是我文章的问题。我文章的主线是这样的：

最关键主线：艺术源于生活，所以必然反映了其时的社会风向和脉搏。这里有个“现实生活”与“社会里的hidden ideas等”的关系

小主线： 1 艺术的内容和素材都源于生活。
2 艺术家的作品揭示他的内心世界和他对这个世界的观点和看法。一般人则在艺术中找自己的共鸣。社会是由人组成的。一般人对艺术的认可程度体现了艺术对他们内心的东西的揭示程度。找到共鸣的人，往往致力于推广他欣赏的艺术。人们的这种（对艺术的）偏好构成了社会hiddeen idea的一个（重要）部分。而他们内心的东西也是社会hidden ideas的组成部分。

3创造艺术的艺术家和社会的关系。艺术家不能独立于其所处的社会。他的作品必然活多或少地反映社会的某些方面

所以，艺术揭示了…………

我也觉得我前面部分想法是可以的，但是表达总是有点游离于主题外的味道。回头继续改上来给大家拍

再次感谢snowman。我会努力用我的劳动换你更多的砖头。谢谢

谢谢migao21的诚恳交流。其实我也不动那个otherwise 到底是啥子东东啊。凑合就写了。反正艺术的，我追求能写个字就不错了l

回头根据大家的意见改了再贴上来