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发表于 2005-6-27 07:15:01 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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22.The following appeared in a memo from the president of a company that builds and sells new homes in Steel City.

"Over the past five years, the population of Steel City has increased by more than 20 percent, and family incomes in Steel City have risen much faster than the national average. Nationwide, sales of houses priced above $150,000 have increased more than have sales of lower-priced houses. Such data indicate that we should make changes in our business to increase company profits. First, we should build fewer low-priced houses than we did last year and focus instead on building houses designed to sell at above $150,000. Second, we should hire additional workers so that we can build a larger total number of houses than we did last year."

俺的作品:
In this argument, the arguer proposes that they should change their focus to houses above $150000 and hire additional workers to build more houses than ever. To support the claim, the arguer provides the evidence that both the population and their incomes in Steel city have experienced a rise during the past years. Additionally, the main increase of houses sales lies in houses above $150000. However, we need not go far to see how groundless the conclusion is.
The major problem of this argument is that the arguer fails to convince us that there is an increasing demand for new houses. The increase of population does not guarantee that people who want to buy new houses boosted, too. There are great deal of other factors that may affect the market of house selling such as residents’ current living condition, economic background and people’s consumption concepts there, which the arguer fails to take into account. The faster increase of incomes than the national average does not justify that people there have already had abilities to afford the purchasing of new houses. Perhaps the national average income level is very low, so the consumption ability in Steel city is still limited.
Moreover, the assumption that more high-price houses are needed is untenable. The data used is for national wide and dose not prove that Steel city is the same case like that. Granted that the survey could stand for the condition in Steel city, the statistics is still too vague to be informative, because though the rate of increase of high-price houses may be higher, the base amount of it is probably very low, so as a result, low-price houses are still in stronger need than houses above $150000.
Last but not least, the arguer’s suggestion that we should hire additional worker is unfounded. There is no evidence indicate that this company is lack of workers and it is very likely that it has the ability to build more houses with its current staff.
For all the reasons above, it is obvious that this argument is not well reasoned. To make it logically acceptable, the arguer should provide more evidence to prove that the demand of new houses is really increasing. To better evaluate it, we need more information about which kind of house is more favored and whether we need enlarge our staff.

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