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决战830拍砖组,左拍ISSUE41右拍ISSUE4
Issue41 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧!
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作者:寄托家园作文版普通用户 共用时间:56分41秒 503words
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Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science.
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Science , generally considered to be a measure to judge phenomenon of the nature or of a society, which has its own limit, does not always the only way to decide whether a phenomenon's existence is rational. Valid as the argument and I fundamentally agree with it that such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal are hardly addressed by mainstream science, //这里要不要加个连词,句子结构好象有点问题哦//it appears fallacious and impossible to deny the necessity of their existence.//观点鲜明,赞//
In the first place , the nonmainstream areas of inquiry, such as astrology , has already rooted firmly in society//这句子我喜欢呀//, even on campus. As far as I am concerned , most college students are in favor of fashionable magazines , which contains columns of astrology and paranormal pursuits. Two months ago, a survey made by an organization named CRIC (College Readings Institution of China) in the top 50 colleges and universities in China including my university shew that 56.2 percent of those top students chose fashionable magazine to be their extracurricular readings, amongst which 76.3 percent declare they read columns of astrology and paranormal pursuits of each volume. That is to say, more than 45 percent of the most high educated students are in favor of such inquiry of astrology and paranormal pursuits . As a matter of fact , adolescents, especially college students are curious about and yearn for making sense of their future. There is no scientific way to achieve their dreams, and consequently, the nonmainstream ways become popular amongst them.
In the second place, the existent nonmainstream areas of inquiry has left a trace in most traditional people's minds which science can never erase. There is a real and somewhat cruel example on me . Shengxiao , a mysterious word in Chinese, which divide people into 12 groups through their birth years , can ditermine//determine// their destiny. 12 lucky animals present each group people of Shengxiao . For instance, I was born in 1984 and thus belonged to the lucky mouse whist//是while吧// my girlfriend was born in 1987 and thus belonged to the lucky rabbit. As a devoted fortune-telling believer, my grandmother severely oppose our love only because the fortune-teller told her that a man belongs//要不要改成belonging好象句子是定语吧// to the mouse can never marry a woman belongs//同上// to the rabbit since the rabbit will finally eat the mouse in destiny. Of course it seems absurd to me , however , how can I explain to my grandmother that a rabbit always eat grass instead of a mouse? And how can I convince my grandmother the tell is scientific fundamentally fallacious// scientific fundamentally fallacious意思表达是不是有问题啊,再看看吧//. Actually, some traditional people in our society always prefer to trust the areas of inquiry that are of their culture instead of science. Let alone science are not able to rationally explain the failure of those phenomenon.
In sum , science mainstream science is now unable to explain why the nonmainstream areas of inquiry is unreasonable, they will and have to exist rationally for a long period to meet the society's vital need.//结尾很有力啊//
这文章在结构上和语言上都很完整的啦,呵呵,不知道拍得对不对啊。
Issue4 Study 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧!
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作者:寄托家园作文版普通用户 共用时间:45分00秒 430 words
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No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study.
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I fundamentally agree with the arguer's point that just like the world needs globalization, all the fields of study need combination . Yet in my view, only by introducing knowledge and experience from other fields can a field of study, especially natural science, make further progress nowadays.
Consider//Considering//, for instance, the competition in the medical field is unimaginably significant. Another similar field all filled with competition is law. We seldom heard that medicine has to do with a lawyer in the past several decades. However, the cruel competition has forced lawyers to study medicine and other knowledge which has utterly no relationship to law to be extraordinary in their fields. A lawyer, usually a plain one, who masters or even familiar with//be familiar with// medicine can be completely different. Because medical knowledge applies//gives// him more ability to confront cases rose in hospital, which has been a majority of all cases in today's society. As a result, he can get into a completely new field born on the edge of law and medicine instead of competing with other lawyers in the traditional fields. In conclusion, the combination of two major has the alchemy to bear new extraordinary leaders of a field in the most two competitive ones, let alone in other fields.//感觉句首没有主题句,好象少了什么,心里似乎有点不爽,虽然后面是归纳了主题句,这一段似乎有点跑题,题目的意思是:几乎沒有任何領域能夠取得具有重要意義的進步,除非結合其他行業的知識和經驗到該領域中來,你举的这个例子是产生了新的领域,似乎有点不妥当啊,个人之见哦//
Similarly, when it comes to natural science, a field of study's desire of being introduce in knowledge of other fields is much more apparent//句子有问题啊//. The past century have//had// witnessed tens of hundred majors' combination and the birth of thousands of new majors. Actually, despite//despite引导的名词短语表达的意思似乎不是很明确// the several natural science of maths, physics, chemistry and biology, most of nowaday majors are the combination of two or more. Biochemistry, one of the most obvious example, is combined by biology and chemistry. Similarly, there are physichemistry//physical chemistry//, pharmacchemistry//??//, radiochemistry and so on. The establishment of these majors is essentially necessary because only by the methods of two or more fields can scientists advance.
Valid as the argument above, it is imprecise to assert that no field of study can advance significantly without the help of introduced knowledge. Science in some field, there is indeed no need to introduce extra knowledge, especially in the old days or pure major such as pure maths study.//似乎跑题了哦,没有论证你的观点:Yet in my view, only by introducing knowledge and experience from other fields can a field of study, especially natural science, make further progress nowadays.这可不是AREG 啊//
According to the argument above, it is almost entirely necessary for the study workers//researcher// to introduce knowledge from other fields into their own and make full use of it to make significantly progress in nowaday competitive society.
总的来说个人觉得文章的结构不是很合理,呵呵 |
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