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占，晚点拍~

人生太短
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Issue153 "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."

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无论学生们学习什么都应该带着一定的疑问。学生们应该质疑老师教授的东西而不只是被动的接受。

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（1）从普通的教学角度来看，老师有可能会出错，即使是教材也可能写错或者有印刷错误，所以如果学生毫无疑问的接受，那就会学到错误的知识。比如在某些地区的语言课，有些老师的发音可能带有方言，那么就有可能教给学生错误的发音。
（2）从认知的角度来看，skepticism是社会和科学发展的一个动力，而这种能力是需要从小培养的，尤其是在学生时代。skepticism是critical thinking的基础。这点很好，我思考这个题目的时候就一直发愁怎么将学生的质疑和社会需要的质疑结合起来，学习
（3）当然，要求学生质疑老师教授的东西不能是盲目的、极端的，还要讲究方式，质疑以后要去解决问题、找到正确答案。比如在课堂上，每个学生都马上对老师讲的内容提出疑问，那么教学可能就无法进行下去。而且，只有在学习了大量的现有知识，不管是对的还是错的，学生才有能力去质疑。

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I totally agree with the speaker's opinion that students should never accept what they are taught passively, and they should question it with certain skepticism instead since otherwise society or science will not make progress.有一个问题：这里的逻辑关系应该是学生不从小培养question的精神---社会上人们缺少question的精神----社会和科学不会进步，你这里直接说从学生如果没有skepticism,社会和科学就不进步，我觉得需要把中间的过度加上。同时，开头相当于是提及了提纲前两段的内容，对第三段完全没有暗示，如果第三段再加上一句暗示的话可能会更好一些。另，这个是模版吗？开头有些平常阿

From the common teaching and study view, whether？ teachers or textbooks can make mistakes, so students have to question at any time. Teachers are also common people, and they have their own shortages, so it is inevitable for them to make some mistakes. Similarly, textbooks used during the teaching are written and printed by people, thus it is also certain这里的certain还是改成possible好，也可能没错误啊 that there are some errors in the books. If teachers or books have some mistakes and students accept them passively, then the mistakes are transferred to the students. For example, in some areas, teachers always speak with some dialect, if they are teaching the language class and do not advert, they will not teach the students standardized pronunciation, which will give bad influence to the students. Since the importance of educationsince后面可以跟名词吗？还是只能跟句子阿, as a teacher, he should encourage students to question what he says at any moment.结尾总结的像是说老师应该鼓励question,从题目来看，反过来说学生应该怎样似乎更好一些

From the cognitive view, students also need to bring certain skepticism because it is a basic ability that helps to innovate or invent. As is known to everyone, school educations have great influence to the whole life of a student, and many characters are formed and ingrained when at school. As is also known to everyone不如直接就说Also,不然似乎有些重复, question and critical thinking are the impetus of innovation and invention. 这个似乎和主旨句里的意思一样，这得逻辑有点乱Without question, people will accept anything and any theory currently unlimited, then they will not doubt whether it is true or not.这个似乎又是一个层次的含义，既不是说学生需要从小培养skepticism，也没有说是创新和发明的动力，仿佛是skepticism能够纠正错误的意思 For instance, without Einstein's question to Newton's gravity theory这个例子我觉得不太合适，因为牛顿经典力学和相对论都是正确的，只是用在不同的适用条件之下，不如换成伽利略质疑亚里士多德而做的“两个铁球同时着地”的实验, there will not exist这个句子是倒装么？？ the famous relativity theory. Just due to the skepticism and critical thinking of those scientists and inventors, our lives become more and more comfortable and convenient跟生活似乎没太大关系，有也不是直接的关系，在这说不太好, and the society are developing fast. Therefore, because of the affinity of skepticism training and students' later performance, question of students must be encouraged. 这段逻辑很混乱，只在开头句和结尾句和学生扯上了关系，没有把你提纲里的意思论述清楚

Admittedly, skepticism should not be cursory and extreme, however用besides更好一些，感觉转折的意味不强, it should have proper manner. Suppose a class situation, if every student give out his question soon after the teacher tell something, and dispute endless, the teaching program will not be advanced successfully and the students actually can learn nothing. Consequently, the teacher should make some rules这里似乎有变成了老师应该干什么，可以换成学生的角度，例如学生应当下课再问阿什么的, for example, to leave several minutes each class for students to lodge questions and discuss. Moreover, just giving out questions is not enough, in fact, the students should try their bests to solve the questions. In addition, we have to admit that without abundant knowledge and experience, the students cannot have meaningful questions. 我觉得这点还挺重要的，你论述的太少啦Thereby, skepticism should not be too extreme, and students cannot refuse study using the skepticism peg请教？？.

To sum up, it cannot be doubted that students should question whatever they study, and it also cannot doubted that skepticism should be used properly.结尾写的似乎很匆忙，时间紧张的话可以这样一句话概括，但是时间充足的话，还是好好设计一个模版或者风格之类的，会对提高分数有帮助吧

第一个中间段落论述的还是恨详尽的，比我好多了，我常常两三句话就说完了，学习。第二段的逻辑需要好好梳理一下，跟这道题目本身也有关系，因为我们能写得多事skepticism本身的作用好处，很难和学生扯上关系。此外，语言和句式还有待加强，咱们组jingjing和小花在这方面就很厉害了。罗嗦了一大堆，amy表怪啊，批判的接收！A za！！