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发表于 2008-7-16 12:47:28 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Argument200 Statistics collected from dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. Thus, dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients.
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In this argument, the author recommends that advertisements about dental work should focus on male consumer and emphasize their high skills and sensitive attitude. Based on a statistics showing that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist and the further suggestion, the argument suffers from several logical flaws, which render it unconvincing as it stands.

A threshold problem with the argument involves a fallacy of unsubstantiated statistics. The arguer professes that three times more men than women faint when visiting dentists, while failing to indicate their respective numbers of patients and the percentage of the patients who are faint. Without accounting for such detailed figures and percentages, the statistics is unconvincing as it stands.

Besides, the argument commits false analogy that the arguer unfairly assumes that the healthy condition of both male and female patients who visiting dentists are the same. However, it is very likely not the case at all. Maybe senior males take up a large portion of the male patients and it is the old age or other diseases makes these men faint. While women who come to see dentists are enjoying healthier condition and more positive attitude. Thus, the possibility of the above-mentioned condition cannot convince me about the suggestion that men are more likely to be distressed about having the dental work done than women are.

Granted that men are more likely to be distressed than women when doing dental works, the arguer cannot unjustifiably draw the conclusion that advertisements should target the male consumers and emphasize both the effectiveness of anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients. First of all, as discussed above, the evidence about the detailed statistics is not cited. It is fairly possible that men still go to dentist’s whenever they have dental suffering though they are distressed, but women are reluctant to see dentists due to their scare and distress. Thus, if it is the case, the advertisement should target female consumers which take up a massive potential market. Second, I doubt does emphasizing both the effectiveness of anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of staff really work. Common sense informs us that the skills of dentists take priority over other factors. In addition, the expenses and other factors are also determinants.

To sum up, it would be necessary for the arguer to rule out all the above-mentioned possibilities before we could better evaluate the arguer’s claim.

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发表于 2008-7-17 01:13:14 |只看该作者

In this argument, the author recommends that advertisements about dental work should focus on male consumer and emphasize their high skills and sensitive attitude. Based on a statistics showing that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist and the further suggestion, the argument suffers from several logical flaws, which render it unconvincing as it stands.

A threshold problem with the argument involves a fallacy of unsubstantiated statistics. The arguer professes that three times more men than women faint when visiting dentists, while failing to indicate their respective numbers of patients and the percentage of the patients who are faint. Without accounting for such detailed figures and percentages, the statistics is unconvincing as it stands.

Besides, the argument commits false analogy that the arguer unfairly assumes that the healthy condition of both male and female patients who visiting dentists are the same. However, it is very likely not the case at all. Maybe senior males take up a large portion of the male patients and it is the old age or other diseases makes these men faint. While women who come to see dentists are enjoying healthier condition and more positive attitude. Thus, the possibility of the above-mentioned condition cannot convince me about the suggestion that men are more likely to be distressed about having the dental work done than women are.

Granted that men are more likely to be distressed than women when doing dental works, the arguer cannot unjustifiably draw the conclusion that advertisements should target the male consumers and emphasize both the effectiveness of anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients. First of all, as discussed above, the evidence about the detailed statistics is not cited. It is fairly possible that men still go to dentist’s whenever they have dental suffering though they are distressed, but women are reluctant to see dentists due to their scare and distress. Thus, if it is the case, the advertisement should target female consumers which take up a massive potential market. Second, I doubt does emphasizing both the effectiveness of anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of staff really work. Common sense informs us that the skills of dentists take priority over other factors. In addition, the expenses and other factors are also determinants.(这个可以从这段分出来成独立段,然后更详细的论述,这样会觉得比较能有说服力)

To sum up, it would be necessary for the arguer to rule out all the above-mentioned possibilities before we could better evaluate the arguer’s claim.

这篇就没上篇好了,虽然错误都找出来,但是分析得不够,不能彻底说服人.而且结尾似乎太短小了点.加油啊,文字功底真的很不错了.

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