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发表于 2007-3-2 18:16:05 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 443 TIME: 0:46:00 DATE: 2007-3-2
限时超了一小点！
Could education be effective when it is particularly designed to satisfy the personal demands and favors of each student? Admittedly, this type of inculcation could exert great effort in fostering specialists for society. However, I do not agree with the speaker for the reason that the students with fully development in all elementary respects would meet the standards of modern society.

To cultivate students according to their personal favors would be helpful to both individuals and society. On the one hand, to students, individual interests serve as their best tutors to lead them to delve into exclusive realms. Without the encouragement of interests, knowledge of any discipline would be boring. On the other hand, to society, individual interests would play an important role in supplying specialists for each realm. In short, individual interests are quite significant to the education.

It is true that personal interests are helpful to students' increased ability of some specific fields, but it does not follow that education should totally be designed to meet all the students' personal needs. Adaptability and lifelong learning are the cornerstones of success in today's complex and rapidly changing society. No longer can the person who is steeped in one specific academic discipline, but knows nothing about other aspects, meet today's demands. Especially, some subjects, which are fundamental and necessary to students, could not be cancelled to those who do not like these subjects, such as literature. The literary backgrounds equip one with critical thinking skills, coupled with the desire to think and obtain comprehensive acquaintance with surroundings, and thus are the best preparation for career and life that any of us would possess. Furthermore, the interests of students are various and wide, and might change along with their pullulation. Thus, it is wasteful and impossible to adjust curriculum according to individual interests.

Finally, whereas the importance of personal interests, schools and teachers should pay a great attention to each student's interests and inspire students to develop on their favorite fields by other steps which are out of class and cost students' spare time. For example, schools should organize some teams to study knowledge of certain disciplines which surpasses what students learn in the class. Moreover, schools would set up some specific scholarships to award students' predominance on some areas. These steps would all serve as encouragements on students' interests.

To conclude, it is no doubt that personal interests of students are important factors to help one become successful. Nevertheless, it is impossible and unreasonable that the education is designed only meet these interests. Otherwise, the students would fail in their careers they become adults owing their lacking of some basic skills and knowledge.

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发表于 2007-3-3 02:13:53 |只看该作者

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TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 443       TIME: 0:46:00       DATE: 2007-3-2
限时超了一小点！
Could education be effective when it is particularly designed to satisfy the personal demands and favors of each student? Admittedly, this type of inculcation could exert great effort in fostering specialists for society. However, I do not agree with the speaker for the reason that the students with fully development in all elementary respects would meet the standards of modern society.
开头不错  简洁干脆
To cultivate students according to their personal favors would be helpful to both individuals and society. On the one hand, to students, individual interests serve as their best tutors to lead them to delve into exclusive (不是很恰当，可以考虑particular或specific) realms. Without the encouragement of interests, knowledge of any discipline would be boring. On the other hand, to society, individual interests would play an important role in supplying specialists for each realm. In short, individual interests are quite significant to the education.

It is true that personal interests are helpful to students' increased ability of some specific fields, but it does not follow (lead to?) that education should totally be designed to meet all the students' personal needs. Adaptability and lifelong learning are the cornerstones of success in today's complex and rapidly changing society. No longer can the person who is steeped in one specific academic discipline, but knows nothing about other aspects, meet today's demands. Especially, some subjects, which are fundamental and necessary to students, could not be cancelled to those who do not like these subjects, such as literature. The literary backgrounds equip one with critical thinking skills, coupled with the desire to think and obtain comprehensive acquaintance with surroundings, and thus are the best preparation for career and life that any of us would possess. Furthermore, the interests of students are various and wide, and might change along with their pullulation. (改改句式比如：their interest varies widely) Thus, it is wasteful and impossible to adjust curriculum according to individual interests.
思路不错；但论证的组织可以改进一下。基础学科的重要性说的不够透彻。Literature的例子感觉不是很convincing（比如说literary background是best preparation for career）

Finally, whereas the importance of personal interests, schools and teachers should pay a great attention to each student's interests and inspire students to develop on their favorite fields by other steps which are out of class and cost students' spare time. For example, schools should organize some teams to study knowledge of certain disciplines which surpasses what students learn in the class. Moreover, schools would set up some specific scholarships to award students' predominance on some areas. These steps would all serve as encouragements on students' interests.
论点和第二段似乎有点重复；论证也有点混乱  后面的一些suggestion有点走题嫌疑；
可以考虑和第二段合并

To conclude, it is no doubt that personal interests of students are important factors to help one become successful. Nevertheless, it is impossible and unreasonable that the education is designed only meet these interests. Otherwise, the students would fail in their careers they become adults owing their lacking of some basic skills and knowledge.

虽然很多地方还可以加强  总体感觉是okay的  比我好很多---我要限时根本写不完
46分钟算了列提纲么？如果算了真的不错了建议可以花些时间自己改一下
不知道兄台issue方面准备的如何了  是已经进入限时状态了么？我还不知道怎么缩短写作时间好呢

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