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TOPIC: ARGUMENT137 - The following appeared in an editorial in the Mason City newspaper.

"At present, Mason City residents seldom use the nearby Mason River for any kind of recreational activity, even though surveys of the region's residents consistently rank water sports (swimming, fishing, and boating) as a favorite form of recreation. Since there have been complaints about the quality of the water in the river, residents must be avoiding the river because they think that it is not clean enough. But that situation is about to change: the agency responsible for rivers in our region has announced plans to clean up Mason River. Therefore, recreational use of the river is likely to increase, so the Mason City council will need to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the Mason River."
WORDS: 351       TIME: 上午 12:30:00       DATE: 2007-7-20

in this news, the writer concludes that Mason City(short for MC) council would need to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the Mason Rive(MR) .it seems reasonable and valid after first glance about the news, however, only the following conjectures stay persuasive, the conclusion of writer would be bailed , whereas , after chose scrutiny of facts cited in the argument, little of them could lend strong support to the conjectures.

first conjecture: people would not do recreational activity in  the MR until the water could get clear.
to illustrate this conjecture, the writer cites  facts of surveys of the region's residents, the study indicate that people could be fond of water sports, however, imagine that if people would just like watch water sports on TV which means they would do sports, the same result would appear in the survey. Furthmore, even people would like to do sports , they could prefer swimming pool to MR as the consideration of safety. so even the residents complained about the water quality , it would not imply they would like to do sports in the MR even the water might get clear in future.

second one: agency would clear the river, in the news , we could see that the agency responsible for rivers has announced plans to clean up MR, but the writer fail to persuade us the measures agency would take will surely alimenate the water quality  ,and common sense tells us, vanish the pollution is more difficult than prevent it. once we broken the original environments, recovery nearly become impossible. So it is doubtable whether that agency could achieve their purpose or not.

third one: publicly owned lands need improve if more people have fun in MR
writer did not tell us the original circumstance of  publicly owned lands, so perhaps the quality and capacity of lands could be already sufficient to meet the needs of increasing people, if so , budget to the lands along MR would be wasteful.purity  ,under three conjectures above, the arguer could get his conclusion discreetly. Admittedly, to persuade readers that MC council's plan is not cursory, the writer must provide evidences to resolve the fallacies of the conjectures.
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Argument：205
205.The following appeared in a recommendation from the president of
Amburg's Chamber of Commerce.

"Last October the city of Belleville installed high intensity lighting in
its central business district, and vandalism there declined almost
immediately. The city of Amburg has recently begun police patrols on
bicycles in its business district but the rate of vandalism there remains
constant. Since high intensity lighting is apparently the most effective
way to combat crime, we should install such lighting throughout Amburg. By
reducing crime in this way, we can revitalize the declining neighborhoods
in our city."
since
1 high intensity lighting reduce rate of vandalism
2 A rate of vandalism remains cnostant
3 city of B install lighting can reduce rate of vandalism

conclusion: By reducing crime in this way, we can revitalize the declining neighborhoods in our ciy
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Argument：39
since
1 O's number of students increased by 50%
2 long-distance programs takes place via interactive video computer connections lead to dormitory and classroom space's expenditures decrease
3 Enrollment at HC has diminished and costs of maintaining buildings have risen

conclusion :we should initiate and actively promote long-distance degree programs like those at O to increase enrollment and solve the problem of budget deficits at HC
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Argument：25
25.The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.

"Two years ago, the town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. The best way to improve Hopewell's economy, and generate additional tax revenues, is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
since
1.resrot hotel and build golf course could i and g
  A.OV acted so and tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent.
  (1.action result in  the change(1.maybe improve of traffic,and views and environment 2.new strateties 3.industries new)
2.its applicable in H too (no good view,poverty)
2.its the best way(immitation only ,not consider,best way own distinct)

so The best way to improve Hopewell's economy, and generate additional tax revenues, is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
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Argument：9

9.The following appeared in a memorandum from a dean at Omega University.

"Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by thirty percent. Potential employers apparently believe the grades at Omega are inflated; this would explain why Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of professors."
since
acquiesence:secure better jobs would be the crucial things only(more benefits,democracy,teacher be more serious about teaching.)
1.evaluation leads to a only negative effect on finding job of graduaters
  A.Potential employers apparently believe the grades at Omega are inflated as overall student grade averages at Omega have risen(not a reality,really rise,misunderstanding could vanish through communication,in a long run)
   1.Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University
   (before?not famous?different anticipation of work?)
so Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of professors To enable its graduates to secure better jobs

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发表于 2007-7-21 12:19:43 |只看该作者

in this news, the writer concludes that Mason City(short for MC) council would need to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the Mason Rive(MR) .it seems reasonable and valid after(at) first glance about the news, however, only the following conjectures stay persuasive, the conclusion of writer would be bailed （什么意思）, whereas , after chose scrutiny of facts cited in the argument, little of them could lend strong support to the conjectures(前句断句有问题).

first conjecture: people would not do recreational activity in  the MR until the water could get clear.
   to（大写） illustrate this conjecture, the writer cites  facts of surveys of the region's residents, the study indicate that people could be fond of water sports, however, imagine that if people would just like watch water sports on TV which means they would do sports, the same result would appear in the survey（这个例子好，但是，嘿，又是但是，注意高亮的从句，还有这一长句的断句）. Furthmore, even people would like to do sports , they could prefer swimming pool to MR as the consideration of safety. so even the residents complained about the water quality , it would not imply they would like to do sports in the MR even the water might get clear in future.（驳的点都很好，为什么句子开头不大写了呢？）

second one: agency would clear the river, in the news , we could see that the agency responsible for rivers has announced plans to clean up MR, but the writer fail to persuade us （to believe that）the measures agency would take will surely alimenate the water quality  ,(!断句)and common sense tells us, vanish（消失是不及物动词） the pollution is more difficult than prevent it. once we broken the original environments, recovery nearly become impossible. So it is doubtable whether that agency could achieve their purpose or not.

third one: publicly owned lands need improve if more people have fun in MR
writer did not tell us the original circumstance of  publicly owned lands, so perhaps the quality and capacity of lands could be already sufficient to meet the needs of increasing people, if so , budget to the lands along MR would be wasteful.purity  ,under three conjectures above, the arguer could get his conclusion discreetly. Admittedly, to persuade readers that MC council's plan is not cursory, the writer must provide evidences to resolve the fallacies of the conjectures.

总体感觉这像是你argument比较丰满的手稿了，让它变成一篇规范的argument我想会比较好看，期待。

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