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发表于 2007-7-28 21:32:25 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

TOPIC: ARGUMENT137 - The following appeared in an editorial in the Mason City newspaper.

"At present, Mason City residents seldom use the nearby Mason River for any kind of recreational activity, even though surveys of the region's residents consistently rank water sports (swimming, fishing, and boating) as a favorite form of recreation. Since there have been complaints about the quality of the water in the river, residents must be avoiding the river because they think that it is not clean enough. But that situation is about to change: the agency responsible for rivers in our region has announced plans to clean up Mason River. Therefore, recreational use of the river is likely to increase, so the Mason City council will need to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the Mason River."
WORDS: 369 TIME: 0:30:00 DATE: 2007-7-28

The author draw the conclusion that the recreational use of the river is likely to increase because the agency announced plans to clean up Mason River, and thus, Mason City council will need to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the river. However, the author fails not only to provide the details of the survey of favorite form of recreation but also to prove the real cause is pollution. Besides, his assertion that the recreational use of the river is likely to increase is lack of evidence.

The author fails to provide details such as vocation, age, etc. of the people who summit the survey. If those who rank water sports as a favorite form of recreation are mostly adults who have no time to do sports or do not like to do sports, or if they are the people living far away from the river and the transportation is not efficient, the result of the survey can not make sure there will be large quantity of people will go to the river for recreational purpose. Besides, the total number of people participating in the survey is not provided, query whether it can represent most of the residents.

In addition, the main course of the phenomenon may be not water pollution. The author does not mention the past situation of the Mason River. Perhaps there always were seldom people near the Mason River for recreational Purpose. That is to say, they may have not the tradition to play along the Mason River. And the only evidence of the pollution is several complaints, which is lack of persuasion.

Finally, even if the pollution is reduced, it is hasty to assert that the budget needs to be increased for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the river. Without investigating the current condition of the publicly owned lands, probably which is good enough for entertainment, blindly increase the budget will damage the interest of taxpayers.

In sum, unless the author provides the details of the survey of favorite form of recreation, proves that the real cause is pollution and that the recreational use of the river is likely to increase, the conclusion is lack of persuasion.