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发表于 2008-8-23 23:28:51 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

请多指教!
重点再帮我看下第四段的论证好吗?我总觉得貌似有些牵强.谢啦!

Do you agree or disagree: People can learn more from watching television than reading books.

What is learning? In my view, this is a threshold question before we appraise the value of watching television and reading books in terms of their contribution to learning. Therefore, before giving my own choice, I would like to address this question in the first place.

Learning, as far as I am concerned, is a process in which we are acquainted with something unknown, usually knowledge about the external world as well as the psychological world, and then making these knowledge internalized through critical thinking. Hence comes the question--can television provide us with more knowledge than books?

The answer is probably negative. It is true that television keeps one informed with the most up-to-date news, yet news themselves are not knowledge. Further, even though it can deliver certain knowledge about the world or arousing thinking about humanity, as the Discovery program and some excellent movies can do, most programs are usually highly selective for the reason that producers have to take into consideration the taste of advertisers and average people, who probably prefer programs designed primarily for amusement and entertainment, not for the pursuit of knowledge. If one turns on the television, one would find this is true. There are so many soap dramas, advertisements that one has to turn it off in order to let one’s mind free. Consequently, it is unfair to say that one can learn more through watching television than reading books, since it is dubious to assume that television provide more knowledge than books.

Watching TV is even more inferior to reading books in terms of learning through critical thinking, which is the core of learning activity. Television is a combination of visual image and sound. That is to say, when we are watching TV, three out of the five sense organs are occupied. We see what is on the TV, not what is in our mind. We listen to the sounds in television, not the voices of our own reasoning. However, when we are reading books, the case is different. For instance, when reading a novel, which has only texts, we have to construct the image of those characters by ourselves. This very act simply nurtures our ability of independent thinking. Only through this way can we truly learn something, not just knowing about something. Therefore, I deem that learning by watching television is not a good choice, not to say we can learn more through watching TV

In sum, considering the characteristic of learning activities, I would stand against the claim that one can learn more through watching television. On the contrary, books should be the primary channel of learning since it provides more accurate and highly diversified knowledge and encourages our critical thinking.

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Learning, as far as I am concerned, is a process in which we are acquainted with something unknown, usually knowledge about the external world as well as the psychological world, and then making these knowledge internalized through critical thinking. Hence comes the question--can television provide us with more knowledge than books?x 开头很辩证
The answer is probably negative. It is true that television keeps one informed with the most up-to-date news, yet news themselves are not knowledge. 这句本身就有逻辑问题，news确实是knowledge啊，比如了解经济政治局面。而且这句和后面没什么关系，可以不要。Further, even though it can deliver--convey? certain knowledge about the world or arousing thinking about humanity, as the Discovery program and some excellent movies can do, most programs are usually highly selective for the reason that producers have to take into consideration the taste of advertisers and average people, who probably prefer programs designed primarily for amusement and entertainment, not for the pursuit of knowledge. 这句好长啊！不过主干还算明确。学习下长句用法了。If one turns on the television, one--he would find this is true. There are so many soap dramas, advertisements that one has to turn it off in order to let one’s mind free. Consequently, it is unfair to say that one can learn more through watching television than reading books, since it is dubious to assume that television provide more knowledge than books.

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Watching TV is even more inferior to reading books in terms of learning through critical thinking, which is the core of learning activity. Television is a combination of visual image and sound. That is to say, when we are watching TV, three out of the five sense organs are occupied. We see what is on the TV, not what is in our mind. We listen to the sounds in television, not the voices of our own reasoning. However, when we are reading books, the case is different. For instance, when reading a novel, which has only texts, we have to construct the image of those characters by ourselves. This very act simply nurtures our ability of independent thinking. Only through this way can we truly learn something, not just knowing about something. Therefore, I deem that learning by watching television is not a good choice, not to say we can learn more through watching TV|留学|签证|第三段是反面论述，那么这段应该正面论述，多说说read的好处，read可以比较系统的学习，循序渐渐。除了小说再多举个例子吧，比如学习数学需要公式与运算等等。:Y

In sum, considering the characteristic of learning activities, I would stand against the claim that one can learn more through watching television. On the contrary, books should be the primary channel of learning since it provides more accurate and highly diversified knowledge and encourages our critical thinking.
文章1，2段非常新颖深刻，全文语言很流畅，学习了。

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发表于 2008-8-24 10:06:12 |只看该作者

确实是应该讲讲Read的好处,从正反面进行论证. 这样会更充实!谢谢qawsed的建议!很有用:):handshake
关于那个news和knowledge我的想法是这样的:news 是一种information, 而knowledge是经过系统化的facts.是不是还是有必要再定义下?改成这样可以吗? While television keeps one informed with a myriad of information, the authenticity of which is usually hard to determine, information themselves do not suffice to be regardede as knowledge--a network of truth.

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好，可以把这句加在It is true that television keeps one informed with the most up-to-date news, yet news themselves are not knowledge.的后面，就不显得孤立了，也和后面更好连接上了。
LZ高级单词用的好多啊，我就不会用，交流下经验吧!

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发表于 2008-8-24 10:17:07 |只看该作者

别忘了给前面的战友修改啊:) ~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-872000-1-1.html

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发表于 2008-8-24 10:34:00 |只看该作者

呵呵,正在修改中......:)

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发表于 2008-8-24 11:07:26 |只看该作者

原帖由 qawsed 于 2008-8-24 10:14 发表
好，可以把这句加在It is true that television keeps one informed with the most up-to-date news, yet news themselves are not knowledge.的后面，就不显得孤立了，也和后面更好连接上了。
LZ高级单词用的 ...

我觉得最好得办法就是背!我现在每天在背新概念四,每天1篇,天天如此.虽然是笨办法,但是无数的过来人告诉我们:背很管用.:)

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