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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most people prefer having other people make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves。: m+


In our daily life, people have to make decisions for which clothes to wear, for where to travel to, for which kind of vehicles to take and for everything which has more than one choice. There is an interesting view of point that most people prefer having others make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves. I totally agree on it based on reasons listed below.

Firstly, people are usually confused when facing many choices. Knowledge is exploding nowadays and the modern society is getting more and more complicated. People sometimes have to face situations which they cannot handle with their own knowledge and experience. They have to ask for professionals' help. When someone meets a law issue, he or she have to consult with a lawyer on it. Or when someone wants to make money from stock markets, he or she usually goes to read finance news, specialists' comments and so forth and then follow decisions mentioned in those articles. Even more, some people don't want to collect such kinds of information by themselves. What they want is just simple answers to simple questions: which one stock should they buy or sell and when should they do so? Because they think finance news and reports are too obscure to understand and those finance terms confuse them. They hope other people can make decisions for them.

Secondly, people usually intend to take less responsibility, especially there are many other people facing the same case. I once experienced very inefficient meetings. In fact we did not have many issues to handle with in those meetings. However, after tedious discussions there were still no decisions. Because all of us did not want take the full responsibility for the result of making decisions. We all thought, "It's OK. Other people can make decisions for me. I only need to follow that decision." I think this kind of thought might be innate for people, especially who are affected deeply by the east Asian culture. This innate thought leads people potentially to wait having other people to make decisions.

Thirdly, people would not like to make decisions for trivial cases because they have no time. The modern society is in the faster pace. Most people are very busy in study or work. They usually put all of their energy in their study or work and then have no time to consider choices of trivial cases, like what to eat for lunch. The most frequent answer is "whatever" for this kind of questions. In such trivial cases, people usually prefer having other people make decisions for them.

In conclusion, people face many different situations every day which require them to make decisions, but most people prefer having other people make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves. I agree this view of point.
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most people prefer having other people make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves。:

In our daily life, people have to make decisions for which clothes to wear, for where to travel to, for which kind of vehicles to take and for everything which has（have） more than one choice. There is an interesting view of point that most people prefer having others make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves. I totally agree on it based on reasons listed below.

Firstly, people are usually confused when facing many choices. Knowledge is exploding nowadays and the modern society is getting more and more complicated. ①People sometimes have to face situations which they cannot handle with their own knowledge and experience. They have to ask for professionals' help. 例[When someone meets a law issue, he or she have(has) to consult with(删) a lawyer on it. Or when someone wants to make（可以用earn啊） money from stock markets, he or she usually goes to read finance(financial?!) news, specialists' comments and so forth and then follow decisions（instructions吧，这些事情一般专家报纸只是给建议，不会给decisions的）
mentioned in those articles. ]②Even more, some people don't want to collect such kinds of information by themselves. What they want is just simple answers to simple questions: which one stock should they buy or sell and when should they do so? Because they think finance news and reports are too obscure to understand and those finance terms confuse them. They hope other people can make decisions for them. D9 @  V& V$ Z* I) L5 m8 p

Secondly, people usually intend to take less responsibility, especially there are many other people facing the same case. 例I once experienced very inefficient meetings. In fact we did not have many issues to handle with in those meetings. However, after tedious discussions there were still no decisions. Because all of us did not want take the full responsibility for the result of making decisions. We all thought, "It's OK. Other people can make decisions for me. I only need to follow that decision." I think this kind of thought might be innate for people, especially who are affected deeply（可以用profoundly） by the east(East) Asian culture. This innate thought leads people potentially to wait for having other people to make decisions. 7 W3 c0
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Thirdly, people would not like to make decisions for trivial cases because they have no time. The modern society is in the faster pace. Most people are very busy in study or work. They usually put all of their energy in their study or work and then have no time to consider choices of trivial cases, like what to eat for lunch. The most frequent answer is "whatever" for this kind of questions. In such trivial cases, people usually prefer having other people make decisions for them.

In conclusion, people face many different situations every day which require them to make decisions, but most people prefer having other people make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves. I agree this view of point.

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2# holyirini
Thank you, holyirini.
我对有疑问的地方查了下，发现
1. ever-,no-, any-, some-这一类后面都用单数。
2. "consult" means to ask or look for advice, information, etc. from someone or something that should have answers, while "consult with" means to ask for someone's permission or advice before making a decision. So I guess "consult with" might be more suitable here.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephones have had more positive effects on humankind than televisions.


The telephone was invented in the 19th century. This amazing device enables people could talk with each other like face to face even if they were in different places. Later, another amazing device, television, was invented. People can not only hear sounds from a distance but also see moving pictures. Then which device has more positive effects on humankind? Some people incline that televisions have less positive effects on people. A lot of people like to sit in front of TV for a long time to watch meaningless programs. They criticise this kind of behaviour because it wastes time, while telephones don't have such flaw. This statement is correct from a specific point of view. However, it's not the whole story. After second thought, I disagree that telephones have more positive effects on humankind than televisions.

In the first place, televisions speed up the spread of information. People can also tell others some news at once by telephones but only limited number of people can be informed concurrently,while televisions can have a very large amount of people to watch at the same time. Besides that, people only can hear voice from telephones for a very long time, even now visual telephones are still not popular. You cannot imagine that people called each other to share the news that US was visiting the Moon and described the procedure of landing. However, it really happend that thousands of hundreds of people in the planet were watching what those space men were doing by televisions. It's impossible without televisions that thousands of hundreds of people witnessed this exciting and historic big event.

Another reason stands for my point is that televisions provide a new platform for art. People love art and art is one kind of treasure for humankind. After the television was invented, art found a new stage. People all of the world have been making a great amount of TV programs to express their valuable thoughts of the world, the human being and the society, to show their aesthetic sensibilities, to share their feelings from inside with audiences. Can people do the same things by telephones. Definitely not.

In a word, compared with telephoes, televisions have more positive effects on humankind.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should live one city or in one country all their life instead of moving to live in different places.; Y3 z& y/ L'


Long time ago, it was hard for people moving from place to place due to undeveloped technologies and economy. Most of people had to live in one city or in one country all their life. Nowadays, with the advent of power technologies and developed economy, people can easily move from one place to others by planes, trains and so forth. Although now every one can move around easily, some people still believe that people should live one city or in one country all their life instead of moving to live in different places? I disagree this point.

People can enrich their experiences by moving to live in different places. Every place is unique. people can gain different feelings in different places and learn a lot from living in different places. Now I am living in Shanghai, while my hometown is a small town nearby the Yellow Sea. These two places are totally different. Shanghai is always in a faster pace, while my hometown is in a much slower pace; Shanghai is international, while my hometown is very traditional; Shanghai is a very very large city where I usually spend a lot of time on vehicles, while my hometown is really small where I can walk to almost every place in the town I want to go. These two different places bring me different livings. I learnt a lot, like professional business skill and international vision, from the fast pace and busy living in Shanghai, while I am also gain benefits from causal living in my hometown, which makes me relax and get much more closer with my family.

Besides that, people who move to live in other places can help native inhabits to develop local places. Ever year thousands of hundreds people move from the west of China to the east where economy is much more alive. Some of them are employed by local factories to help finish their orders from all of the world. Some of them are hired by construction sites to build new buildings, infrastructures and so on. Without them, the economy of east part of Chine cannot increase so rapidly.

Finally, people who move to live in other places bring their own cultures into local places to help to generate much stronger new culture. With merging with existing cultures in local places, or other new cultures brought by other immigrations, a much stronger new culture usually is generated. The US is the very example. This young country was built on from nothing. Its culture mixes cultures from European, Asian, African and local Indian. Now the American culture is accepted in the whole world and very very popular.

From evidences mentioned above, I think people should move to live in different places instead of living in one city or in on country all their life. Moving to living in different places not only help people to develop themselves but also help those places they move to to develop. More important, it's possible to generate a new culture from moving to different places.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on young people.

Nowadays, movies and televisions are very popular. Young people get a lot of fun from movies and televisions because there are exciting stories, magical virtual worlds and amazing graphics. In addition, they can learn from movies and televisions sometimes. However, does it mean movies and televisions have more positive effects on young people? I don't think so. The downsides listed below of movies and televisions makes them affect young people more negatively.

Movies and televisions lead young people waste time. Time is very precious for people, especially young people. However, young people usually cannot control themselves very well. Makers of movies and televisions always try their best to fascinate people. As a result, it is not uncommon for young people to spend too much time on movies and televisions. I remember when I was child I used to spend a whole weekend in front of television but I was supposed to do some homework that time. I just could not help myself because televisions were more interesting than my homework, but in fact those television programs were less meaningful than homework to me. From the view of point of time management, movies and televisions indeed affect young people negatively.

Another negative effect is that values of some movies and televisions is not suitable for young people. Young people are forming their values and they are very easily affected by the outside world. They are most likely to be affected by movies and televisions because movies and televisions are very intuitive. Young people like to follow behaviors  and speaks of characters in their favorite movies and televisions, but they usually don't know whether those behaviors and speaks are right or not. Children planed to "run away" from home just because the same thing was shown up in a TV program they like and they thought it's an exciting and cool thing. Even worse, some children hurt others with knives or guns just because their heroes in movies and televisions did so. We can read these kinds of sad news every year. All of them thank to the movies and televisions.

In short, movies and televisions bring funs to young people, but compared with their bad influences in time and values, which mean a lot to young people, I agree movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on young people.

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The telephone was invented in the 19th century. This amazing device enables people could talk with each other like face to face even if they were in different places. Later, another amazing device, television, was invented. People can not only hear sounds from
a distance but also see moving pictures. Then which device has more positive effects on humankind? Some people incline that televisions have less positive effects on people. A lot of people like to sit in front of TV for a long time to watch meaningless programs. They criticise this kind of behaviour because it wastes time, while telephones don't have such flaw. This statement is correct from a specific point of view. However, it's not the whole story. After second thought, I disagree that telephones have more positive effects on humankind than televisions.这样写第一段我还是第一次见到，也挺好的9 g0 o+ O* K& ]$ l

In the first place, televisions speed up the spread of information用词好啊. People can also tell others some news at once by telephones but only limited number of people can be informed concurrently,while televisions can have a very large amount of people to watch at the same time. Besides that, people only can hear voice from telephones for a very long time, even now visual telephones are still not popular. You cannot imagine that people called each other to share the news that US was visiting the Moon and described the procedure of landing.例子举得不错 However,
it really happend that thousands of hundreds of people in the planet were watching what those space men were doing by televisions.句子结构有些累赘，建议用一个副词来表达句子的意思，比如 people in the planet could know what the space men doing simultaneously through televisions
It's impossible without televisions that thousands of hundreds of people witnessed this exciting and historic big event.


 _Another reason stands for my point is that televisions provide a new platform for art. People love art and art is one kind of treasure for humankind. After the television was invented, art found a new stage. People all of 应该用over the world have been making照句子意思的话，时态好像不对，换成have made
a great amount of TV programs to express their valuable thoughts of the world, the human being and the society, to show their aesthetic sensibilities, to share their feelings from inside inside feelings with audiences. Can people do the same things by telephones. Definitely not.相比前面两段，第三段的论证稍显不足8 O. m6 |! @* F. x7 }5 ~
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In a word, compared with telephoes, televisions have more positive effects on humankind
不好意思改的太晚了
作文的用词很好，词汇也比我写的丰富很多，学习
但是句子中词的用法好像还应该再仔细琢磨下，个人观点，呵呵

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Printed books have greater effects on society than television has.) ~, b&


Television becomes a more and more important media after it was invented, and it impacts on society a lot because information propagates much quickly in television than before. However, compared with another important media, printed books, television has less effects on society.

Printed books have a longer history than television. It has been almost thousands years that human uses printed books to record information and knowledge. Obviously, cultures cannot exist without printed books. Television was invented in the early 20th century. It is no more than 100 years. Before television appeared, human has already experienced several forms of society, and the modern society has already been developing. Printed books have effects on society much longer than television.

More important, printed books are the best media to publish important thoughts and theories which will influence society profoundly. Firstly, people is less limited to read books than watching TV. For example, people in some remote small villages, like in mountains in western China, usually cannot afford televisions. There is even no normal power supply. However, they can read books. They can learn knowledge from reading, and then they can have chances to develop their hometowns and change their lives. Secondly, programs in television are more like fast foods while printed books could last for a long while. Do you want to watch programs in television ten years ago? Probably not. Nevertheless, people today still read "The Wealth of Nations" by Adams Smith in three hundreds ago. They still can learn knowledge from this classic book. Although modern technologies, like television, help them demonstrate their views vividly, scientists, economists, politics and so on still prefer to, and sometimes have to, write books to share their views with the public because printed books are the best media.

Considering reasons mentioned above, I believe printed books have greater effects on society than television has.

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Television becomes a more and more important media after it was invented, and it impacts on society a lot because information propagates much quickly in television than before. However, compared with another important media, printed books, television has less effects on society.
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Printed books have a longer history than television. It has been almost thousands years that human uses printed books to record information and knowledge. Obviously, cultures cannot exist without printed books.这句是不是说的太极端了？ Television was invented in the early 20th century. It is no more than 100 years. Before television appeared, human has already experienced several forms of society, and the modern society has already been developing. Printed books have effects on society much longer than television. 观点和我想的一样，但是能不能再多想点具体例子，昨天我写的时候也觉得缺乏例证

More important, printed books are the best media to publish important thoughts and theories which will influence society profoundly. Firstly, people is less limited这样是不是有点别扭？直接说book容易获取 to read books than watching TV. For example, people in some remote small villages, like in mountains in western China, usually cannot afford televisions. There is even no normal power supply. However, they can read books. They can learn knowledge from reading, and then they can have chances to develop their hometowns and change their lives. Secondly, programs in television are more like是不是有点中式英语？ fast foods while printed books could last for a long while. Do you want to watch television programs in television去掉 ten years ago? Probably not. Nevertheless, people today still read "The Wealth of Nations" by Adams Smith in去掉 three hundreds ago. They still can learn knowledge from this classic book. Although modern technologies, like television, help them demonstrate their views vividly, scientists, economists, politics and so on still prefer to, and sometimes have to, write books to share their views with the public because printed books are the best media.
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University students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study。

Basic sciences, like general mathematics, general physics and general chemistry, are the fundamental of the modern society. Some people hold a point that university students should not take basic science classes if they are not part the field of their study. Because they think college students should spend all time on their own study. I oppose this point of view. I think university students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study.

To start with, taking basic science classes benefits university students' own study. Basic science is of course the base of many modern sciences. Students cannot understand modern sciences profoundly if they have little knowledge of basic sciences. For example, students of Compute Science usually study essential classes like data structure, operation system and compiling theory. All of them are based on mathematics. If a student was not good at mathematics, he or she might feel those classes were obscure. Besides those classes, books on Computer Science theories, like "the Art of Programming", one of the most classic books on Computer Science, usually require readers have very strong mathematics background. In fact, top students on Computer Science are very good at mathematics. Furthermore, Students who major in other sciences, like economy, also can benefit from studying basic science classes.



Another good reason is that basic science classes help students a lot in their daily lives, no matter which subject they major in. Excel, a very excellent office tool to make tables and charts, is adopted widely nowadays. Students usually use it in their study life. However,  students cannot take full advantage of Excel if they are not good at general mathematics. Excel provides a lot of mathematics formulas to help users to make complicated and flexible tables and charts. Obviously the prerequisite is that users should have the basic knowledge of general mathematics. Besides general mathematics, other basic science classes, like physic and chemistry, also help students in their daily lives. Students who have the basic knowledge of general physics might understand the principle of automobiles easily, and such understanding might help them out when their cars broke down. Even more, the knowledge which students learn from basic science classes continue works in their whole life.

To sum up, taking basic science classes not only benefit university students in their study but also their daily life. To that extent, I think university students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study.

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To solve problems present and future is it necessary to understand the past.9

People always face problems and need to solve them all their life. To solve problems present and future, is it necessary to understand the past? After considering this question carefully, I incline to answer "yes". I am going to list my reasons below.

Firstly, people can know root causes of problems by understanding the past. Knowing root causes help to not only solve problems present but also avoid problems in future. Most software engineers have this kind of experience: they think a problem in an application, which is also called a "bug" in the software terminology, is easy and fix it quickly, but their changes to this problem usually cause a new problem in future. I think this phenomenon is largely due to having no idea of root causes. If people who fix bugs could try their best to understand the past, like reading the source code revision history and talking with who wrote original source code and ask them their original thoughts, they have a good chance to figure out root causes of bugs and then fix them correctly without causing new bugs. I believe knowing root causes is not only important for fixing application bugs but also for solving every sort of problems.

Secondly, people can learn lessons by understanding the past. Lessons learnt is also important for solving problems. People can provide constructive solutions to problems according to lessons learnt even if those problems are never met before. People usually descibe economy reformation in China since 1979 like "crossing a river with touching rocks in the river". Because there is no exisiting example for China to learn how to develop economy quickly and sustainably in such a country which has a totally different economy system from western developed countries. It is just like walking in a river you don't know its depth. It's very dangrous and you have to be very carefully and try to touch rocks in the river to know how depth it is, and then decide how to move forawrd. However, even facing such a totally new problem, China still try its best to understand the past and hope to learn lessons from the past. There were lot of economists, including Wu jinglian, who has been one of the most famous economists as well as members of the goverment brain trust in China now, did a lot of research on the past and then wrote a lot of paper on ideas of the economy reformation. Besides that, China invited two experienced European economists to share their experience and knowledge which they learnt from the past and benefited China's economists a lot. I think those lessons learnt contributed a lot to the sucessful economic reformation in China.

To sum up, People can know root causes and learn lessons by understanding the past, which help to solve problems correctly and creativly. According to these two reasons, I think it is necessary to understand the past to solve problems present and future.

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Basic sciences, like general mathematics, general physics and general chemistry, are the fundamental 这个是adj, 后面加个什么吧，subjects/areas of the modern society. Some people hold a point that university students should not take basic science classes if they are not part of the field of their study. Because 可以用一些高级词组，Because 太简单了。they think college students should spend all time on their own study. I oppose this point of view. I think 建议用高级词汇university students should be required to take basic、science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study.换个句子来表达，和前面一样会boring.
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To start with, taking basic science classes benefits university students' own study. Basic science is of course the base of many modern sciences. Students cannot understand modern sciences profoundly if they have little knowledge of basic sciences. For example, students of Compute Science usually study换个词用 essential classes like data structure, operation system and compiling theory. All of them are based on mathematics. If a student was not good at mathematics, he or she might feel those classes were obscure. Besides those classes, books on Computer Science theories, like "the Art of Programming", one of the most classic books on Computer Science, usually require readers to have very strong mathematics background. In fact, top students on Computer Science are very good at mathematics. Furthermore, Students who major in other sciences, like economy, also can benefit from studying basic science classes.感觉这段说数学的重要性太多了，可以提一两句，后面的例子在详细一点吧，多两句OK。

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2 P* A  a6 s# K, AAnother good reason is that basic science classes help students a lot in their daily lives, no matter which subject they major in. Excel, a very excellent office tool to make tables and charts, is adopted widely nowadays. Students usually use it in their study life. However,  students cannot take full advantage of Excel if they are not good at 之前用过了，这里可以换一个词用general mathematics. Excel provides a lot of mathematics formulas to help users to make complicated and flexible tables and charts. Obviously the prerequisite is that users should have the basic knowledge of general mathematics. Besides general mathematics, 重复前面的词了，直接用个Furthermore,other basic science classes, like physic and chemistry, also help students in their daily lives. 改个句式，换种说法Students who have the basic knowledge of general physics might understand the principle of automobiles easily, and such understanding might help 换词them out when their cars broke down. Even more, the knowledge which students learn from basic science classes continue works in their whole life.
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0 U4 H! _) z/ f+ kTo sum up, taking basic science classes not only benefit university students in their study but also their daily life. To that extent, I think 不要用这个词在作文中，大忌。。university students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study.换个句子说，和前面重复了。

建议童鞋可以多背一些高级词汇和词组，多用一些不同的句式，这样作文内容丰富一些，加油哦！
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Government should pay more attention to health care issues than on environment issues.
The two most critical issues that most governments are faced with are health care issues and environment issues. We can see governments have contributed a lot of efforts to address these two issues. However, which one should governments pay more attention to? I think the answer should be health care issues.


First of all, health care issues are related to citizens' daily life tightly. Everyone has to deal with health care all the life. In the modern society, health care becomes a very huge industry. Technologies in this area are more developed than before, but expense for individuals in this area has increased a lot meanwhile, which is a big issue nowadays. Most citizens cannot afford medical expense by themselves. That's why most governments in the planet provide health care assurance for their citizens as welfare. However, how to set up a double-win health care assurance plan is really a science. This kind of plans should benefit citizens but cannot hurt governments' finance. Governments should consider a lot of factors carefully, like economy development status, population and so on, to make a "live" plan. Even in USA, the most powerful country in the world, the government has to reform the existing health care assurance plan to fulfill emerging needs from both the government and citizens. Another big issue of health care is medical accidents. Every year we can read many medical accidents in newspapers. Governments and law-makers should contribute a great amount of efforts on addressing this issue. Such efforts would help a lot of people to keep away from medical accidents in the future. Considering these two big issues, it is really worth for government to pay attention in the health care fields.

On the other hand, environments issues become much worse these years. Governments cannot ignore environments issues of course. However, compared with health care issues, the environments issues are cared by more organizations. Lots of NGOs, companies have been working on environments issues and help governments to address them. Moreover, there has been lots of worldwide collaborations on addressing environments issues, like the global climate conference. On the contrary, there are not so many organizations and worldwide collaborations ont addressing health care issues. To that extent, governments should pay more attention to health care issues.

Taking the evident above into account, it is reasonable that governments should pay more attention to health care issues than on environment issues.

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