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本帖最后由 hiss2010 于 2010-4-15 19:53 编辑

我不信我不行！！！

麻烦大家帮我看看逻辑和段落展开。

有问题的话~麻烦指出~ Thx

还有就是。。我的速度啊。。考试时会不会写不完？

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加油~呵呵~

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不算今天。距离考试还有14天。

本帖最后由 hiss2010 于 2010-4-15 19:42 编辑

唉~没限时

各位童鞋麻烦帮我看看作文吧~主要是逻辑思路~麻烦看看我的文章逻辑还有哪些欠缺的地方。如果说没有力量，那么应该怎么写比较具有说服性。。麻烦大家乐~~~~

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ISSUE 208  The way people look,dress,and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society’s ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.
仅仅看路人怎么能领会文化真谛呢？尽管从外貌和行为举止上，的确可以看出生活习惯的、如时尚。但是，仅仅通过外貌和行为举止是不足以理解一个社会的思想和价值观，因为它复杂、善变，有着主流和非主流之分。但是，通过艺术，可以揭示社会一些隐藏的价值观和思潮。最后，了解了一个社会的各种文化不是目的，应该学会吸收该社会文化的精华。学会筛选辨别文化。为我用。这样才有意义。

Can we merely observe the appearance and behavior of its people in order to understand a society’s ideas and values? The speaker claims so, for the reason that people’s attitudes and interests have close relationship with their look,dress and act. It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that one can actually grasp fashion style and ethics of a society through scrutinizing local people’s clothing preference and actions advocated . Otherwise, in my opinion , the one who truly have a powerful desire to comprehend the central spirits , moral and values of a society cannot make his conclusion narrowly through examing the appearance and behavior of local citizens , other aspects of a society can also give researchers significant clues.

To begin with, necessarily through scrutinzing the appearance and the behavior of local people, can one really comprehend the society’s current lifestyle. \To the researchers , specially in the area of clothing fashion, it’s a simple method in order to know a certain group of persons’ perference toward garments by means of recording ,collecting, compiling and studying statistics of the clothing style of youth . The higher taste to clothing , the higher taste to life . Having a grace taste to ones appearance actually represents people’s positive and constructive  attitude to life pressure in order to relax and adjust state of mind themselves.

However, simply through examing persons’ appearance and behaviors , one could not terminate a conclusion regarding to a society’s inspirations and values objectively for the complexity and variety of a culture which contains both maistream thoughts and hidden values at the same time. Unfortunately ,some hidden thoughts and trends of values cannot be expressed directly .However, the arts sometimes could reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society. Take, for instance, Willam Shakespeare’s famous play Hamlet as an example . What makes modern society an impressive consciousness is not only the renowned lines “to be or not to be that’s a question”,but also the values of humanism revealed through whole play and its pioneer behavior , greeting the new period of the Renassance against the mainstream values.

Finally, if we are bogged in various aspects and branches of a society’s different values and considerations without any furthur judgments ,it will turn the whole process of observing and recording ideas to be meaningless.  In other words, researchers should analyze and classify those tons of statistics concerning a society’s ideas and make them into practice in order to constuct a more opening ,democratic and freedom society’s environment of public opinion.Governments should learn lessons from the Great Cultural Revolution(1966-1976) in China and the Stalinist Purges(1934) in Union of Soviet Socialist Republics which restrict the development of a society’s freedom envrionment of public opinions and fetter people’s mind. Therefore, thinking with the priciple of making the foreign serve ourselves will turn things to be effective and meaningful.

In sum, from the passage we discussed above , we can safely draw the conclusion that researchers cannot see a whole picture of a society’s existed values and opinions barely through the way of observing the appearance and behaviors of local people . What’s more, the terminal purpose of understanding a society’s opinion environment is to use and practice it.

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本帖最后由 hiss2010 于 2010-4-15 19:58 编辑

TOPIC: ISSUE56 - "Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future."
不能过分关注眼前问题，而没有远见！
确实一些问题非常紧迫并且危机人类生命。SARS
但是，如果忽视anticipated problem 甚至会威胁社会和人类的存亡，如果社会、人类不存在，一切还有什么意义呢？教育。环境保护。
有时，紧迫问题和长远问题只是同一问题的不同侧面和不同阶段。不可以人为的割裂他们的联系。否则我们无法真正解决困难，甚至无法发现背后真正的原因。
因此，当把力量主要集中在当今急迫的问题而非长远的问题时，已经非常糟糕了。更糟的是人为地分割immediate problems 和 anticipated probles 的联系，会让我们哪个问题都解决不了。

Should governments focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future? The speaker claims so, for the reason that the problems are too urgent to be delayed and closely connected with our people's daily life. It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that protect the benefits of citizens is government's reponsibilty . Otherwise, in my opinion, governments cannot overamphisize the significance of urgent problems while neglect the importance of the anticipated problems of the future,as the following discussed.

To begin with, some immediate social crisises occur without interval of time and will endanger our life. Take, for instance, the infectious diseases’ outbreak and control as an example. The epidemic of SARS , Severe Acute Respiratory Syndrome ,appears to have started in Guangdong Province, China in November 2002 and then spread all over the world.. Chinese government repond immediatey and effectively to control the infection of SARS and approve SARS vaccine experiment. The Ministry of Health set up comprehensive emergency-reponse system and demanded hospitals and centers for the prevention and control of diseases at all levels of countries started to report infectious diseases to the central government through Internet and exercise supervision.Goverment’s villigance on this epidemic and timely and successfully actions have saved thousands of life.

What’s more, admittedly , certain social issues sometimes threaten the existence of a society and people’s life instantly ,however overlooking the predictable problems makes the existence of people meaningless and may be a potential menace to our society ‘s future, let alone the governments . There are two strong examples to illustrate my point . Firstly, governments will not benefit directly through education ,however this cannot be the reason we neglect education problems. The utilitarian and pragmatic preference towards education in certain parents will lead a deminish sense of creative thinking in acadamic field and make young people lose their passion and fighting desire. If the youth , the master of our future society, cannot put their ninety-nine perspiration ,just like Thomas Edison’s famous aphorism, into what their concerning on, our society’s development will come to an end. Secondly, making concern on the environmental problems can never be too careful. It was the industrial revolution that gave birth to environmental pollution as we know it today. The emergence of great factories and consumption of immense quantities of coal and other fossil fuels gave rise to unprecedented air pollution and the large volume of industrial chemical discharges added to the growing load of untreated human waste.Although the process is slow and invisible ,the accumulated consequence will be fatal to our society . Since without the comfortable and fitable natural environment , human being will not exist . What’s more , economy and politic will be pointless either.

Finally, closely relationship exist between the instant problems and future problems ,thus it is a mistake to sepertate them artificially. The instant issue and the uninstant issue may be the two differnet phases of one problem . We will fail to find the proper way to settle it out if we see it as two things. Here is a good example that can give some light to my reason. Diabetes will lead lots of complications gradually,such as heart attack ,high blood pressue and so on. Either the heart attack or hypertension is the surfacial appearance of the disease in different times ,but not the basically reason. Only combine the phenonmenons of a disease and find the true reason behind the surface , can a problem really resolved. So does the political decisions made by governments will .

In sum, from the passage we discussed above , we can safely draw the conclusion that it is inproperable to pay much attention on immediate social problems in stead of anticipated quandaries which are not extremely serious . What’s more, the much worse thing is that people devide one problem into two issues deliberately and do not recognize what they are doing.

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发表于 2010-4-15 21:02:13 |只看该作者

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唉。提纲都写了。还用了1个半小时。~

130.How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society . Unfortunately ,we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society .
a.决定社会命运的不仅靠儿童社会化。儿童的其他能力呢？只靠社会能力，没有真才实学，一个儿童在成长后也无法为社会服务。更不要说决定一个社会的命运了，连自身生存都有问题。社会的历史、法律、政治制度和全体公民的努力，才可以决定一个社会的命运。
b.尽管现在的社会教育出现了一些问题，如过于功利性、过于注重成绩、没有启发创造性等。但不能只看到教育的弊端而否定人类教育，say we have not yet learned how to raise children. 因为：1.学校课堂教育不是儿童受教育的唯一方式。有理论、实践两种。2.全世界各国都意识到了现存的教育问题，从政府到学校的每一位教师都在变革旧的教育模式与探索新的教育方法。让学生不仅学习到大量理论知识，而且也能提高他们的socialize能力。
Is it a truth that how children are socialized today determines the destiny of society and we have not learn how to raise children? The speaker claims so, for the defects of modern formal education. It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that so many flaws existed lead to the un-perfect situation of children’s socialization. Otherwise ,my points of view is the destiny of society cannot be merely determined by children’s capacity of socialization and it is not the result of formal education today,as followed blow.

To begin with, admittedly, children socialization is responsible to furture society , but we cannot conclude that how children are socialized determines the destiny of society in that which is only a facet of one problem. I concede that the socialization of children, which includes the self-care ability, independence, basic sense of worth and of right and wrong in society, is an aspect that cannot be ignored. However, the speaker overemphasizes the role of children’s socialization ability contributing to the destiny of society too much and overlooks learning capabilities of children which may determine one’s personal destiny such as critical thinking , creation ability ,etc. Without those academic abilities , there are merely chances for one person to find a job in order to make a living, let alone making contribution to society . What’s more , one society’s destiny is merely decided by anyone . One properous society not only need groups of well-educated and high ethics citizens ,but also robust regulatory system, prudent fiscal management and rule of law. And histroy also has impartial influence on one society’s prosperity and fate .Take, for instance , the most properous and booming time of the holy Rome Empire as an example.The factor contribute most to the successful rise of this country is not only the empire ,but its novelty and insistant on institutions and laws through whole city.

Secondly, the capability of socialization of children mostly is apprehended by children themselves and one cannot accuse formal education today of causing children’s drawbacks in socialization although formal schooling education have problems such as ,pragmaticism ,overvaluing the signifcance of scores and lacking of creative thinking courses. Firstly, practice provide chances for children to socialize . Children need to explore things themselves during this process and cannot find support from either teachers or parents .Otherwise, they couldn’t find the key of how to socialized finally. Secondly,It ‘s unfair for the speaker to make conclusion that people have not learned how to raise children merely according to the flaws of education . Here is a good example that can give some light to my reason. Many countries’ Ministries of Education have touch their flaws and advocationg reformation .From governments to teachers in every school ,specialists in educaion are trying to break the traditional ways and explore new methods in order to not only increasing the acadamic level of students but also promoting their capability of socialization.

In sum,from the passage we discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion that since sociey’s destiny is a complex and time variant issue ,how children are socialized is not the only motive. What’s more , the ability of socialization is actually learned by children themselves.

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发表于 2010-4-25 01:17:46 |只看该作者

感觉上下两层似乎没有什么联系，其实这两句并不是独立分开的，分别进行论述。前后必然有一定的联系，unfortunately之后提到的问题与socialization并非毫无联系，作者并没有在批判当下的教育形式，更没有否定人类教育，所以第二点把重点放在这里似乎感觉有些不妥。为什么无法达到better society 是因为我们没有教会孩子socielization, 然而socielization 又是怎样的概念呢，是否能够决定the destiney of society , 而我们是否也没有做好呢，是否就无法bring about a better society . 这些都应该思考
另外可以看看这个帖子 https://bbs.gter.net//viewthread.php?tid=130665 虽然里面提到的问题并不一定都要涉及到，但是可以开阔自己的思路，知道在审题的时候都要做怎样的思考，怎样一步步有逻辑的说服读者，怎样使自己的分析严谨，也不至于在通过一个问题，同一个层次上反复说明，但是却没有其他的深入。在做其他的题目的时候也可以这样多思考一下，题目的本质到底是在讨论一个怎样的问题，涉及到了什么样的概念等等。
呵呵只是谈了一些我的看法希望能够对你有帮助

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