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本帖最后由 panmingming2008 于 2011-9-8 15:10 编辑

By BenPoon (panmingming 2008)
[Sept 8, THU revised and edited]

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什么是段落
Aparagraph is (a group of sentences)
that all relate to a single ->{main idea} or a {central point}.

由哪几部分组成?
TOPIC SENTENCE (TS)
SUPPORTING SENTENCES (Sp)
CONCLUDING SENTENCE  (Cs)


功能:
TS-- 陈述本段主要看法或论点 (一个句子直抒己见)
Sp-- 说明判断的根据 (3~6个句子)
Cs-- 重述论点 (一个句子)


图示:



对大多数同学来说,更常见的是中国的传统食品-- 肉夹馍。(下图)





缺少中间的肉馅,肉夹馍会失色\\. 缺少理由与例子支撑的段落或文章, 会毫无生气或吸引力\读起来也不过瘾.

若理由不充足或例子没有细节, 干巴巴的失魂落魄. 没有充分的展开(well-developed)。没有馅的馍叫白膜.





论点与例子(或理由)的关系
原则:
一个好例胜过生拉硬扯论述千言

"A good example >>>>> thousand words"


一个段落中, 要用到例子,有两种写法:

A: 一个论点一个长例子
(typical and explaining the point fully)

B: 一个论点两到四个短例子
(relevant and explaining the point fully)


[GOOD means Typical and providing ENOUGH information for a READER to understandthe point fully.]

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判断段落优劣也有两种标准:




Developed优质段落的判断标准

论点清晰
根据充分
全部根据集中于论点:根据与论点有关,支撑论点,仅支撑论点

Developing劣质段落的判断标准
正好相反


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练习:看两个例子,分辨哪个developed 哪个developing?

例一
[全文主题:however, I don't agree with the point of view that those childrenshould be trained at an early age and only on their talents.]

To begin with, our society can hardly identified those geniuses when they areat an early age; if we simply divide the students in two parts: one is agroup of talents and the other is consist of ordinary children, it is highly possiblethat people wrongly identify the students’ talents and even regard giftedchildren as changeling.For example, Albert Einstein, the most distinguishedphysicist of the20th century, was considered as changeling when he was at anearly age, not mention to be discovered as talent. And another instance is DeBroglie, a well-known physicist who has made tremendous contributions to thefield of physics, but he was thought to have gifts in literature when he wasyoung. So an early age is not a good time for the society to identify whether astudent has talent or not.

例二:
[全文主题:Working more than about fifteen hours a week is harmful toadolescents because it reduces their involvement with school,
encourages a materialistic and expensive lifestyle, and increases the chance ofhaving problems with drugs and alcohol.]

Schoolwork and the benefits of extracurricular activities tend to go by thewayside when adolescents work long hours. As more and more teens have filledthe numerous part-time jobs offered by fast-food restaurants and malls,teachers have faced increasing difficulties. They must both keep the attentionof tired pupils and give homework to students who simply don't have time to doit. In addition, educators have noticed less involvement in the extracurricularactivities that many consider a healthy influence on young people. School bandsand athletic teams are loosing players to work, and sports events are poorlyattended by working students. Those teens who try to do it all-- homework,extracurricular activities, and work-- may find themselves exhausted and proneto illness. A recent newspaper story, for example, described a girl in Pennsylvania who camedown with mononucleosis as a result of aiming for good grades, playing on twoschool athletic teams, and working thirty hours a week.

(休息2分钟)
我们发现例2比较吻合优质段落的标准。
而例1接近劣质段落的标准。
下面左右两例,右边例子是在左边例子的基础上作了修改。
有改进的地方是topic sentence加了conventional method(s),接着第二句
加了by the index of IQ--这是对conventional method(s)的解释与展开。
尽管不是很全面,也是一个合理的改进方向。( the original text written by @lovetian)


To begin with, our society can hardly identified those geniuses when they are at an early age; if we simply divide the students in two parts: one is a group of talents and the other is consist of ordinary children, it is highly possible that people wrongly identify the students’ talents and even regard gifted children as changeling.
For example, Albert Einstein, the most distinguished physicist of the20th century, was considered as changeling when he was at an early age, not mention to be discovered as talent. And another instance is De Broglie, a well-known physicist who has made tremendous contributions to the field of physics, but he was thought to have gifts in literature when he was young. So an early age is not a good time for the society to identify whether a student has talent or not.


To begin with, our society can hardly identify those geniuses when they are at an early age by our conventional method. If we simply divide the students in two parts by the index of IQ: one is a group of talents and the other is consisted of ordinary children, it is highly possible that people wrongly identify the students’ talents and may even regard gifted children as changeling. For example, Albert Einstein, the most distinguished physicist of the
20th century, was regarded as changeling when he was at an early age, not mention to be discovered as a talent. And another instance is De Broglie, a well-known physicist who has made tremendous contributions to the field of physics, but he was thought to have gifts in literature when he was young. So an early age is not a good time for the society to identify whether a student has talent or not.



作为一名教师,不但要指出学生习作不足,还应亲自示范写作。
下面是本文作者BENpanmingming2008)批改后的段落(inspired by lovetian):
[批改标准


1论点清晰;
2根据充分;
3全部根据集中于论点:根据与论点有关,支撑论点,仅支撑论点。
]

To begin with, it is difficult to identify and cultivate talentedchildren when they are at an early age by conventional methods. Gradeson homework, early achievement on some subject or result of an IQ test?Unfortunately, these criteria have no good record on identification orprediction. [例一] For example, Albert Einstein,the most distinguished physicist of the 20th century, was regarded as  challenging whenhe was at an early age. Why? Teachers found him behaving badly in classroom andbeing scored lowest in some subjects, such as history andgeography. [例二] De Broglie,a French physicist who has made tremendous contributionto quantum physics, was thought to be giftedin literature when he was in elementary school. [例三] Consider more common "talents". For years, a topuniversity in Chinahas been recruiting hundreds of teen winners in Math Olympiad Contest (MOC).Most of them changed their field of study and no promising
mathematiciansemerge from the remaining rest. The prime of academic life
inMathematics is in 20s and 30s,as researchers indicate. [此句假设成就与年龄相关, 缺乏足够证据, 属于unwarranted claim, 并且与本段分论点无关.故删去. (感谢@陈懂 指出) ]Evidently, most of MOC winners missed their chance to make avaluable contribution in the field which they are expected to prosper.Thus it is hard for a society to identify a gifted childor specifically which talent he/she may develop.
[218 words]




拓展阅读材料
要求:请分辨出哪是TS, Sp Cs
Already we have passed the earth’s regenerative capacity, yet this is hardlyfactored* into economic projections about growth.
Take energy.
If the Chinese and Indians were to use as much energy per capita as Americansuse, their total power consumption would be 14 times as great as that of the United States.
Even if Asians were to restrict themselves to lower European levels of energyusage they would still consume eight to nine times as much power as America doestoday.
However we look at it, the world cannot expect to see its energy usage grow bysuch an extent. Conventional forms of power generation will produce carbon insuch volumes that our planet will be condemned to unmanageable climate change,while the alternatives — even nuclear power — are simply not viable within thetime frames mentioned.
Or take cars.
Estimates suggest that if China,Indiaand other developing countries reach Western levels of car ownership, therecould be 3 billion cars in the world, four times the current total, within fourdecades. Where will the fuel come from for these vehicles, and what about theirenvironmental impact?
Similar calculations can be made for everything from chickens toiPads. Quite simply, this world just does not have enough for two moreconsumption-driven Americas. (213words)

*factor in - consider as relevant when making a decision:"You mustfactor in the recent developments" @thefreedictionary.com
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发表于 2011-8-24 17:12:14 |只看该作者
请以上同学按照以下标准修改后跟帖,我会逐渐再详加批改。【思考清晰-写作才清晰教学法】



论点清晰、简洁
根据充分:相关、有细节支撑
全部根据集中于论点:根据与论点有关,支撑论点,仅支撑论点



句法基础结构:主语+主语动词+宾语...+修饰语(放在前面三者合适位置)


举例:( Chinese) students ||are not encouraged to ||question authority(, such as parents, teachers, officials).  【主语动词也叫谓语动词】
或变体: Questioning authority, ... , is not encouraged in China.



敬告:用你熟悉的词,尤其是动词勿用深词,不用《GRE词汇精选》里的词。你写作的目的是写清楚明白的句子,不是显摆高级学问。(学术写作唯一重点是什么,见文后张五常的故事)



Developing劣质段落的判断标准
正好相反
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举例:

OG第一篇
4分中心论点:Using technology to solve problems will continue to help us realize our potential as a human race. (阅卷人评论The writer develops a clear position
中心论点句清楚简洁 扪心自问:我写的是什么意思
阅卷人评论:The position is then developed with relevant reasons.


分论点:
1.If you think about it, using technology to solve more [complicated] problems gives humans a chance to expand their thinking and learningopening up whole new worlds for many people.
2.Right now we are seeing a golden age of technology, using it all the time during our every day lives.
各段的分论点(topic sentence)也是清楚简洁,并且与中心论点相关 扪心自问:我有什么根据?
Point 1, “using technology” is supported with the simple but relevant notions that technology allows us access to information and abilities to which we would not normally have access. Similarly, point 2, “the golden age” is supported by the basic description of our technologically saturated social condition.
中心论点<--- 分论点<--- 理由例证:层次清晰,逐层得到展开--细节支撑。这不是挺好的吗?




SCORE 4 RESPONSE [279 words]

I absolutely agree with the first section of the statement above, but find fault with the latter half.


There is no doubt that praising positive actions is an excellent way to teach, and this method is most clearly exemplified when dealing with much younger children. When a young child is learning basic social behavior, it is imperative that he is encouraged to repeat positive actions.  For example, when a child voluntarily shares his toys with another, if a teacher rewards that behavior, the child will understand that this is a good practive, and likely share again in the future.

In contrast, if a child displays negative behavior by stealing a toy away from his playmate, it would be very dangerous for the teacher to ignore this action, for then the child may never recognize that this is unacceptable. In this instance, the child has not learned from the situation at all. So what should a teacher do when faced with such a situation? Punishement is not necessarily the optimal choice, either. Rather than scolding a child for mistreating his playmats an sending off to a corner, a teacher would be wise to demonstrate the positive alternative: to share his toys instead. In this case, rather than ignoring or punishing negative actions, the teacher could seize the opportunity to reinforce positive behavior, and further extend the child's larning experience.
  In summary, positive reinforcement is certainly an excellent method for teaching new methods or behaviros, and encouraging a student to learn more. However to ignore, rather than recognize and correct negative actions, would be a disservice to the student, for he would not know what conclusion to draw from his action.



【279 words: 词数是问题吗???扪心自问,有几个同学生拉硬扯出400词的伪文章(在词数里获得点伪满足-- )能像这篇279词短文一样清楚明白,有观点,有相关根据???先把话说清楚-- 你是在跟人类交流(communication--尽管audience远在美国。从此不要考虑词数。】



READER COMMENTARY(阅卷人评论)



(中心)论点及根据层面This adequate response follows the task directions and presents a clear position on the issue, supporting its main points with examples that are relevant, if only adequately develped. For instance, the discussion in the second paragraph of a teacher who reinforces the positve behavior of sharing a toy is certainly relevant and on-task (i.e., it describes a situation in which adopting the recommendation would be advantageous). 【先做到4分】
根据展开-细节层面However, the development of this idea does not lead to generally thoughtful or insightful analysis. Instead, it is simply presented as an example. 【能否超过4分的分水岭】
语言表达层面In addition to its adequate develpment, this response also demonstrates sufficient control of the conventions of standard written English, and its main points are made with reasonable clarity. Some of the sentences demonstrate the syntactical variety normally seen in responses that receives higher scores (e.g., " Rather than scolding a child for mistreating his playmates and sending him off to a corner, a teacher would be wise to demonstrate the positive alternative to share his toys instead"). However, the overall use of language in this response is merely adequate.





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)二十九歲某一天,芝加哥大学老師艾智仁(Armen Alchian)小张到辦公室去,對小张說:我們(指他和其他的老師)絕不懷疑你是可造之材,不過,你的文章不容易看得懂。為文之道只有一個重點,那就是要寫得清楚明白。要記著,不管你的思想如何了得,文章不容易明白就不會有成功的機會。”
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Ben老师,您好,这篇帖子,我能转到人人去吗?我们在那里开了一个小组,希望把这些经验介绍给组里的同学。

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3# Confection
可以,另外请加个链接,因为我会每隔一段时间修改及补充一些内容。是为update.

PS.你挺有智慧财产权(intellectual property,大陆译为知识产权)意识。谢谢!
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教育话题--资金投入
原文,全文行文简洁,最后一段点出“公共政策取向”,简洁明了。

Shortchanging Students
By BRENT STAPLES
Published: August 27, 2011

Students are heading to class again, and it is not a happy return. By the end of next week, nearly 50 million children will be back in their schools, many of which have been devastated by state fiscal policies that have worsened the effects of the recession.

A new analysis by the Center on Budget and Policy Priorities, a nonpartisan research group, shows that nearly half of the states have made significant cuts in support for public education, resulting in fewer teachers, larger classes, shorter school days and program cancellations — and generally undermining the academic progress that many states have made in recent years.

According to the study, spending has been cut by $542 per pupil in Florida, $530 in Arizona, $400 in Ohio and $347 in Colorado. It also says that Texas eliminated state support for pre-K programs that serve around 100,000 children, most of them at risk. Several states could have cushioned the blow by dipping into their rainy-day funds but refused to do so.

The wise approach would have been to draw down reserves and raise taxes to meet the shortfalls, but only a few states took that route. Incredibly, a dozen states actually compounded revenue problems by reducing taxes. Instead of spurring growth, as tax-cut advocates claimed, this move will produce another round of cuts and layoffs.

This could be dire for schools generally, and especially harmful to initiatives that were meant to improve education for the poorest children. To avert long-term disaster, states need to take a sensible, balanced approach, leavening budget cuts with revenue increases.

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How do we make our schools fit to face the 21st century?【教育评估】

本帖最后由 panmingming2008 于 2011-9-5 20:48 编辑

This article was published on Guardian. It interested me by its title.
For decades, education has been  thought as the best way to solve the social problems, and also thought to be a source of problems.

Most people, distinguished educators included, complain today's educational system. What has happened? How do we fix it?
Educators have the solution: emphasis on independent thought  and real-world skills and qualities,  not spoonfeeding materials and skills just for exam. But the slow-fix seems there are few echoes in the real world.

Adults are busy with making a living, leaving behind children cramming for junk food and dry teaching materials.

Rebelling kids, you are on your own. Define yourself and solve the problems you confront with bytrial and error.

by BEN
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来自【Guardian

Melissa Benn There's something more to education, which is about learning how to live in society, learning how to be a citizen, learning how to be self-reliant and all those kinds of skills. It's a bigger task than just exams.

Peter Hyman I think we're preparing children for the middle of the 20th century and not for the 21st. And by that I mean we are not equipping them with the skills and the attributes and the competencies that they need. And I think that's partly an obsession with a certain type of rigid exam. And there's no assessment of all those other qualities which we all know that children need out there in the real world. The main graduate website lists all the qualities that employers are looking for, like problem-solving, like initiative, like teamwork, like very good spoken communication. We've got to totally revamp[: remake/revise] what we're teaching.


So in a way we're talking about a difference between learning and schooling. Schooling for exams is very different from an appetite for learning.

Guy Claxton Absolutely. The most important thing is not what we're teaching, it's how we're teaching. This business about teaching harder subjects is a complete irrelevance. You can teach Latin or maths in a way that is inspiring and mind-opening and challenging, or you can teach it in a way that is mind-numbing.【contrast: 教法很重要,同样的内容落在不同老师手里,学生的反应会有所不同。】 There is a real concern that many young people at the top end of the examination pile are thrown by being asked questions at their Oxbridge entrance exams which they haven't prepared for, and they think it's deeply unfair if they're asked to think on their feet. Well, what kind of an education is that? So it's not just the Neets [Neet is a government acronym for people "not in education, employment, or training"] or the kind of excluded middle. It's even the high-achieving students who've been deprived of the opportunity to develop curious minds by teachers who've been able to spoonfeed them to their grades.
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HOW TO overcome the race gap [美国科研生涯准备系列]

[source: sciencecareers.org]( Science Careersis the careers component of Science )

[WORDS FROM BEN:
"The Research Project Grant (R01) is the original and historically oldest grant mechanism used by NIH. The R01 provides support for health-related research and development based on the mission of the NIH." as the official website of NIH says.  This article starts with hot-off-the-press  findings that black investigators are less likely than their white peers to get grants. Then leaves the ball to key persons and moves forward to how-to manual including specific procedure for scientists already on track.  The article cites several experts, such as grant receivers, grant proposals reviewers, indicating the current problems and providing solutions or suggestions.

The crucial point: "Whatever odds WE face, WE need to find a way to succeed." May this article help you.]

By Michael Price on August 19, 2011


If you plan on winning tenure in a biomedical field at a research university, you had better plan on winning an R01 research grant from the National Institutes of Health (NIH) first; it's practically a necessary credential. But, according to findings released today in Science , black investigators -- a group composed of African-Americans and scientists from other nations who identify as black -- are about 10 percentage points less likely than their white peers to win these grants. The researchers who first noticed this aren't sure what's behind it -- it's up to NIH and its committees to figure that out and fix it -- but scientists already on the tenure track can't wait that long. Whatever odds they face, they need to find a way to succeed, now. Scientists we talked to who have earned R01s -- including several African-American scientists -- say that's possible.

Finding good mentors who are willing to share grant-writing wisdom is essential for learning how to win grants, says James Jackson, a professor of psychology, health behavior, and health education at the University of Michigan, Ann Arbor. "No one is born with the understanding and capacity to be able to get grants," he says. "That is something that you just have to learn. And the best way to learn that is by actually working with people who know how to do it, have done it in the past, and indeed can impart that knowledge in a hands-on way."

Jackson, who's received a variety of grants from NIH since 1977 and currently holds an R01 for studying health disparities in the progression of type 2 diabetes, says it's not just a matter of seeing to the nuts and bolts of designing a good proposal -- though that's important too. It's also about developing the right professional connections. "Where you are, who you were trained by, who you work with, and so on are vital variables that people take into consideration when making decisions about whether to award grants or not," he says.

Unfortunately, identifying mentors can be difficult for young black scientists, says Chester Brown, a pediatric geneticist at Baylor College of Medicine in Houston, Texas. "There just aren't as many faculty that look like us," he says. Adding to that challenge is the fact that many of the young black scientists who have become postdocs and professors have done it by being mentally tough, which can make them less likely to seek help when they need it, Brown says. "Unfortunately, many people think asking for help is a sign of weakness. I've seen that pattern in a lot of black students." [BEN:  有胆量向别人请教,不要怕露怯。各行各业高手多是从摔打中磨练出来的。别因为内心障碍而错过成长机会。]

Compounding the problem is that minority scientists are often compelled -- by their own conscience, surely, but also by colleagues and administrators -- to be mentors for other minority undergraduate and graduate students, Jackson says. That's an extra time burden that their majority peers don't have to carry, he says, and it often prevents minority scientists from collecting the data they need to prepare to submit an R01 grant. "You can get hired one day and the next you're the assistant to the president for minority recruiting," he says. "That might be fine in terms of a financial inducement, but that's certainly not the way to get a scientific career launched. This has happened to too many promising young scholars. It's an absolute killer to people's careers."

So what's a young black scholar to do? Learn to say "no" to at least some of the time-consuming commitments you're asked to take on, Brown and Jackson say. Leave the undergraduate and graduate student mentoring -- or some of it at least -- to established senior faculty members who can afford to spend time away from their labs.

Floyd Wormley Jr., a microbiologist at the University of Texas, San Antonio, serves as a standing member on NIH's AIDS-associated Opportunistic Infections and Cancer study section, which reviews grant proposals on that topic, scores them, and forwards the best ones to the appropriate NIH institutes for the final funding decision. 【实际评审流程】He says that young black investigators should mark themselves early as committed, dependable scientists in the eyes of reviewers, and the best way to do that is to publish. "By publishing in grad school, you're building up a record that establishes yourself as a bright young scientist," he says. "If you apply for an R01 and you don't have a record of publication, it's going to affect how the reviewer views you as an investigator. ... It's like how it'd be difficult to take a person seriously who says they want to run in the Olympics when they've never run a race before in their life." (比喻。)

Serving onad hoc study sections can greatly help young scientists better understand what is and isn't an R01-worthy grant, Wormley says. Before he got his own R01, he served on an ad hoc review panel assembled by the American Heart Association to review grants related to microbiology and immunology. "It helps tremendously reading other grants, seeing the good ones and the not-so-good ones, seeing how the process works, knowing how to format your grants and what to include in them," he says. "If you're offered the opportunity to serve on an ad hoc study section, do it."

Don't wait to be asked either, Wormley says. If you know someone who serves on an NIH study section or another review panel, tell them you're interested. Often, those people can recommend you.[要积极主动。山不会过来--除非你够分量能撼动,那你主动过去。]

Does race ever play an explicit or implicit factor in determining how individual grants are scored in such sections? Wormley says no. "I must say, race never comes up in discussion," he says. "In my experience, most of the time, you do not know the nationality, and oftentimes you don't know the gender, of the person writing the grant. Race is never an issue. ... We only grade the science."

Brown says he can sometimes identify the race of a grant's proposer. But "it never trumps the science," he says. If anything, he thinks most study section members might give a slight benefit to a grant proposal they knew came from a minority scientist. "If there was an application from a minority scientist that was on the line, would that affect my decision?" Brown says. "I don't know. It honestly might." 【没必要寄望小概率事件】

Michael Price is a staff writer for Science Careers.

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有治疗文字恐惧症的药方不,看到长篇就眼花:dizzy:

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WHY MUST WE PUT IN IDENTIFICATION CODES BEFORE SENDING:@

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上面的同学说:
有治疗文字恐惧症的药方不,看到长篇就眼花



哈哈, 我其实也不喜欢长篇大论. 读书思考\观察世事数年,一心想把思考结果简化,再简化.
选读这些文章, 为了方便诸位, 我把重点做了颜色标注, 并用English写了简单的内容介绍.

尽管不喜欢长文,但许多精彩内容或故事不是半页纸所能说清楚的, 作者也要提供一个具体的 context or background--便于读者准确理解原意,避免误解..
可以想些办法克服的.比如把它当小说看( 你爱看小说吗?) .
练习阅读长篇复杂文本的技巧, 快速把要点"提取出来"-- 可以跟帖写个一句或几句话的summary 来""强迫自己在练习表达中改进表达.

如果你要读研究生, 那就多多发现研究的趣味所在, 把看似枯燥的科学内容用一种别人听得懂\有趣的方法讲出来, 也是蛮有趣的事.

有个性人物\有故事的文章我喜欢看, 比如这对父子科学家.
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