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发表于 2012-2-7 21:25:13 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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In this letter,the author makes the suggestion that Parkville should discontinue organizedathletic competition for children under nine. The author points out that over40000 of young players participated in athletic competition suffered injured. Hethen notes that according to a recent interview, many youth-league soccerplayers face more psychological pressure. Furthermore, education experts’opinion, that long practice sessions take away children’s study time, is alsocited in this letter. The author takes all these factors as evidence to showthe disadvantages of athletic competition, and to support his suggestion. As discussedbelow, the letter suffers from several critical flaws and thereforeunpersuasive.
First of all, theauthor observes a correlation between the increasing number of children undernine participated in youth-league sports and over 40000 of these young playerssuffered injuries, and then makes the former one to be reason for the latter. However,he ruled out other causes for these injuries without any evidences. Perhaps theinjured children are mostly 9 plus, and they get injured since their hot temperas teenagers. It is also can be true that the number of youth who get injuredare equal, even less, compared with the number when few children under 9participated.
Secondly, evenif more youth get injured with more children under 9 participated, the authorcannot assume that the factor runs well in Parkville, since the factor isconcluded by the nationwide survey. Perhaps factor is just the opposite inPARKVILLE as youth players were better trained than any other places.
Thirdly: theauthor assumes that young players are stressful based on a recent interviews. Butthe interview is far from enough to be the evidence. At least, the authorshould prove that the interviewers can represent all young players. Perhaps theinterviewers were coincide with youth who had received more expect from coachesand parents, or the pressure problem is unbearable only for soccer players. What’smore, the interview was undertaken in some major cities. Young players’pressure may result from fierce competition in these cities.
Fourthly: theclaim that long practice sessions take away study time relies on the assumptionthat the education experts referred in the letter own enough authority toconvince people that what they said is reliable. Even if these experts areauthorities, this needs not to be the case. Perhaps, what experts said is basedon the surveys many years ago, the author quote their saying out of context.
Finally: even ifall the disadvantages are proved to be true, the author’s claim thatdisadvantages outweigh any advantages is logically unsound. Disadvantages oradvantages cannot be calculated, even if more disadvantages can be listed thanadvantages, the bad influence can be little compared with healthy effect. Perhapsstudy time was taken away but children study much more efficient than everbefore.
In summary, thesuggestion is unconvincing as it stands. To make a reasonable suggestion, anall-round investigation aimed at Parkville is required.

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发表于 2012-2-7 21:29:56 |只看该作者

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper.
"Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries. When interviewed for a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games. Furthermore, education experts say that long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be used for academic activities. Since the disadvantages outweigh any advantages, we in Parkville should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine."

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