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发表于 2004-11-30 15:32:59 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

issue128 "It is often asserted that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. In reality, however, formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free."
观点：教育的目的-free mind
1，正规教育的目的
2，所谓restraining our minds的疑问源于正规教育的特点-系统化，这种restraint实际上为free minds 打下了基础
3， examining大学教育, 强调正规教育的意义

I agree with the speaker insofar as the ultimate ideal of education is to free the mind and the spirit, although sometimes formal education seems to contradict its original purposes. Closely re-examine our educational system could help us truly understand the goal of education.

The ideal of formal education, as to individuals, lies in ensuring our children to be well informed and developed intellectually and morally; as to the society at large, lies in preparing social members with certain professional skills and liberal minds which enhancing the general quality of nationality. In the process of schooling, students receive the systematic educational disciplines- a system begins from the age of 6 or 7 and lasts for really a long period in one’s life. It is this distinctiveness of formal education that ensures the efficacy of developing a populace with necessary scientific, social knowledge, and notions of humanity, upon which an integrity personality depends.

It may be from its“systematic” characteristics- from early stage that one is imparted facts and priciples to subsequent further development- that there comes the concern that formal education tends to refrain our minds. My argument is that in some cases, especially for innocent children who just begin their school times, the so-called restrain is necessary and basic for one to progress into further free thinking. Our common sense and experience inform us that history study can not be separated with historical facts; students in fine art learning can not express their creative ideas freely without knowledge of classic principles of art- principle of perspective, lighting, and dimension; and evidently, it is the theories one learnt in physical science and strict discipline in logical thinking that contribute to one’s ability to deal with practical problems. In a word, strict discipline, which may be considered hidebound indoctrination, builds the pedestal for further meaningful free thinking.

Actually, our educational system, at least in democratic nations, serves its goals mentioned above. To be more specific, no matter at personal level or societal level, the formal education reflects its goal in cultivating generations with capability of resonble and critical thinking, therefore developing one's independent perspectives. It is especially evident in our college and university education. Various academic courses are available to students- to enhance our understanding about ourselves and people around, philosophy and psychology serve these ends; to get down to in-depth evaluation or judgment of social issues, social-political sciences help us; and also literature and art facilitate our ability to appreciate aesthetically the world around us. It is through formal education that students are more likely to understand different viewpoints and formulate their own distinct perspectives. We could put it this way that education is efficient in enriching an innocent mind, in helping to develp a mind that is free to demonstrate one's attitudes, values, and beliefs.

Conclusively, a truly educated person should be the one with free mind and spirit. Although there may exist skepticism about our formal educational system or sometimes the education means may go astray, the ultimate ideal of formal education, at least in democratic society, is acknowledged, that is to cultivate generations with liberal minds rather than restricted ones.

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发表于 2004-11-30 18:33:14 |只看该作者

请教另一道有关教育的题目
214 "Society should identify those children who have special talents and abilities and begin training them at an early age so that they can eventually excel in their areas of ability. Otherwise, these talents are likely to remain undeveloped."

我的提纲：
观点：同意：children with special talents and ability should be identified and developed at early age
1. the importance of early age education in shaping one's personality
2. examples- common sense and daily life experience- athletes and musicians are trained from their kid times
3. identifying talents and ensuring them be well educated benefit the commonweal at large

不知第三点从社会整体受益去说是否合适？因为题目好象偏重于个人发展
请指教！

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发表于 2004-12-1 11:10:09 |只看该作者

给ISSUE128提点意见：
1 观点明确，论述有层次。

2 第二段（B1）的ideal和第首段提出的ultimate ideal之间是什么关系？而你第二段（B1）在全文中的作用是什么？好象并不清楚。

3 据我理解，B2是说某些方面的restrain其实是为free mind服务的，B3则说大学教育的直接目的就是free mind，是这样吗？感觉B2论述挺好的，但B3的论述角度就比较模糊，跟B2的功能区分不清楚。

4 B3中的语言好象有些问题：
Actually, our educational system, at least in democratic nations, serves its goals mentioned above. （这个above指代不明，其实直接写goals of...更好）。。。to enhance our understanding about ourselves and people around, philosophy and psychology serve these ends; to get down to in-depth evaluation or judgment of social issues, social-political sciences help us;（这两个并列的动词不定式提前句型读起来挺别扭，给人头重脚轻之感。好象通常如果一个从句或短语较长时，更自然的用法是后置，只有短的才可提前。感觉直接说xxx subject serves to...也能达到效果） and also literature and art facilitate our ability to appreciate aesthetically the world around us. It is through formal education that students are more likely to understand different viewpoints and formulate their own distinct perspectives. We could put it this way that education is efficient in enriching an innocent mind, in helping to develp a mind that is free to demonstrate one's attitudes, values, and beliefs.（后面这两句写得美）

最后一段也有些语言问题，
Conclusively, a truly educated person should be the one with free mind and spirit. Although there may exist skepticism about our formal educational system or sometimes the education （means may？） go astray, the ultimate ideal of formal education, at least in democratic society, is acknowledged,（ that is to？） cultivate generations with liberal minds rather than restricted ones.

其实语言方面不错，不影响意思表达，上面的几例也只能算是挑刺吧。

我的意见仅供参考，欢迎交流和互相帮助。

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