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发表于 2005-1-4 14:12:17 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

参照“不怕开水烫的猪“的意见修改后

The view above seems to separate science and art in their values. But neither is only to reassure or upset. And their value should not be assembled separately.

Take science for example. Science reassures us in revealing many myths such as the cause of thunder, lightening, typhoon. Also many convenience and benefits has science brought us. In knowing microorganisms, we can get antibiosis which is helpful in curing diseases, brewing beer and sour milk. The development in cytology, genetic engineering makes curing the once incurable diseases possible. And thanks to the accelerated development in IT, we can communicate in a more convenient and open way. We chat in chatting rooms or with the help of chat software such as QQ, MSN. We send and receive E-mail in just several seconds or minutes. We share information, useful sources from internet in stead of the old troublesome ways.

But science is reassuring us while upsetting. People develop science for the benefits and conveniences of themselves, and sometimes they do not think about the consequences while only care about the wealth and benefits at that time. Clone is quite promising in solving the problem of human organism deficiency. But cloning the whole human causes dissents in morality. What will the cloned human babies' identity be? What kind of environment shall those cloned babies face? Another example in science upsetting us is pollution. Industrial development has brought us much wealth, but has set a big problem in front of us, that is pollution. Love Canal, a small town in upstate New York, was destroyed by chemical waste that was once legally dumped. People settled there were not told of the toxicity of the chemical waste at first, and the tragedy occurred.

While, as to art, art is indispensable in our lives. When we are tired, discouraged, euphonious music may be quite the essential one to soothe us. Not only art, all other beautiful things such as neat paintings, are to impose us with beauty and a kind of tranquility.
Art also agitate us and cause us to think, introspect, and excite. Take literature for example, we fluctuate with persons' experiences in novels while learn to communicate, introspect the action of our own. Art, as a whole, is a kind of beauty and reflect the state of mind in its time, solve the problem of what we are and what we will be and is to serve human for their spirits.

Finally, it is not quite exact to say "science is to reassure, art is to upset" and vice versa. Science deals with material things, serving to solve practical problems while begetting other new ones; art is for spiritual enjoyment and introspection, which is untouchable. But both science and art are serving for the benefits of humane beings and they are indispensable for the humane development. And it is up to humane for the function and use of them.
还有一个问题：But science is reassuring us while upsetting. we fluctuate with the person in novels while learn to communicate......我想表达的意思分别是“科学在reassure 我们的同时也upset“和“我们在跟随小说人物一同经历的同时我们也学会了交流......“ 。我的英文书写顺序对吗？我有点拿不定应该那部分放在前面，那部分放在后面。

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发表于 2005-1-4 14:32:46 |只看该作者

"Take science for example"以科学来作为例子?呵呵,题目要议论科学和艺术的作用,你当然要分析科学了,怎么以科学为例子呢?只能说在科学中举例把

艺术那一段只看到reassure没看到upset

But science is reassuring us while upsetting. 怪的很
we fluctuate with the person in novels while learn to communicate......我们一起和小说中的人物摇摆?

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发表于 2005-1-4 16:31:40 |只看该作者

The function of science is to reassure; the purpose of art is to upset. Therein lies the value of each.

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The view above seems to separate (C: it is weird to express like that) science and art in their values.(C: You can say: The speaker seems to be separating the values between science and art) But neither is only to reassure or upset. And their value should not be assembled(R: combined) separately(D).

Take science for example. Science reassures us in(C: are you sure “reassure” can be used like that?) revealing many myths such as the cause of thunder, lightening, typhoon. Also many convenience and benefits has science brought us. In knowing microorganisms, we can get antibiosis which is helpful in curing diseases, brewing beer and sour milk. The development in cytology, genetic engineering makes curing the once incurable diseases possible. And thanks to the accelerated development in IT, we can communicate in a more convenient and open(D) way. We chat in chatting rooms or(R: In internet can we chat on line) with the help of software such as QQ, MSN. We send and receive E-mail in just several(D) seconds or minutes(D). We share information, useful sources from(R: much easier on) internet in stead of the old troublesome ways. (C: Is it the function of science or the benefit of science? It seems that you have wasted your words.)

But science is reassuring us while upsetting(R: However, science is upsetting the world also. C: I made the change based on my understanding.). People develop science for the benefits and conveniences of themselves, and sometimes(D) they do not (A: always) think about(R: take care of) the consequences(C: You can use the word: aftermath) while only care about(R: but only) the wealth and benefits at that time(D). Clone is quite promising in solving the problem of human organism deficiency. But cloning the whole human causes dissents in morality. What will the cloned human babies' identity be? What kind of environment shall those cloned babies face? Another example in science upsetting us is pollution. Industrial development has brought us much wealth, but has set a big problem in front of us, that is pollution. Love Canal, a small town in upstate New York, was destroyed by chemical waste that was once legally dumped. People settled there were not told of the toxicity of the chemical waste at first, and the tragedy occurred(R: which leads to the tragedy).

While(R: well), as to art, art(R: it) is indispensable in our lives. When we are tired, discouraged, euphonious music may be quite the essential one to soothe us. Not only art, (A: but also) all(D) other beautiful things such as neat paintings, are to impose us with beauty and a kind of tranquility.

Art also agitates us and causes us to think, introspect, and excite. Take literature for example, we(R: our passion) fluctuates with persons'(R: character’s) experiences in novels while(D), (A: so that we can even) learn to communicate, introspect the actions of our own. Art, as a whole, is a kind of beauty and reflects the state of mind in its time, solve the problem of(R: like) what we are and what we will be and is to serve human for their spirits(?).

Finally, it is not quite exact to say "science is to reassure, art is to upset" and vice versa. Science deals with material things, serving to solve practical problems while begetting other new ones; art is for spiritual enjoyment and introspection, which is untouchable. But both science and art are serving for the benefits of humane beings and they are indispensable for the humane development. And it is up to humane for the function and use of them.
还有一个问题：But science is reassuring us while upsetting. we fluctuate with the person in novels while learn to communicate......我想表达的意思分别是“科学在reassure 我们的同时也upset“和“我们在跟随小说人物一同经历的同时我们也学会了交流......“ 。我的英文书写顺序对吗？我有点拿不定应该那部分放在前面，那部分放在后面。

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发表于 2005-1-4 16:36:29 |只看该作者

改完了语法方面的东西，现在来谈一个问题。
这个问题，导致的后果很严重。
zhangsx_1982，你有没有查过upset这个词的意思？
查了你就会知道了。

我觉得，首先一个问题，就是彻底搞清楚关键词。
所谓名不正而言不顺。
定义是关键。

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发表于 2005-1-4 19:57:57 |只看该作者

谢谢各位的意见，我会在修改发上来的。还有问glassfrog你的那个作文连接是怎么弄得？:o 这样的问题实在有点问不出口，谢谢了哈！

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发表于 2005-1-4 22:44:31 |只看该作者

The function of science is to reassure; the purpose of art is to upset. Therein lies the value of each.

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The view above seems to emphasize only one value of science and art. In fact, neither is only to reassure nor upset. And their values should not be evaluated in that way-science to reassure, art to upset.

Take science for example （请教：“拿科学来说”应该怎么表达？）. In revealing many myths such as the cause of thunder, lightening, typhoon, science reassures us that they are not the revenge from ghosts but the result of natural phenomenon. Science has also brought us many convenience and benefits. In knowing microorganisms, we can get antibiosis which is helpful in curing diseases, brewing beer and sour milk. The development in cytology, genetic engineering makes curing the once incurable diseases possible. And thanks to the accelerated development in IT, we can communicate in a more convenient way. We can chat on line with the help of software such as QQ, MSN. We send and receive E-mail in seconds. We share information and knowledge much easier on internet in stead of the old troublesome ways.(我认为IT也算科学阿)
However, science is upsetting the world also.（请教：我想表达，科学在reassure 的同时也upset怎么说，原先的表达：science is reassuring us while upsetting 不对吗？）People develop science for the benefits and conveniences of themselves, and they do not always take care of the aftermath but only the wealth. Clone is quite promising in solving the problem of human organism deficiency. But cloning the whole human causes dissents in morality. What will the cloned human babies' identity be? What kind of environment shall those cloned babies face? Another example in science upsetting us is pollution. Industrial development has brought us much wealth, but has set a big problem in front of us, that is pollution. Love Canal, a small town in upstate New York, was destroyed by chemical waste that was once legally dumped. People settled there were not told of the toxicity of the chemical waste at first, therefore calamity occurred.

Well, as to art which is indispensable in our lives, it upset us when in some extreme forms. Extreme rebellious literature is to disturb the public. And new forms of art also upset us when it breaks up our conventional notions.
But, art would not be indispensable if it always upset us. It is more inclined to serve to soothe, cheer, inspire us and so on. When we are tired or discouraged, euphonious music may be quite the essential one to soothe us. Traditional literatures can always inspire us in some aspects and teach us something. Other beautiful things such as neat paintings and grandeur buildings, are to impose us with beauty and cause us to sigh for the ingenuity of human beings.

Finally, it is not quite exact to say "science is to reassure, art is to upset" and vice versa. Science deals with material things, serving to solve practical problems while begetting other new ones; art which is untouchable, deals with spiritual things, and should be used more for spiritual enjoyment and introspection and should be used to help us solve the problems of what we are and what we will be. In fact, both science and art are serving for the benefits of human beings and they are indispensable for our development. And it is up to human for the function and use of them.
谢谢各位的意见，在各位提出的问题基础上我又改了一番，并就某些问题提出疑问，欢迎大家再批！！！