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发表于 2005-8-17 17:07:13 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Issue154:
Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators.

Should parents and communities be involved in the local schools, since education is too important to leave solely to professional educators, as the speaker claims? I tend to agree with the speaker's assertion that parents and communities must take responsibilities to help and even monitor professional educators to complete their task of teaching children.

To begin with, the most important thing for parents to do is to guarantee the children go to schools normally, which cannot be leave for professional educators to do. The first teacher of a child in his or her whole life is more possibly one of then parents, who teaches him or her basically what to do and what not to do. If parents fail to cultivate their children a proper behavior at home, then the children are less likely to give good performances at school. School educators, who have to take care of so many children at more circumstances, are impossible and incapable to make every child to behave as wonderful as possible. Even if professional educators succeed in doing so, it must have taken them considerable amount of time that they can properly use in their academic working. And countless examples illustrate that most of the greatest individuals in history have received strict education at home. As a result, parents and communities should try their best to effectively restrict children's behavior.

Secondly, it is necessary for parents, as well as communities, to financially support their children's schools. To financially support their children's schools is to support their children and give them confidence to some extent, in order that they will performance better at school. Imagine how embarrassed a child would be when he fails to persuade his parents to support his school when others are willing to donate more or less. Moreover, if parents reject to respond to some other children's requirement, how their children would think of them? They may think that their parents are not standing by them and do not care what others would think of their children. The formerly glorious images of such parents in their children's mind would be gradually diminished for the fact that they let their children feel disappointed. After a long time, those parents would discover that their children are not willing to talk to them.

Furthermore, apart from financially support the schools, parents and communities must passionately take part in schools' activities, such as being referees of sport games and judges of some reading competitions. To attend some parties held by school also reflect the parents' concern about their children and the education. In a school, one can ask any of the educators and children what he can do for the school, and the answer will usually be that there is a lot he can help.

Finally, one of the most important things for parents and communities to do is to monitor the professional educators to complete their work carefully. The power of the educators' union is getting stronger and stronger, thus some of them do not work as harder as before. Sometimes what those educators mostly care about is their salaries, as well as their leisure time and so forth. There are often children who complain that they do not receive a good education as they thought before, and even sometimes they cannot learn anything at classroom because of the educator's poor attitude. Then parents and communities can act as monitors of such educators and force them to present a careful attitude, thereby to assure their children's education.

In sum, parents and communities could and must act as a significant role in their children's education in order to guarantee their children receive a best education. Education, since its undoubted importance, cannot be solely left to a group of professional educators.

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发表于 2005-8-18 17:55:35 |只看该作者

限时写成这样不错啊
首段引述部分可以灵活一点，不要给人照搬的感觉。比如parents and communities 可以调换位置；professional educators、和solely可以换词
有些用错的词，比如body1 line3的then 很显眼 line6的 wonderful 似乎改改成副词

题目中的be involved in the local schools你是怎样理解的呢？restrict children's behavior和financially support 我觉得有点牵强

个人观点，我想听听你的意见

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发表于 2005-8-18 18:28:32 |只看该作者

限时写的，好强

Should parents and communities be involved in the local schools, since education is too important to leave solely to professional educators, as the speaker claims? I tend to agree with the speaker's assertion that parents and communities must take responsibilities to help and even monitor professional educators to complete their task of teaching children.

To begin with, the most important thing for parents to do is to guarantee the children go to schools normally, which cannot be leave for professional educators to do. The first teacher of a child in his or her whole life is more possibly one of thentheir parents, who teaches him or her basically what to do and what not to do. If parents fail to cultivate their children a proper behavior at home, then the children are less likely to givemake？ good performances at school. School educators, who have to take care of so many children at more circumstances, are impossible and incapable to make every child to behave as wonderful as possible. Even if professional educators succeed in doing so, it must have taken them considerable amount of time that they can properly use in their academic working. And countless examples illustrate that most of the greatest individuals in history have received strict education at home. As a result, parents and communities should try their best to effectively restrict children's behavior.

Secondly, it is necessary for parents, as well as communities, to financially support their children's schools. To financially support their children's schools is to support their children and give them confidence to some extent, in order that they will performance better at school. Imagine how embarrassed a child would be when he fails to persuade his parents to support his school when others are willing to donate more or less. Moreover, if parents reject to respond to some other children's requirement, how their children would think of them? They may think that their parents are not standing by them and do not care what others would think of their children. The formerly glorious images of such parents in their children's mind would be gradually diminished for the fact that they let their children feel disappointed. After a long time, those parents would discover that their children are not willing to talk to them.这个例子貌似不是很好，毕竟financially support跟chidren's performance有点远。另外，例子没有回应as well as communities,后面稍微提一下比较好吧

Furthermore, apart from financially support the schools, parents and communities must passionately take part in schools' activities, such as being referees of sport games and judges of some reading competitions. To attend some parties held by school also reflect the parents' concern about their children and the education. In a school, one can ask any of the educators and children what he can do for the school, and the answer will usually be that there is a lot he can help.好像又没回应 communities

Finally, one of the most important things for parents and communities to do is to monitor the professional educators to complete their work carefully. The power of the educators' union is getting stronger and stronger, thus some of them do not work as harderhard as before. Sometimes what those educators mostly care about is their salaries, as well as their leisure time and so forth. There are这里用There be 句型好像不妥，用It is强调句型？ often children who complain that they do not receive a good education as they thought before, and even sometimes they cannot learn anything at classroom because of the educator's poor attitude. Then parents and communities can act as monitors of such educators and force them to present a careful attitude, thereby to assure their children's education.

In sum, parents and communities could and must act as a significant role in their children's education in order to guarantee their children receive a best education. Education, since its undoubted importance, cannot be solely left to a group of professional educators.

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楼主怎么写的，限时能写这么多？教教我
楼主帮忙拍一下，谢谢！
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