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发表于 2005-12-31 21:39:04 |只看该作者

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67The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a newspaper serving the villages of Castorville and Polluxton.
"Both the villages of Castorville and Polluxton have experienced sharp declines in the numbers of residents who pay property taxes. To save money and improve service, the two villages recently merged their once separate garbage collection departments into a single department located in Castorville, and the new department has reported few complaints about its service. Last year the library in Polluxton had 20 percent fewer users than during the previous year. It follows that we should now further economize and improve service, as we did with garbage collection, by closing the library in Polluxton and using the library in Castorville to serve both villages."
提纲：
1）：作者没有提供足够的证据说明合并垃圾回收站可以节省钱和提高服务质量；
2）：作者把图书馆的服务与垃圾回收处服务的比较是不合理的，二者有着许多不同点；
3）：作者没有考虑到其他省钱和提高服务质量的方法；
[提纲很清晰]
In this argument, the writer of the letter claims that closing the library in Polluxton and using the library in Castorville are in favor of economizing and improving service, and then serve to both villages. To support his or her conclusion, the writer cites the new department incorporated by making use of once separate garbage collection departments has reported few complaints about its service. Additionally, the writer also says that last year the number of users in the library of Polluxton had declined 20 percent than during the previous year. This argument ultimately fails as it suffers from several critical fallacies.

First of all, the writer of the letter fails to provide sufficient evidence that merging the garbage collection departments succeeded in saving money and improving service for the two villages. It is entirely possible that the cost and expense of the new department are so high that saving money is impractical. Without providing the amount of cost and profit, the arguer cannot convince me that the new department can save money. The fact that complaints declined in the new department does not mean service is improved. Perhaps people in both the villages of Castorville and Polluxton have tended to recycle rubbish, and the trash that people produce in both the villages of Castorville and Polluxton were transported to other villages nearby. Because charges for garbage collection in both the villages of Castorville and Polluxton increase to the point that people are not willing to do garbage disposal in the new department. If so, then the writer of the letter could hardly justify the claim that the service is improved just because of the foundation of the new department.

Secondly, the arguer commits a fallacy of false analogy for [for不能接从句吧？] the library service and the garbage collection service are different in many respects [aspects]. Admittedly, even though the newly merged department has good service, then whether using the library in Castorville serves to both the villages of Castorville and Polluxton and has excellent service is unwarranted [语法上没什么错误，但是感觉句子头重脚轻，而且有点chinese English,个人意见，呵呵] How many kinds of books in library, whether the circumstance in library is fit for reading, and how long the library opens everyday greatly influence the library’s service even determine it. Charges for garbage collection, the total capacity of the new department, and the distance from residents’ home to the new department are the main concerns that people in both the villages of Castorville and Polluxton[感觉这句对下文的分析没多大的用处啊]. It is likely that the users in the library in Polluxton declined 20 percent than the previous year since people’s income increases that they can buy kinds of books needed for them. Thus regardless of the service in the library of Castorville the residents might not be content with its service.

Finally, the arguer overlooks other possible solutions in order to further economize and improve service. In all likely the authorities in both the villages of Castorville and Polluxton could take actions such as encouraging people buy books by themselves according to their own interests while closing both the libraries, or establishing more severe rules to ask the staff of both the libraries do better job without closing either of the two libraries.

In conclusion, the letter for closing the library in Polluxton and using the library in Castorville are in favor of economizing and improving service is not well supported. To bolster the argument the writer must provide sufficient and direct evidence that merging the garbage collection departments succeeded in saving money and improving service for the two villages. The writer must also provide clear evidence that closing the library in Polluxton and using the library in Castorville contribute to improve service.

基本没什么问题，呵呵，如果段落之间平衡点更好，驳斥第一第二的逻辑错误时笔墨比较多，第三个就略显单薄点，个人意见，仅供参考，呵呵

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