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发表于 2007-7-22 07:02:57 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

题目：ARGUMENT200 - Statistics collected from dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. Thus, dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients.
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In this argument, the arguer suggests the dentist to target the male consumer. However, I cannot agree with this assertion, since there are some flaws as follows.

First of all, the arguer cites the statistics collected from dentists and this is unreliable. As the arguer have no details about this statistics. In addition, the sample ages, genders, backgrounds are also omitted in this statistics, which could not hold back people to discredit the reliability of this statistics.

What' more, the statistics indicate that three times more men than women is worth us to doubt. As there is no specific numbers of this men and women, so we cannot trust this indication of the statistics. Maybe there is only four men and one woman in the group. Maybe the men are the kind of easy-distressed and the women is not.

To sum up, in order to prove the dentist should target the male consumer, it is necessary to provide extensive and convincing proof. The arguer fails to do that.

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沙发

发表于 2007-7-22 07:03:52 |只看该作者

实在写不出来什么好的argu，大家狠狠批吧

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板凳

发表于 2007-7-22 08:03:51 |只看该作者

大叔，我要向你学习，你这么早就爬起来了，55555
恩，我觉得段落中间可能应该多写点other possibilities吧，这样就可以丰富起来了。
至于错误点，我想可以从三个方面来说吧：
1，关于调查的科学性和可信度
2，就算数据可信，也不一定是由于害怕弄牙齿而导致的晕啊
3，关于建议，这样就可以让人家胆小男过来看牙齿了吗？

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地板

发表于 2007-7-22 08:08:04 |只看该作者

回复 #3 果小冻的帖子

我昨晚没睡啊～

喝了一杯咖啡

然后就睡不着了

早早的就起来写aw了

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发表于 2007-7-22 08:38:50 |只看该作者

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发表于 2007-7-22 09:07:32 |只看该作者

回复 #4 Orange&Blue 的帖子

:eek: 啊，大叔，身体要紧的，是干革命的本钱的拉:loveliness:

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发表于 2007-7-22 09:09:37 |只看该作者

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说的是啊，不过就是睡不着啊

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8楼

发表于 2007-7-22 10:41:30 |只看该作者

1、统计有效性？看病的人数男女是否一致，男的更多。另外男女的病情是否一致。即使有效，昏的多推不出容易感到痛楚。男女的忍受能力不一样。
2、另外错误假设：男的因为怕疼不来，而女人都来。因而应该针对男性？可能很多男性因为需要都来了，反而是女的很多没来。女的就不紧张？
3、即使，宣传有效？医护人员的敏感：不能消除紧张反而可能加重

我自己写的提纲，但是觉得这道题很恶心。

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