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76. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.
A wit once remarked that every coin has two sides. Whether or not children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school is an issue, as it were, which not only has two sides, but also has generated a heated debate. (觉得这个开头更简洁些更好)With the proponents claiming that to lead children learning a foreign language in the most efficient way, they should learn it at the beginning of school. On the other hand, the opponents claiming that children should spend their precious school time to study something more technical, such as piano, basketball, or computer, for a comprehensive development. As far as I am concerned, however, it is an issue which I would like to treat the both sides equally before offering personal ideas. The main reason why those people lend their supports to the positive opinion is that they regard the early period of children's life as the best time to learn a foreign language. 这个句子让你读起来觉得累,可以适当精简些,把和前面重复的意思用代词代过即可Actually, it is an undeniable fact that a man's learning ability is at his best when he was young, so is the status of his memory. Intheir points of view, therefore, It is absurd to develop children's other skills instead of learning a foreign language. For example, it is obvious that if I am at my best time to do some sports, such as basketball, due to my excellent body condition, why would I do the practice for math?
For the people who oppose this idea, the necessity of developing some other skills for kids is the prime reason. Studying something, which is more complicated than language, is indispensable for children's future development. Otherwise, as a vast and varied country, especially a developing country, the elite we need is not only excellent linguist, but also outstanding athlete, brave soldier, and talented architect. In other words, learning foreign language is just a tiny part of one's life, people can also develop something more useful, or special, at their best time of learning, which is the beginning of school.文章强调的是你自己的观点,觉得这方面你讲的太少了 In summary, it is very likely that people will never come to the same conclusion on this controversial issue that children should start studying a foreign language as soon as they attend school or not due to their different experiences and conflicting values, and the public awareness on various dimensions of this issue discussed in the above argument will certainly contribute to thorough understanding of this problem. Moreover, if I were someone's parent, I would give a chance to my kid to decide it by his or her own.
总体来看,作者是花了时间斟酌字句的,但由于不够具体而显得有些无力,建议去读读OG的范文,那些范文虽然没有特别突出的词句,但很具体,这也体现的要求中的SPECIFIC一词
另外建议楼主尽量谈自己的观点,涉及到和别人的观点比较或用别人的观点来衬托自己观点的情况时,也应该以自己的观点为主 |
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