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发表于 2007-8-18 00:01:19 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

hen famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. Do you think we should pay attention to these opinions? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Nowadays, entertainers and athletes are popular due to the development of media and advertisement. When we look around ourselves, these people appear either on a court, a stage or a screen and they are in fact more famous than many political officers. Many people like to listen to these famous people as if their words were gospel. personally I do not think this is correct behavior.
Stars should be treated with respect, but being a star does not mean that their opinions are more correct than regular people. Their popularity may be attributed to their excellent performance or splendid singing, but becoming a star does not automatically endow this person with limitless knowledge. For instance, some stars are even not familiar with their countries' history and have made some stupid mistakes in public. If the teenage imitate those stars, what a wrong road they have been led. We need not listen to them unless they have done research to form their opinions.
Futhermore, in many cases, when stars state their opinions, they are not telling how they truly feel but to cheat the audiences for their personal interests. For example, many stars advertise for certain goods. But they may not use the good they advertised for at all. In fact their opinions we heard are that of the corporations they work for.
I believe that the only time we should really value the opinion of a star more than we value others' opinions is when the star is talking about a subject he specializes in. Like a physicist talking about the physical essential, Beckham could give some good advices about how to build up a good football team. Everyone has hisown field of expertis. If stars could talk about their professions, they are bound to have extensive knowledge on the subject and deserve people's attention.
In conclusion, good opinions only come from the expert in the area.I do not think that we should listen to these stars' opinions unless they are talking about the matter that they specialize in.

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发表于 2007-8-18 11:58:19 |只看该作者

Nowadays, entertainers and athletes are popular due to the development of media and advertisement. When we look around ourselves, these people appear either on a court, a stage or a screen and they are in fact more famous than many political officers. Many people like to listen to these famous people as if their words were gospel 用词挺好. personally I do not think this is correct behavior.

Stars should be treated with respect, but being a star does not mean that their opinions are more correct than regular people. Their popularity may be attributed to their excellent performance or splendid singing这个包含在performance里面，可以把performance改一下, but becoming a star does not automatically endow this person with limitless knowledge. For instance, some stars are even not familiar with their countries' history and have made some stupid mistakes in public. If the teenagers imitate those stars小心，有点离题,原文讲listen to, not imitate, what a wrong road they have been led. We need not listen to them unless they have done research to form their opinions.

Futhermore, in many cases, when stars state their opinions, they are not telling how they truly feel but to cheat the audiences for their personal interests. For example, many stars advertise for certain goods. But they may not use the good they advertised for at all此处连续使用的虚词太多，建议改一下. In fact their opinions we heard are the the voice from those corporations they work for. (你用得that of是正确的，我只是给一个alternate)

I believe that the only time we should really value the opinion of a star more than we value others' opinions is when the star is talking about a subject he specializes in. Like a physicist talking about the physical essential, Beckham could give some good advices about how to build up a good football team. Everyone has hisown field of expertise. If stars could talk about their professions, they are bound to have extensive knowledge on the subject and deserve people's attention.

In conclusion, good opinions only come from the expert in the area.I do not think that we should listen to these stars' opinions unless they are talking about the matter that they specialize in.

总评：立场鲜明，结构清晰。
建议倒数第二段在丰富一到两句，讲people可以得到的好处。

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板凳

发表于 2007-8-18 16:05:05 |只看该作者

” they are in fact more famous than many political officers. “ 主题段的这句话是什么意思呢？题目讨论的人只要是famous 就行，没界定要多famous. 建议不要这句
第二段的teenagers 的例子有些不好，不能作为我们不pay attention的理由。
第三段的讨论不错。
第四段比较有新意，能论述详细一些更好。
文章总的来说不错。

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地板

发表于 2007-8-18 23:50:49 |只看该作者

谢谢楼上的朋友

Nowadays, entertainers and athletes are popular due to the development of media and advertisement. When we look around ourselves, these people appear either on a court, a stage or a screen and they are in fact more famous than many political officers. Many people like to listen to these famous people as if their words were gospel. personally I do not think this is correct behavior.

Stars should be treated with respect, but being a star does not mean that their opinions are more correct than regular people. Their popularity may be attributed to their excellent performances or athelete talent, but becoming a star does not automatically endow this person with limitless knowledge. For instance, some stars are even not familiar with their countries' history and have made wrong statements in public. If the teenagers listen to these celebrities' opinions, what a wrong road they have been led. We need not listen to them unless they have done research to form their opinions.

Futhermore, in many cases, when stars state their opinions, they are not telling how they truly feel but to cheat the audiences for their personal interests. For example, many stars advertise for certain goods. But they have not used the goods at all. In fact their opinions we heard are the the voice from those corporations they work for.
I believe that the only time we should really value the opinion of a star more than we value others' opinions is when the star is talking about a subject he specializes in. Like a physicist talking about the physical essential, Beckham could give some good advices about how to build up a good football team. Everyone has hisown field of expertise. If stars could talk about their professions, they are bound to have extensive knowledge on the subject and deserve people's attention.

In conclusion, good opinions only come from the expert in the area.I do not think that we should listen to these stars' opinions unless they are talking about the matter that they specialize in.

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