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练习4

Modern educational institutions do not offer all the ingredients that are needed for success.
To waht extent do you agree with the above statement?
Give reasons for your answer(胡敏《高分作文》，样题10）

Almost since the first moment of the foundation of educational insitutions,they have given rise to numerous controversies.One of the controversies is whether or not the education institutions have offered all the necessary ingredients for success.

Naturally,there may be not common understanding on what the ingredients for success really consist of,but we can still cite knowledge,emotional quality(so-called E.Q.),health as some indispensible components.

When it comes to these ingredients,I think it is commonsense that educational institutions,not being omnipotent,are not able to take full responsibilities for them.The task of developing these ingredients should be assigned to family and society,as well.And ,in the last resort,this task depends on the person himself/herself,not anyone else.The educational institutions,after all ,can merely faclitate the individual’ study,instead of replacing the person.

Now let us briefly examine the ingredients one by one.The first one is knowledge.Obviously,it’s absurd to assert that educational institutions,except for ineligible ones,cannot offer enough knowledge,at least theoretical knowledge,to their students.As for practical knowledge,it must be remembered that this kind of knowledge should be learned mainly in everyday life.It is in fact an unrealistic undertaking for educational institutions.Furthermore,there have been such courses in nearly all educational institutions for many years already,besides vocational schools.

Then let us check the second element,i.e. the emotional quality,which is famous for its abbrevation,E.Q.On the whole,emontional quanlity includes the abilities to communicate with other persons and control oneself.It is commonsense again that there are far more than one student in any one educationl institution.These students communicate with each other frequently every day,as a result,they learn how to communicate with their peers from these practices. As for the ability to control oneself,the discipline of educational institutions will help their students achieve this.In so far as health,P.E. courses can be found in all schools.

Some opponents of educational establishments may cite such successful persons as Thomas Edison or Bill Gates,who have not received full regular education.I don’t think it is a valid pint.These people are nothing but exceptions.Moreover,can we afford a handful of very talented people at the price of pervasive ignorance?Can these persons fulfill themselves without their knowledge which is accumulated and transmitted by educational institutions?How can these people survive in such a bare,barbarian environment?

Whichever shortcomings educational institutions may have,they will never inhibit a person’s success.Laying too much burden on educational institutions is unfair and unrealistic.

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发表于 2007-9-7 20:35:30 |只看该作者

汗死~~~~看你写着几篇:funk:

发作文请在这里留下链接，有加分
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-724783-1-1.html
同时热心板油（牛儿天空和啦啦啦）会给你修改
如果需要菠萝修改请在这里留下链接https://bbs.gter.net/thread-729183-1-1.html
同时欢迎你也给别人改作文（有加分啊），从而学习别人的长处，更快的提高自己咯 :loveliness:

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Many people believe that migration across national borders promotes development and international understanding.Other suggest that more often it causes severe problems for the countries that people migrate from and the countries that they migrate to.
Discuss these opinions and atate your own conclusion on the issue(胡敏《高分作文》样题12）

Migration has attracted many people’s attentions now.Naturally,just like other controversial issues,diverse viewpoints whether for migration or against it,have appeared.

Frankly speaking,I am a supporter of migration.First of all,since capital,especially financial capital can freely move from one country to another,I don’t think there is any valid point against the application of the same principle to the mankind.In the last resort,it is these persons’ basic right to seek better life.In fact,it should be remembered that migration is almost as old as the birth of mankind,each person of us can be safely called the offspring of a past immigrant.

Furthermore,whether the countries send or receive immigrants,they have benefited from migration.To the immigrants’ destination,the immigrants offer labour,whether high-skilled or low –skilled,of which these countries are in great need.And this is the very reason why these countries accept them..Moreover,the homeland of these immigrants have benefited from the information,technology,money,social connections brought back by its former dwellers.

However,some people may argue that these immigrants,accepting jobs without regard to wage level.have stolen the jobs of local workers.I don’t approve it at all.Obviously,many immigrants’ jobs are the very jobs which local workers refuse due to low wage and bad environment.As for the high-skilled jobs,they are what local people are not able to do.At any rate,the immigrants are nothing but scape goats,the blame placed on them is unfair.

Some opponents may ascribe worsened racial tension to immigrants.It is not a valid point,as well.Racial tension arise from some people’s prejudices which can be applied to any alien people,e.g. the ethnic group,just as the case of Ku-Klux-Klan shows.The best way to overcome racial tension,however, is by no means excluding each alien people from our life,this way is fantastic.On the contrary,people must learn how to get on with alien cultures and life styles,they must be accustomed to these cultures and life styles.Anyway,we can no longer lead a onefold,simple lif as before in an era of globalisation.And immigrants,taking their own cultures and life styles,will facilitate cross-culture understanding a lot.

On the whole,so long as mankind has not disappeared,migration will not stop,in spite of the counterviews.

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练习6（胡敏《高分作文》样题9）

Many people consider nuclear technology to be beneficial whilst others consider that its disadvantages far outweigh any of its advantages.

What is your opinion on the issue?Give reasons for your answer.

Nuclear technology may be considered one of the most controversial issues on the earth.Both supporters and opponents have their points.

In my view,nuclear weapon is the darkest side of nuclear technology.Hiroshima and its people is only the most famous victim of it.Billions of money had been and is being spent on it,despite the fact that many other areas,such as health,education,are more urgent and meaningful.It cannot be denied that all the money had been wasted.As for so-called “war-deterrent” function,frankly speaking,I don’t believe it.World peace must not be obtained at the price of potential destruction of mankind.What’s more,,it is commonsense that nuclear weapon canot avoid regional wars and other minor but more frequent wars.

When it comes to peaceful uses of nuclear technology,however,I hold a different view.,i.e. I think it is even irreplaceable to some extent.In the first place,compared to traditional ways of electricity generation,it is cleaner.It obviously gives off much less pollutions such as so-called “green-house” gases.Many people may worry about potential accidents like Chernobyl.It is undoutedly a justified worry,but in my view it has been exaggerated too much.In fact,so long as sufficient precautions are applied,and appropriate measures are taken to deal with emergent situations,these accidents can be prevented.This has been proved by the history since Chernobyl.As for the nuclear radiation,treated by apt facilities,it will do no harm to mankind.This has been proved by science and actual operation.Its remnants,difficult to be treated as they are,can be harmless with appropriate treatment.Some people may recommend renewable energy sources,such as wave and wind power,as alternatives.But up to now,and in the foreseeable future,these renewable sources are either too unpractical or too expensive to take the place of nuclear technology in mass electricity generation.

Apart from energy generation,nuclear technology can be put to use in other fields,as well.For example,it can be used in medical treatment,MRI is one use.Thus it can save many people’s lives.

On the whole,so long as nuclear technology is under the control of world people and therefore freed from a handful of power elites,I am a supporter of it.We should come up with viable measures,instead of simply giving it up.

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请指正，谢谢。

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终于找到这个作文贴了，三篇作文，得慢慢来了~~~~~~:handshake

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Modern educational institutions do not offer all the ingredients that are needed for success.
To waht extent do you agree with the above statement?
Give reasons for your answer(胡敏《 ...

Almost since the first moment of the foundation of educational insitutions,they have given rise to numerous controversies.One of the controversies这个有点罗索了 is whether or not the education institutions have offered all the necessary ingredients for success.

Naturally,there may be not common understanding on what the ingredients for success really consist of,but we can still cite knowledge,emotional quality/the abbreviation of EQ is Quotient(so-called E.Q.),health as some indispensible components.

When it comes to these ingredients,I think it is commonsense that educational institutions,not being omnipotent,are not able to take full responsibilities for them.The task of developing these ingredients should be assigned to family and society,as well.And ,in the last resort,this task depends on the person himself/herself,not anyone else.The educational institutions,after all ,can merely faclitate the individual’ study,instead of replacing the person.

Now let us briefly examine the ingredients one by one.The first one is knowledge.Obviously,it’s absurd to assert that educational institutions,except for ineligible ones,cannot offer enough knowledge,at least theoretical knowledge,to their students.As for practical knowledge,it must be remembered that this kind of knowledge should be learned mainly in everyday life.It is in fact an unrealistic undertaking for educational institutions.Furthermore,there have been such courses in nearly all educational institutions for many years already,besides vocational schools.

Then let us check the second element,i.e.考试是不能用缩写 the emotional quality/quotient,which is famous for its abbrevation,E.Q.On the whole,emontional quanlity includes the abilities to communicate with other persons/others and control oneself.It is commonsense again that there are far more than one student in any one educationl institution.These students communicate with each other frequently every day,as a result,they learn how to communicate with their peers from these practices. As for the ability to control oneself,the discipline of educational institutions will help their students achieve this.In so far as health,P.E. courses can be found in all/这个词过于绝对了　 schools.

Some opponents of educational establishments may cite such successful persons as Thomas Edison or Bill Gates,who have not received full regular education.I don’t think it is a valid pint.These people are nothing but exceptions.Moreover,can we afford a handful of very talented people at the price of pervasive ignorance?Can these persons fulfill themselves without their knowledge which is accumulated and transmitted by educational institutions?How can these people survive in such a bare,barbarian environment?尽量不要再段落的结尾部用文句

Whichever shortcomings educational institutions may have,they will never inhibit a person’s success.Laying too much burden on educational institutions is unfair and unrealistic

大虾， 382个字，终于看完了........
你的词汇和语法，我实在不敢乱改了，pfpf ~~~~~~~
逻辑和结构也很好，论述得很深刻，正反都考虑到了；
我只想提个意见：
文章的开篇，太冗长了，开门见山，会让你的文章开篇就有力，字数也能少一点；就像你的结尾段，简洁有力，我得好好学习

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